House rules
5 Bars
No biting, No recycling etc.
3-0 KO
4-1 TKO
Or 1st to 5 votes

Check in when your ready. You spit 1st. Post links with verse. Your verse due in 24hours. Mine due 24 hours after that. Good Luck.

Check........

check.... check..... Welfare Check?

http://www.rapworlds.com/forums/showthread.php?p=1425716&posted=1#post1425716
http://www.rapworlds.com/forums/showthread.php?t=102102&page=2

Links

http://www.rapworlds.com/forums/showpost.php?p=1426386&postcount=15
http://www.rapworlds.com/forums/showpost.php?p=1425566&postcount=25

links

i Step "slowly" but "surely" thinkin through my "moves" so "i act rite"
Each word i "spread" like "salt" "dissolveing" this "Black Ice"

guess im THAT NICE~ but this kid chose the wrong name cuse i break the ice
bomb game leaven em shook as in the same way i shake the dice

my verse So "Sick" he cant "avoid" or "resist" even if he gotta "flu Shot"
now he sees what this dudes Got, i make em "hustle" like hes gotta "move rocks"

nah im playin..but literally im not joking. im really playin you dawg!
so like an "opressed community" would do yall can just "pray ti yah god"

no hard feelings tho,i just hope he signs on to face the newest DS Icon
he said he was "Rusty" so like my "gramas ol'wagon" his "shines gone"!

You a virgin to this game, you played on my name for 2 'bars'
The only way i'd hear you coming is if you was ridin in a cop 'car'/*

Maybe you ain't a virgin, when i see you've been talkin about 'Hood rat love'
Guess your dying of aids now? Risky Bizz to forget that 'Hood rat glove'/**

Lets get old 'school' and talk about your mum, the fuckin chicken head
I guess its old 'news' that the best bit of 'you' ran down your mums leg/

Look i'm tighter then a girl on her 1st 'time', and i'm iller then a cat on its ninth 'life'
Your slacker then your mum when i fucked her last 'night', and deader then a man being read his last 'rights'/

I got one more bar man, like you with kids then, i'll abuse it
put the mike back in my avatar, its ashamed at how you used it/

*The word virgin and cumming/coming
**http://www.rapworlds.com/forums/showthread.php?t=97579 name of a drop he put up, changed it a little and used his name for risky business.

Votes!!!!

Risky Bizz -
"i Step "slowly" but "surely" thinkin through my "moves" so "i act rite"
Each word i "spread" like "salt" "dissolveing" this "Black Ice" "

good little opener... i was disappointed in the next bar you played on his name again.... lacks the creative edge... na mean?

the "flu shot" line... eh... wasnt impressed

"nah im playin..but literally im not joking."

how you playing and not joking at the same time? just saying... good flow of your lines, punches werent hitting too hard tho

Black Ice -
"You a virgin to this game, you played on my name for 2 'bars'
The only way i'd hear you coming is if you was ridin in a cop 'car'/*"

the "cumming/coming" wordplay is not only terribly played out but in the bar, it was unnecessary... it didnt even apply to ur punch
and i kinda was disappointed that you fed off his verse to create yours...

"Maybe you ain't a virgin, when i see you've been talkin about 'Hood rat love'
Guess your dying of aids now? Risky Bizz to forget that 'Hood rat glove'/**"

decent... way to do some research and create a personal

"I guess its old 'news' that the best bit of 'you' ran down your mums leg/"

that was pretty funny... lol

_________________
punches - black ice, although it wasnt really hard hitting from either
personals - black ice
metas - n/a
structure - tie
VOTE - BLACK ICE

1-0 keep votin

idk...wasnt really feelin this battle guys

flow-bizz
multis-bizz
metas/wordplay-bizz
punches-tie
personals-bizz

vote-bizz

1 for 1

aight uppin for votes

i Step "slowly" but "surely" thinkin through my "moves" so "i act rite"
Each word i "spread" like "salt" "dissolveing" this "Black Ice"
not bad - nice punch 4/5
guess im THAT NICE~ but this kid chose the wrong name cuse i break the ice
bomb game leaven em shook as in the same way i shake the dice
alright 3/5
my verse So "Sick" he cant "avoid" or "resist" even if he gotta "flu Shot"
now he sees what this dudes Got, i make em "hustle" like hes gotta "move rocks"
mehh 2/5
nah im playin..but literally im not joking. im really playin you dawg!
so like an "opressed community" would do yall can just "pray ti yah god"
mehhhhh 2/5
no hard feelings tho,i just hope he signs on to face the newest DS Icon
he said he was "Rusty" so like my "gramas ol'wagon" his "shines gone"!
not great 3/5

14/25


You a virgin to this game, you played on my name for 2 'bars'
The only way i'd hear you coming is if you was ridin in a cop 'car'/*
Alright opener 3/5
Maybe you ain't a virgin, when i see you've been talkin about 'Hood rat love'
Guess your dying of aids now? Risky Bizz to forget that 'Hood rat glove'/**
naww 2/5
Lets get old 'school' and talk about your mum, the fuckin chicken head
I guess its old 'news' that the best bit of 'you' ran down your mums leg/...
..??? 2/5
Look i'm tighter then a girl on her 1st 'time', and i'm iller then a cat on its ninth 'life'
Your slacker then your mum when i fucked her last 'night', and deader then a man being read his last 'rights'/
nice one 4/5 (would be 5/5 except for the "fuck your mum" thing)
I got one more bar man, like you with kids then, i'll abuse it
put the mike back in my avatar, its ashamed at how you used it/
hahah nice closer 5/5


16/25


VOTE: BLACK_ICE

alright battle, black_ice just showed hes been doin this a little longer, keep at it both of you.


