Aight...
4-5 Bars
House Rules
Standard Voting (Bar-by-Bar or CATs Only)
No Deadline...Jus ASAP
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Check...Ill have Links wit My Verse...should b soon

http://www.rapworlds.com/forums/showthread.php?p=1436679#post1436679

Check....

o yeah my bad...ill get my other link n get a verse up here soon...kinda slipped my mind

Aight F*** It...Ill get my other link after i Drop...My bad for takin so Long wit this...
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Come Get Enlightened!...Whos like Em, Jus a Few Like It, Make the whole Site Recite It
and only time ppl 'Feel Anything' "Done Low"...Is when the "Ying-Yang Twins Write It"/
So youll Get ya Frame Tightened, N Rolled on like Putty, Thinkin u Winning, Thats Funny
cause ur alias 'Dun-Lo', So, Your 'Always Left Bloodied'/ (Get It!, Like Steak!)
Im Back!..
Watching how Dunny-Front...N Fuckin wit Pay, Wont Get ya Money-Up
itll jus getcha "Stomach Churned", til ya "Dead n Urned"...Like 'Complications from Tummy Tucks'/
Ill 'Mrs. Kanye', this Crummy Chump...His best bets, 2 Turn around n jus Leave
Face the Loss n jus Grieve...cause he wouldnt b "Near Sickness", if "U-L Gotta Disease"/
But ya Squad isnt G's...You jus get the "Bitches Voting", Like "Rodham",so my only True Problems
u should b Moved 2 the Bottom...cuz u always "Start-Out Real Greezy then End-Dry, "Like "Over-Used Condoms"/
(Hilary "RODHAM" Clinton)
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Aight thats 5 i think...Drop when u can...no rush, i took forever wit this

Gettin my other link now...

Damn, I expected more, quick Key, Take notes kid....

P.S....YOUR WRITTEN RHYMES SUCK!!!!....

Ayo...
He's mistaken the fact....so I'm bakin' a rap that stays shakin' a rat, hatin' the wack...
I'm breakin' a back...Plus your 'WR's are slept on' cuz their 'too/(2) stretched', like 'couples takin' a nap!', (His 'Def Sentence Pieces')
He's always wrecked in from bars...Now I got Pay stressin', like restin' from czars...
He becons from scars....Saw he's
'outtta-
space' so I began 'Rock'N-Roll', like I was '30 Seconds from mars!',

"Ayo fuck this, pass me the weed so I could put my ashes out on these nigga's man..."

Now he's lost and found...cuz like 'pissed union workers', 'Pay' is at a 'costly down'...
Top 5 got you cocky clown!...but only 'hip-hop bitches go DE(A)F', like D.S. was founded by 'Foxy Brown'!,
DAAAMMNN!!!
He's gay in thesis....so after the stayin' ceases Roll will sway in reaches...
He'll lay in pieces...because 'excelling at an occupation', is the only way 'Pay-Increases'!,
I'll leave your tactics finished....you only battle noobs, so better hope your 'status' win it...
Pay's at his blackest minute....cuz he realized he started a crew, and soon became the wackest in it...

STEP YOUR GAME UP HOMIE....

I'll provide links later, peace and G/L....

niiice fellas..
wish RW had more battles like these *props*

..........forget it.

changed my mine.

punches-dunlo
personals-dunlo
metas-tied
wordplay-dunlo
nameplay-payroll
flow-tied

vote-dunlo
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I felt payroll fell off after his first 2 bars, your first 2 punches hit with the nameplay than after that your verse started to get real generic, both had some standout bars, but dunlo came more consistant which is why i'm giving this bought to him. Idk if your gonna count this or not cause me and dun are crew, but it's no hate i respect you both as battlers and im just getting this battle going with a vote.

so props to both, but dun has my vote this time.

http://www.rapworlds.com/forums/showthread.php?t=111600&page=2

aight theres my other link...ima get it moved when u get ur links

Nice verse btw...

AND 0-1 You

I'm watchin' a flick, after that I'll provide my links, peace....

And I'll let a couple people from DS vote as well, but I want to approve them first...You do the same...Pick a couple cats from UL who could vote....If you wanna accept Snale's vote, cool, 1-0 me, but if not, it's understandable homie....Peace, Ups....

Nah i dont care who vote...well jus screen em basically if u see something u dont like say it...n ill do the same...i think we both kno wuts acceptable n wut aint

Ups.......

