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Tuesday 11:30 EST

hammered drunk



Its uncertain what your reppin kid, everyone know its never deff-in-it
Too big a deficit, couldn’t drop an essay if he was throwin Mexicans
quick to fold under pressure, got deff fallin apart like chronic lepers
put asterisks on your balls, cause im like steroids the way ill taint your record
I take out backs, and leave this spineless coward to rot in the outback*
Your outmatched, battling me is like tryin to catch a kangaroo with a mousetrap
Stab you with your stilletos im ruthless, not callin you a bitch but if the shoe fits
kids put my raps in needles and try to shoot it, Im servin up more smack than Frank Lucas**
Its like I got the circus in deep thought the way I make this clown wonder
if he could ever elevate his game when hes from the land down under


*hes from australia--connect the dots

**frank lucas was the guy 'american gangster' was about....servin up a mil of heroin a day to harlem

http://www.rapworlds.com/forums/showthread.php?p=1436038

oh k k k

http://www.rapworlds.com/forums/showthread.php?t=108669

http://www.rapworlds.com/forums/showthread.php?p=1436041&posted=1#post1436041


lookin forward to your verse homie...,better drop fire

http://www.rapworlds.com/forums/showthread.php?p=1436044

second link..I'm so tired im straining to write this 3/5 bars done

Now watch as I take the piss outta' you - cos this kids DS "But Not The Crew*!"
You hit on "Down Under" but you bit on Scribe's** name, I guess that makes you- Hypocritically Lame!/


I'm like a stroke the way I provoke attacks at your brain, You choke at the right time making you a "Practical-Joke"
You fail to impress, thats what I dare to suggest -you couldn't find the beat if you were "Black and Under Arrest!!"/

I'll destroy you empirically, I'm lyrically confident, thats why I'll exploit you literally just like the "Dark-Continent***"
Raise your hands solemnly for the loss of Scribes fans, cos bro your just a gay-fad like this was "Colour me Badd****"/

Deff'll disrupt your perfect record, if its any consolation I'm sure you'll come a close second
Cos this "Kangaroo" might just happen to devour you, like you were the "Capital of Peru!*****"/

Kid your wet behind the ears, cos even "When The Smokes Clear*******" we're still waiting for your skills to appear!
Now let me be frank, your a dirtier than a septic tank- thats why You Paid the Sperm Bank Yet Still Shot Off Blank!!!/

* DaScribe = DS, DS = Down Syndrome, the crew is Def Syndicate
** New Zealander MC - Scribe
*** Another name for Africa, we all know about exploitation in Africa??
**** Boy Band ..not gay enough? Heres a link to one of their songs: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ZvkD9rYoXOQ&feature=related (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ZvkD9rYoXOQ&feature=related) ..thank me later
***** Lima, Kangaroos eat Lima Beans
****** A written drop he did

nice drop deff....lookin forward to some votes

Flow-DS
Punches-D
Personals-D (this cat was real close)
Wordplay-D
Multies-D

O/A-Deff

This battle was closer than the cats say it is trust me. Ya'll were bout the same its just that Deff edged out by a lil in the cats.

0-1 thanks for votin

Eyecue is you serious? lol

Flow: Deff
Multies: Dascribe
Word-play:? DS is a accronym not word-play
Vocabulary: Dascribe
Punches: Dascribe, although dascribes were pretty generic and old, deff's were straight wack.
Metaphors: Dascribe

My vote: Dascribe

^An obvious hate vote but its your call Dascribe

1. Stop commenting you fucking worthless piece of shit. You SUCK BADLY, get the fuck off the topic. GO! *points*


2. Deff-- you really need to get off my cock, your shit is worthless, on some real shit.


Illusives thoughts on me

Flow/Structure- Scribe
Punches- Scribe
Personals- Deff, I guess
Multis- None...deff had a few..but nothing really stand-out
Metas- Scribe
Vocab/W.P.- tie...both was ok on the nameplay
Creativity- Deff
Enjoy-Scribe
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Vote- Scribe

Pretty Close!...Deff u kinda fed off his verse a lil...but i aint a mod so i dont really care. ..but this is the same as the last battle of urs i voted on...ur structure kills ur flow for me...i can read it...but it takes a few attempts to understand the rhyme scheme...i think u need 2 clean it up a bit...it kills ur flow which hurts ur punches...So i gotta go wit scribe on this...clean flow, nice punch....lack multis n creativity..but enough to take this I think

I'm cool with the vote, but just wondering how I fed off his verse?

like the down under flip...n the kangaroo...

u jus fed off his bar n flipped it back on em...but i dunno if yall were allowing that or not...i didnt read the rules i jus voted

How is it a hate vote? I've had quarales with both of you. I voted on the art not the artist. Deff your punches don't hit hard at all for example..


Now watch as I take the piss outta' you - cos this kids DS "But Not The Crew*!"
You hit on "Down Under" but you bit on Scribe's** name, I guess that makes you- Hypocritically Lame!/


All you did was call him hypocritically lame.. how the fuck is that a punchline?