and if you cbf check links below n vote (sorry)
http://www.rapworlds.com/forums/showthread.php?p=1427823#post1427823 (http://www.rapworlds.com/forums/showthread.php?p=1427823#post1427823)
http://www.rapworlds.com/forums/showthread.php?t=110518

2-1 will return the favour soon. got a lecture now

up . . . up . . . and away!!!!

punches-tied
personals-RB
metas-tied
nameplay-RB
wordplay-none
flow-tied

overall-RB

ok 2-2

RiskyBizz

i Step "slowly" but "surely" thinkin through my "moves" so "i act rite"
Each word i "spread" like "salt" "dissolveing" this "Black Ice"
^.."this" is "not" "wordplay"! "stop" doing "this" unless "you have" something to "say" that we "should" be "looking" for...And it makes u look wacker.

my verse So "Sick" he cant "avoid" or "resist" even if he gotta "flu Shot"
now he sees what this dudes Got, i make em "hustle" like hes gotta "move rocks"
^avoid basing your whole idea around just 1 word. the metaphors that sound ill include an expression of multiple words in them...your's here is "hustle"/"move rocks"...which is easily gotten but way too simple. why couldn't say something like: he'll have ta "hustle his (w)raps to people quicker" than "deli's at their busiest time of the day!"..doesn't that sound a little more in depth and better? GO TRY IT.


no hard feelings tho,i just hope he signs on to face the newest DS Icon
he said he was "Rusty" so like my "gramas ol'wagon" his "shines gone"!
^somewhat dissed yourself by talking about your own grandmother.

Black Ice

...said it's been a year since you battled? from this it seems like it's been longer:


You a virgin to this game, you played on my name for 2 'bars'
The only way i'd hear you coming is if you was ridin in a cop 'car'/*
^after virgin to the game, whole bar fell off. 2 bars personal was good..but you didn't set it up really, you just threw your card out.

Maybe you ain't a virgin, when i see you've been talkin about 'Hood rat love'
Guess your dying of aids now? Risky Bizz to forget that 'Hood rat glove'/**
^from the start this punch is wack..cuz you played off the virgin idea from the first bar which is probably not true in the first place unless u know him. In a live battle u'd get killed cuz the opponent will just flip it on you and give you an awakening making you look weaker...just stick to what u know, never "speculate" ideas on them. This could've been a simple nameplay line like: "so i'll be clipping risky bizz faster than CEO's hiding a corporate scandal!". Not once did u really say something like that.

Bottomline: you guys speculate and theorize too much, just keystyle/rap about the facts and what is there in the battle..stop thinking so much and theorizing on your own ideas you brought in. The Virgin thing was weak Ice cuz it wasn't known to be true and no one really knows either of you for that punch to be understood or hit hard. Risky Bizz you used too many "qoutation marks" on useless words in the punch and the punches them selves were almost non existant in effect. Focus less on trying to just say ill wordplay or metaphors...and more on the strength of your ideas/thoughts and the context you write them in cuz the best idea or punch can sound wack executed improperly.

Vote=Black Ice, had a little more intensity in thought..tho' both didn't really have any strong punchlines.

aight 3-2, more votes guys
also thanks han for tips, note. this was my first text battle also

nice
punches=rb
meths=rb
struct=black ice
wordplay=black
display=rb
injoyed=rb
nice battle keep up the talent
vote =risky business for overall better keystlye and punches you'll need a round 2

Thats 3-3. there won't be a round2. i'm not really a battler. i just do it when i get bored.

up.......

Black Ice

the other guy didnt have any punhces...
struc-Black
metis-black
punches-black
vocab-both
creativity-black

Vote Black Ice

4-3 damn this is goin on for ages

hurry up and get your votes in.

uppin

You a virgin to this game, you played on my name for 2 'bars'
The only way i'd hear you coming is if you was ridin in a cop 'car'/*
ok

Maybe you ain't a virgin, when i see you've been talkin about 'Hood rat love'
Guess your dying of aids now? Risky Bizz to forget that 'Hood rat glove'/**
naw

Lets get old 'school' and talk about your mum, the fuckin chicken head
I guess its old 'news' that the best bit of 'you' ran down your mums leg/
Ok coo

Look i'm tighter then a girl on her 1st 'time', and i'm iller then a cat on its ninth 'life'
Your slacker then your mum when i fucked her last 'night', and deader then a man being read his last 'rights'/
Deader? otherwise decent

I got one more bar man, like you with kids then, i'll abuse it
put the mike back in my avatar, its ashamed at how you used it/
Decent

*The word virgin and cumming/coming
**http://www.rapworlds.com/forums/showthread.php?t=97579 name of a drop he put up, changed it a little and used his name for risky business.


i Step "slowly" but "surely" thinkin through my "moves" so "i act rite"
Each word i "spread" like "salt" "dissolveing" this "Black Ice"
ILL.

guess im THAT NICE~ but this kid chose the wrong name cuse i break the ice
bomb game leaven em shook as in the same way i shake the dice
Wack

my verse So "Sick" he cant "avoid" or "resist" even if he gotta "flu Shot"
now he sees what this dudes Got, i make em "hustle" like hes gotta "move rocks"
Nah Played

nah im playin..but literally im not joking. im really playin you dawg!
so like an "opressed community" would do yall can just "pray ti yah god"
Hmmph no

no hard feelings tho,i just hope he signs on to face the newest DS Icon
he said he was "Rusty" so like my "gramas ol'wagon" his "shines gone"!
Eh


WOW riskys first bar was cool
but it went all downhill from there

and ice had decent bars.....
So quanity wins over quality in this one
ice gets the vote


step up though
Naw what i mean

Ok 5-3. Close this. Rank me aswell. Thankyou