DunLo's Verse:
He's mistaken the fact....so I'm bakin' a rap that stays shakin' a rat, hatin' the wack...
I'm breakin' a back...Plus your 'WR's are slept on' cuz their 'too/(2) stretched', like 'couples takin' a nap!', (His 'Def Sentence Pieces')
2/too Is Played, Punch Is Nice Tho Good Multis.
He's always wrecked in from bars...Now I got Pay stressin', like restin' from czars...
He becons from scars....Saw he's
'outtta-
space' so I began 'Rock'N-Roll', like I was '30 Seconds from mars!',
Nice Good Set Up, Nice Multis.
Now he's lost and found...cuz like 'pissed union workers', 'Pay' is at a 'costly down'...
Top 5 got you cocky clown!...but only 'hip-hop bitches go DE(A)F', like D.S. was founded by 'Foxy Brown'!,
Self Hype, And Deaf Lines Are Played. Punch Was Decent Tho.
He's gay in thesis....so after the stayin' ceases Roll will sway in reaches...
He'll lay in pieces...because 'excelling at an occupation', is the only way 'Pay-Increases'!,
I'll leave your tactics finished....you only battle noobs, so better hope your 'status' win it...
Pay's at his blackest minute....cuz he realized he started a crew, and soon became the wackest in it...
Alright.





PayRoll Verse:

Come Get Enlightened!...Whos like Em, Jus a Few Like It, Make the whole Site Recite It
and only time ppl 'Feel Anything' "Done Low"...Is when the "Ying-Yang Twins Write It"/
Nah Weak Opener.
So youll Get ya Frame Tightened, N Rolled on like Putty, Thinkin u Winning, Thats Funny
cause ur alias 'Dun-Lo', So, Your 'Always Left Bloodied'/ (Get It!, Like Steak!)
Ok..
Watching how Dunny-Front...N Fuckin wit Pay, Wont Get ya Money-Up
itll jus getcha "Stomach Churned", til ya "Dead n Urned"...Like 'Complications from Tummy Tucks'/
Decent.
Ill 'Mrs. Kanye', this Crummy Chump...His best bets, 2 Turn around n jus Leave
Face the Loss n jus Grieve...cause he wouldnt b "Near Sickness", if "U-L Gotta Disease"/
Good Attempt At Wordplay But Failed.
But ya Squad isnt G's...You jus get the "Bitches Voting", Like "Rodham",so my only True Problems
u should b Moved 2 the Bottom...cuz u always "Start-Out Real Greezy then End-Dry, "Like "Over-Used Condoms"/
(Hilary "RODHAM" Clinton)
Nice.




Overall Vote: Dunlo, His Verse Was More Consistent, He Had Better Complexity, His Multis Stuck Out The Flow In His Verse. Then Set Ups Were Legit Finished With A Solid Punch. Great Verse. PayRoll Forced His Verse. But He Had Some Decent bars, Not Enough To Win Tho. Good Battle. keep At it Stay Up To Both.

Ok, thanks R!can, that's 2-0, Ups....

Uppity Up....

http://www.rapworlds.com/forums/images/reputation/reputation_pos.gifPayRoll vs. DunLo Rd.2... (http://www.rapworlds.com/forums/showthread.php?p=1439063#post1439063)11-28-2007 02:32 PMD.C. (http://www.rapworlds.com/forums/member.php?u=37780)since i won't vote against Pay... *reps*... funny verse

^^Lol...Should this be the 3rd vote since this battle is getting slept on like a pillow?....

Lol, Just Joking, but seriously, this is a dope battle, you homo's get to voting!!!....

note: i put in effort to explain this as best as possible. so read clearly,thoroughly,and take it into consideration. i aint hating,but i just cant sugar coat nothing in here. sometimes you'll be forcing the shit out of a multi' just to have a better rhyme scheme. but in all that,you aint saying shit w/those 50 something syllables in ONE bar. heres some examples:

He's mistaken the fact....so I'm bakin' a rap that stays shakin' a rat, hatin' the wack...
^ok,dudes mistaken a fact,but you not talking about what it is. and then you say bake raps? not only that,the raps you baked will shake rats that hate the wack?

He's always wrecked in from bars...Now I got Pay stressin', like restin' from czars...
He becons from scars....Saw he's
'outtta-
space' so I began 'Rock'N-Roll', like I was '30 Seconds from mars!',
^becon from scars? aside the mis-spelling do you know what beckon means?

He's gay in thesis....so after the stayin' ceases Roll will sway in reaches...
^again,i know what a thesis is. so gay in thesis makes no sense. then sway in reaches?

