This is a written ima put up soon...but i wanted some feed b4 i did so...its a lil rough around the edges right now...its kinda of a rough draft cuz i havent fixed the structure or ne thing...jus kinda keyed it up..havent even worked it together really...
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Pay attention n Listen, Cause wut Im sayin is True
Im Nice!
thats y im the Most Hated, outta the Most Hated on Crew
I showed Elevation, n the Hating jus Grew
But I aint Trippin
cuz when it comes to real niggas here...It Aint but a Few
Outside a the Apes in my Crew...The Rest Stink! like they Bathed in their Poo
n we spit that sick shit...Like we Ate Number 2
Im The One! yall Ranked Number 2, So i aint under you
Im on Top a my Game, n u just the Scrapes from my shoe
my inspiration has grew, u aint in my View, but Hate n do wut u do
jus kno my Goons, Run it Back! like Makin Mistakes in the Booth,
Or a Street Game a Hoops/

Voters hate on my verses, then go make a Spin Off my concepts
I make no Claim to the Top Text, but ill go the whole site waiting, anticipating
to see wut Ill Drop Next...N u Phonies is Not Threats
cuz Im wut yall Look Up 2, like Point Gaurds makin a Clock Check
U Aint that Hot Yet!...N they all Remember Me, from my vivid imagery
n wit a Focused energy, Ill injure All my Enemies
I got the Remedy...thats y wut yall call a dime, Is Not a Ten to Me
My last dame was a Centerpiece...Its not smart tempting me, Ill release my Inner G
n leave u Face down on ur stomach, squirming...Like a Centipede
Or Floating in the Sea!

Look, Im Done wit All the Madness...
people quick 2 critique a piece, but then No Vet accepts a Challenge
they dont want their records ravished, n rather keep a certain Status
but when its all said n done, its been since birth that theyve been Average
Said it before n Ill say it again...Im Done wit All the Madness
U wanted War?...Then u shall Have It!/
(Cause when it Comes to beef, Im like a Magnet)
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there ya go...i still have 2 fix a few things...but im lookin for some good feed...wut u like wut u hate...if i should take something out, etc...Dont b shy about it...constructive criticism is Welcome (preferred actually)

also i need a name for this piece too...so throw some ideas out 4 that

try harder with multis all i can say

oh and:
Outside a the Apes in my Crew...The Rest Stink! like they Bathed in their Poo
^that poo line was mad gay [no offense]
reword it or somethin

but i have no idea for a name

thx..keep feed coming..yeah ima take some of it out n reword some it...it was kinda keyed thats y its so weird..but i already got a few ideas of my own from reading it cuz its hard 2 tell when ur writing...ill give this a couple more hrs..then ima fix it n post it...so lets get some more feed

ah aight, if you're gonna reword some of it, try a little harder with the vocabulary, and i think you're set