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-Evey-
07-05-2004, 09:45 PM
This is a story i wrote just for rw. Its going to be an on going thread of entrys. FEED BACK IS NEEDED. I hope you all enjoy it
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The Diary Of A Sexaholic
By: D.N.H

P r o l o g u e

“My name is La’Tanya Angelique Walker and I’m a Sexaholic" “Hi La’Tanya” the group of nine other sex addicted females greeted me. I sat back down and began to question how I got myself into this situation. Yes I love sex, but who doesn’t? It’s just so good. Ok maybe it is a little bad, but for the most part its good real good so good that…Um Umm Ummm . See there I go again getting my panties all wet thinking about thing that has fucked up my life and landed me here in SAA classes. In a way I needed this maybe this will help me, since no one else can.

“Good after noon ladies my name is Faith and I will be your counselor for the next wonderful and glorious 12 weeks.” “Hi Faith” we all greeted the voluptuous woman who odiously drank a little too much red bull before she came here. She was literally bounding around the room smiling from ear to ear like she was Ms. Ray of Sunshine. I mean no one is ever that fuckin happy unless they just got fucked. Yep, that’s what it is she had a “wonderful and glorious” helping of dick before she got here. Pssh and she’s suppose to be the counselor, then again I guess to be a counselor for a bunch of sexually overactive females you have to be able to relate. So if that means getting dicked down before a session then by all means do ya damn thing. Just don’t come in here and rub it in our faces, wit ya smilin’ n shit.

“This session will be the shortest of the sessions that we have. This is just our “getting to know one another” session. Feel free to mingle with each other and share your stories since you will be doing so next week. You might as well get used to it. You have an hour to do walk around and chit chat. Before we go home we will re group for some important information. With that ladies you’re on your own” faith smiled an I hope this hour goes fast because I’ve got thangs to do smile at the group and walked out the room. For a few minutes the room was dead silent, everyone was just looking around the room at each other. I decided that enough was enough. So being the natural ringleader that I am I was the first to speak. “So…Any Stories?” the room remained silent. “I guess that means that I have to share mine” I sighed “…It all started when I was sixteen years old…”


5/10/95

Dear Diary,

I can’t believe I did it...me and Dom went all the way home. I knew that I was going to do it one day but man I didn’t know that it was going to be with him. He is sooo sexy. See me and Dom have been going steady for almost a whole month. Last night we were talking on the phone and he asked me to come over since we didn’t have school today, and I said yeah. So in the morning after my mom left for work. I took a bath, got dressed and went to Dom’s house. When I got there he fixed me breakfast and we ate together. He was such a gentle men. After that we went up stairs in his room and watched TV. I got bored and asked him to teach me how to play Nintendo since I didn’t have one at home. At first I didn’t know what I was doing and he kept beating me. But when I got the hang of it I beat him and made it all the way up to level 4 on Mario.

After that we were chillin’ you know kissin’ and all that. He was a really good kisser. He kept biting my bottom lip and movin’ his tongue around my mouth. I’m really not an expert on slobbing but he was so I just let him take over. After about 10 minutes of kissing my lips, he moved to my neck. When he started kissing my neck I got this funny but good feeling in the pit of my stomach and lower. After 10 more minutes of that and kissing my ears. I started to get hot. Not sweaty 90 degrees in the summer time hot. But you know HOT HOT like my body was on fire. So I started to take off my shirt, he pushed my hands away and finished taking it off for me. Then he took of his shirt. I had never seen Dom with his shirt off before but man it was a beautiful thing.

He proceeded to take off my bra I tried to help but he just moved my hands away again. Once he got the bra off his face disappeared in my chest. He started kissing and licking and ohhhhh! It was great. While he was doing that he was taking off my pants. I sat up and kicked them off then I started to work on his. When his pants fell to the floor I nearly died. I honestly have never seen one before except for my baby brother Montell’s. But Dom’s was nothing like his. It was huge and sticking out like it wanted to say hi to me or something. At that point I got scared. I started to back away but Dom gently grabbed my hands and told me that he wasn’t going to hurt me and that if didn’t want to I didn’t have too. BUT I WANTED TOO!!! So I grabbed his face and started kissing him again but this time it was different.

It was like in 20 magical minutes I learned how to kiss. And boy was I all up in it he couldn’t pull away from me even if he wanted too. Finally I let him come up for air and he laid me down. He got top of me and started kissing my neck, ears and chest again. But this time he didn’t stop at my chest, he started to kiss down my stomach and he licked all around my belly button. He spread my legs and started to kiss the in side of each of my thighs. Then he slid his fingers in me. At first I jumped because it shocked me. I never knew that they sick their fingers in it. I always thought it was just their dick. He started to move his fingers in and out and around and At that point I couldn’t help but moan because it felt so damn good.