I'll leave your tactics finished....you only battle noobs, so better hope your 'status' win it...
Pay's at his blackest minute....cuz he realized he started a crew, and soon became the wackest in it...
^this was the ONLY couplet that didnt seem forced to me. everything made sense and worked well together. making the setup and punch smooth. you should focus less on multi's next time cuz your not writing content. the best from your verse IMO was your closing couplet. and thats more of a personal. the rest of your concepts were poorly thought out.


Come Get Enlightened!...Whos like Em, Jus a Few Like It, Make the whole Site Recite It
and only time ppl 'Feel Anything' "Done Low"...Is when the "Ying-Yang Twins Write It"/
^poorly thought out nameplay.

So youll Get ya Frame Tightened, N Rolled on like Putty, Thinkin u Winning, Thats Funny
cause ur alias 'Dun-Lo', So, Your 'Always Left Bloodied'/ (Get It!, Like Steak!)
^again,poor nameplay. cuz the world calls that rare. not done low.

Watching how Dunny-Front...N Fuckin wit Pay, Wont Get ya Money-Up
itll jus getcha "Stomach Churned", til ya "Dead n Urned"...Like 'Complications from Tummy Tucks'/
^setup and its multi's seemed forced. could've been better. pun was played,but decent. always better than nothing. btw,dead and urned was useless in there.

Ill 'Mrs. Kanye', this Crummy Chump...His best bets, 2 Turn around n jus Leave
Face the Loss n jus Grieve...cause he wouldnt b "Near Sickness", if "U-L Gotta Disease"/
^old school generic diss. nothing special,but still better than nothing.

But ya Squad isnt G's...You jus get the "Bitches Voting", Like "Rodham",so my only True Problems
u should b Moved 2 the Bottom...cuz u always "Start-Out Real Greezy then End-Dry, "Like "Over-Used Condoms"/
^setup could've been alot better. pun was straight. again,though its played its still better than fillers.

so with the breakdown ima have to vote for Payroll. although most were played/weak or a bit poorly worded,he still stood out w/disses IMO. Dunlo was just tryna' spit multi' after multi' and sacrifice disses most the time.

btw,people need to drop that gay voting scheme and show where they felt each person shined and/or fell short. cuz what if a person spits all SICK personals vs a dude spitting alot of multi's w/one decent wordplay and one decent punch. are you going to vote for the second dude cuz he met more categories? instead of the dude who murdered him with just ONE category?

He's always wrecked in from bars...Now I got Pay stressin', like restin' from czars...
He becons from scars....Saw he's
'outtta-
space' so I began 'Rock'N-Roll', like I was '30 Seconds from mars!',
^becon from scars? aside the mis-spelling do you know what beckon means?

Definitions of beckon:


verb: signal with the hands or nod
1) Meaning he'll signal for help from/with scars.....He's gay in thesis....so after the stayin' ceases Roll will sway in reaches...
^again,i know what a thesis is. so gay in thesis makes no sense. then sway in reaches?
1)Gay in thesis = Gay in thought or plan....
2)Sway in reaches = He'll sway votes within his reach....

I'll leave your tactics finished....you only battle noobs, so better hope your 'status' win it...
Pay's at his blackest minute....cuz he realized he started a crew, and soon became the wackest in it...
^this was the ONLY couplet that didnt seem forced to me.
And you forgot one of my bars homie....

Now he's lost and found...cuz like 'pissed union workers', 'Pay' is at a 'costly down'...
Top 5 got you cocky clown!...but only 'hip-hop bitches go DE(A)F', like D.S. was founded by 'Foxy Brown'!...

But it's all good, just felt I'd explain myself.....2-1, Uppin'....

dude,those are just a force on multi's
bcuz those are not coherent sentences.

U-p-p-i-n-g

He's always wrecked in from bars...Now I got Pay stressin', like restin' from czars...
He becons from scars....Saw he's
'outtta-
space' so I began 'Rock'N-Roll', like I was '30 Seconds from mars!


Need you Say More

Vote=DunLo

yeah i think u need say more...give a lil better breakdown than that..dont care who u vote for...jus tryin keep it consistent..

i swore i voted on this...

multis-dun...it was close tho
metas-dun
wordplay-pay
flow-dun
punches-dun
personals-dun...the foxy brown line and 'soon became the wackest in it...' lines got it

good battle

vote-dunlo

that's 3-1, 4-1 if Liquid Element breaks it down further, thanks for the votes, *repped*

that's 3-1, 4-1 if Liquid Element breaks it down further, thanks for the votes, *repped*
^^^^^^^^^^^^UPPIN' THIS FUCKIN' SHIT!!!!!.....