I'm like a stroke the way I provoke attacks at your brain, You choke at the right time making you a "Practical-Joke"
You fail to impress, thats what I dare to suggest -you couldn't find the beat if you were "Black and Under Arrest!!"/



^ extremly weak, (beat meaning police?) lol called him a practical joke.? no punch.

I hated it.

Where as Dascribe had actual punchlines, for example.


Its uncertain what your reppin kid, everyone know its never deff-in-it
Too big a deficit, couldn’t drop an essay if he was throwin Mexicans



I've seen so many different versions of this punchline I'm not feeling it, but still better than his.


I take out backs, and leave this spineless coward to rot in the outback*
Your outmatched, battling me is like tryin to catch a kangaroo with a mousetrap


If you compare line to line, he left you "outmatched" like a burnt out match stick. So take it or leave it.

i say we count the vote unless u absoloutly disagree with it...he broke it down enough

i was clownin on him in that thread to so i dont think it was a hate vote towards you


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uppin for more votes

How is it a hate vote? I've had quarales with both of you. I voted on the art not the artist. Deff your punches don't hit hard at all for example..



All you did was call him hypocritically lame.. how the fuck is that a punchline?



^ extremly weak, (beat meaning police?) lol called him a practical joke.? no punch.

I hated it.

Where as Dascribe had actual punchlines, for example.




I've seen so many different versions of this punchline I'm not feeling it, but still better than his.



If you compare line to line, he left you "outmatched" like a burnt out match stick. So take it or leave it.


Votes counted 2-1,

Illisuve
a) I dont write for YOUR enjoyment, dont get so personal about voting.
b) Beat meaning Police officers are notorious for beating up black people
c) a burnt out much stick isnt outmatched that made no sense, your an idiot

a burnt out much stick isnt outmatched that made no sense, your an idiot

You're right dumb fuck a burnt out MUCH stick doesn't make sense.

Its uncertain what your reppin kid, everyone know its never deff-in-it
Too big a deficit, couldn’t drop an essay if he was throwin Mexicans
First line okay, second is played (essays and mexicans)
quick to fold under pressure, got deff fallin apart like chronic lepers
put asterisks on your balls, cause im like steroids the way ill taint your record
Not bad
I take out backs, and leave this spineless coward to rot in the outback*
Your outmatched, battling me is like tryin to catch a kangaroo with a mousetrap
Didn't dig this bar
Stab you with your stilletos im ruthless, not callin you a bitch but if the shoe fits
kids put my raps in needles and try to shoot it, Im servin up more smack than Frank Lucas**
Bar wasn't bad, but no real punchline
Its like I got the circus in deep thought the way I make this clown wonder
if he could ever elevate his game when hes from the land down under
Nice finisher

Overall nice verse, though pretty average; it's nice and consistent however. Flow was slightly off but good enough, multi's would help.

Now watch as I take the piss outta' you - cos this kids DS "But Not The Crew*!"
You hit on "Down Under" but you bit on Scribe's** name, I guess that makes you- Hypocritically Lame!/
First line was weak, second was abit better. And you fed with that second line, but this is just to let you know, I'm alright with feeding so long as it isn't extensive.


I'm like a stroke the way I provoke attacks at your brain, You choke at the right time making you a "Practical-Joke"
You fail to impress, thats what I dare to suggest -you couldn't find the beat if you were "Black and Under Arrest!!"/
First line weak, it makes you look like you're trying too hard. Second was quite nice though, ++

I'll destroy you empirically, I'm lyrically confident, thats why I'll exploit you literally just like the "Dark-Continent***"
Raise your hands solemnly for the loss of Scribes fans, cos bro your just a gay-fad like this was "Colour me Badd****"/
Okay bar, picking up on consistency.

Deff'll disrupt your perfect record, if its any consolation I'm sure you'll come a close second
Cos this "Kangaroo" might just happen to devour you, like you were the "Capital of Peru!*****"/
First line was better than second, second was really weak to be honest, plus you fed

Kid your wet behind the ears, cos even "When The Smokes Clear*******" we're still waiting for your skills to appear!
Now let me be frank, your a dirtier than a septic tank- thats why You Paid the Sperm Bank Yet Still Shot Off Blank!!!/
Your best bar so far, nice ender

Overall, you had some decent lines here and there; you had some good ideas but executed them quite poorly. Your flow was off too. Your punches were better than Scribes, simply because you addressed him more than he addressed you in his punches.


My vote= DaScribe

Very close battle. Scribes consistency did it for me. Very close because Deff had him beat in punches (which count for a hell of alot), but Scribe had him edged out in almost every other category...so he scrapes this vote. Great battle guys.

thanks for the vote

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punches-tied
personals-scribe
metas-tied
wordplay-sribe
nameplay-tied, not much from either
flow-scribe, deff through 2 rhyme schemes in one bar which got annoying, like the first line rhymed with itslf, but the second line started a new scheme all in the same bar.

vote-dascribe


good battle guys, deff i see that your elevating, work on that flow i've seen your text/topicals i know you can flow smooth.

also to both, i think the bars could have been worded better to hit harder, but it was pretty close and thats what competition is all about.

stay up fam *reps both

thanks for the feed snale...

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nice battle deff...lemme know if u ever wanna colab or battle again

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