Get your links in Dunny.

Come Get Enlightened!...Whos like Em, Jus a Few Like It, Make the whole Site Recite It
and only time ppl 'Feel Anything' "Done Low"...Is when the "Ying-Yang Twins Write It"/
2.5/5: Random multies w/ self hype hurt the bar, but the punch is nice
So youll Get ya Frame Tightened, N Rolled on like Putty, Thinkin u Winning, Thats Funny
cause ur alias 'Dun-Lo', So, Your 'Always Left Bloodied'/ (Get It!, Like Steak!)
3/5: Nice flip, but the first bar is all filler
Im Back!.. Watching how Dunny-Front...N Fuckin wit Pay, Wont Get ya Money-Up
itll jus getcha "Stomach Churned", til ya "Dead n Urned"...Like 'Complications from Tummy Tucks'/
2.5/5: Not bad, but filler first line, and punch isn’t that hard
Ill 'Mrs. Kanye', this Crummy Chump...His best bets, 2 Turn around n jus Leave
Face the Loss n jus Grieve...cause he wouldnt b "Near Sickness", if "U-L Gotta Disease"/
3.5/5: Nice bar
But ya Squad isnt G's...You jus get the "Bitches Voting", Like "Rodham",so my only True Problems
u should b Moved 2 the Bottom...cuz u always "Start-Out Real Greezy then End-Dry, "Like "Over-Used Condoms"/
3/5: This isn’t bad either, but the lines don’t really work together that well

PayRoll Overall: 14.5/25 – Not a bad verse you’ve definitely elevated, but you’re still rough around the edges. I like the use of multies, but it’s pointless if they’re not related to the punch. Use the first line to set up the punch and your bars will hit harder. But I did see some nice punches, so props on that.

He's mistaken the fact....so I'm bakin' a rap that stays shakin' a rat, hatin' the wack...
I'm breakin' a back...Plus your 'WR's are slept on' cuz their 'too/(2) stretched', like 'couples takin' a nap!', (His 'Def Sentence Pieces')
3/5: Filler multies, but nice personal
He's always wrecked in from bars...Now I got Pay stressin', like restin' from czars...
He becons from scars....Saw he's 'outtta-space' so I began 'Rock'N-Roll', like I was '30 Seconds from mars!',
2/5: Not really feeling this…. Flow is a little off and too much filler. The punch is weak imo too.
Now he's lost and found...cuz like 'pissed union workers', 'Pay' is at a 'costly down'...
Top 5 got you cocky clown!...but only 'hip-hop bitches go DE(A)F', like D.S. was founded by 'Foxy Brown'!,
2.5/5: First punch is badly worded and second one is streched/weak
He's gay in thesis....so after the stayin' ceases Roll will sway in reaches...
He'll lay in pieces...because 'excelling at an occupation', is the only way 'Pay-Increases'!,
2.5/5: This could have been better worded, and the first line doesn’t really add to your punch
I'll leave your tactics finished....you only battle noobs, so better hope your 'status' win it...
Pay's at his blackest minute....cuz he realized he started a crew, and soon became the wackest in it...
3.5/5: By far your best bar, nice punches and personals

DunLo Overall: 13.5/25 – You could have won this battle with stronger punches and less reliance on the filler multies. Some of the wording in punches hurt you, and you didn’t really set up your punches either. Not bad, but I would have expected more.

Vote: PayRoll….. I hate to vote against my boy Dun, but I feel like PayRoll just came harder in this one.....

Ok, voting stands at 3-2.....Upping

And I'll have my links within a short time Burd, I'm at work and busy son...

Peace....

whoever has the most votes within 24 hours wins....

This has been up for nearly a week, uppin'....

yeah im wit that i dont even care at this pt

Yeah, you're a mod now, so get your links in! :).

3-2 DunLo

Im about to close this up, any objections?.....

One Link.....
http://www.rapworlds.com/forums/showthread.php?p=1453936#post1453936

Apart from you not getting links?

2nd Link....
http://www.rapworlds.com/forums/showthread.php?p=1453945#post1453945

There's both links Burd, fuck you homie....lol

Good battle Pay, seems I barely pulled this one out...we'll do it again sometime in the future, I'm sure of it....

Peace....

Haha thanks man :):) <3.