I guess he enjoyed it too cause he started moving his fingers faster and faster and faster until I felt this tingle it started at my toes and went to my head. I don’t know what the hell happened but I liked it! After that he started to kiss up my stomach again until he reached my lips. He reached on his night stand and grabbed a condom. While he was putting it on his was kissing me everywhere. My neck my cheeks my ears my finger tips (I didn’t even know there was a spot there but boy did it feel good) after he put on the condom he spread my legs again, and he slowly slid him self in. He pushed my legs up so that my knees were kind of up he put his arms behind it and started moving in and out. That felt even better then the fingers. I swear I was in heaven. After a while he started to go faster (like he did with his fingers) but this time it was better. It felt so good all I could do was moan and so “ssssss”, at one point I started pulling my own hair! It was better then anything I had ever felt in my whole entire life.

It was better then …anything! After about 20 minutes later (im guessing cause I really wasn’t paying attention) he started to move FASTER. And I couldn’t scream or moan or nothing I couldn’t make any sounds at all then finally I felt this feeling like a volcanic eruption and I screamed so loud I thought for sure the windows were going to break and the whole neighborhood was going to hear me. Dom started to slow down, then he stopped, pulled out and just fell down next to me. After that we didn’t talk or anything, we went to sleep. Gawd that was the best sleep I’ve ever had in my life. Speaking of sleep its 12:43 I gotta go to sleep so I can wake up and get to school early tomorrow. So I can tell Adrianna everything that happened...Or maybe I’ll just call Dom and see if we can do it again tomorrow.

THE TRUTH
07-05-2004, 10:46 PM
One of the things about my life, at the moment, that is certifiably bothering me is: my lack of ability to read any literary works. My time is spent with my head rammed in between a case or piece of legislation -- stuck in between books like Dom's head, I'm sure, has been splayed between the protagonist's legs. But that being said, it's a good idea that I decided, on impulse, to read this first entry to the DIARY OF A SEXAHOLIC.

This is most definitely a creative idea that deserves much commending. In all my thinking I would never have even pondered the idea. So that's a plus for you.

Further, I think you encapsulate your ideas really well and express the inherent feelings of the protagonist well too. That's another plus for you.

Further still, your description goes further than most writers would in describing such a scene, and that in itself is daring. Wonders if the author is drawing from personal experience to a vast extent. If you are or aren't, it seems that way. That is one more plus to Ms Diamond Eyez.

My only concern would the section proceeding when the counselor introduces herself to her sex-hungry tutees. I knew where you were trying to go with the work at that point, but don't feel you really got there. But it wasn't far from where I think you wanted to be. This is my unfettered opinion on the point.

Overall a wonderful piece of writing where you truly show RW one of your most expres and innermost talents. Stay writing, and I'll stay responding -- even though the same favor is not granted to me.

WUNZUNO from the only nigga that says "Wunzuno"
TRUTH

-Evey-
07-05-2004, 10:58 PM
Awww *cries*
Gene...thank you...I really appreciate your response.

*wipes tears away and hugs gene*

Don_C
07-05-2004, 11:28 PM
You have very good description, and I think I speak for all of us MEN when I say you picked a Good subject, no a GREAT SUBJECT.

Keep postin'.

-Evey-
07-06-2004, 03:18 PM
^^Thanx Don...I kinde picked a Universal subject. As u can see not just men love the subject.

Status.Quo
07-06-2004, 03:52 PM
You Already Kno My Comment ...
But Overall - The Concept Was Good, (After An Explanation) ...
At First It Seemed Kinda "Virginic", but ..I Got Dat Cleared Up ..
The Topic Was Enjoyable When Read, Keep It Up!

Royalty
07-07-2004, 12:00 AM
You sent me this wonderful TERRIFIC SNIPPET IN ITS EARLIEST OF STAGES AND I TOLD YOU IT WAS A HIT!!!!!!

Girlie, I'm so proud of you and your writings. Beatiful story I remember when I 1st read it. I thought it was about you...LOL, Then i asked you was it about you then you were like NO NO NO NO...lol It's a story, and a great one at that!!!:D

-Evey-
07-07-2004, 12:16 AM
Umm Ish...girl...i showed u some of my NOVEL...i just wrote this yesterday :(

Royalty
07-07-2004, 12:17 AM
EHHPS! OH SHI! GIRL I THOUGHT IT WAS THAT WHEN WE WAS TALKING OVA AIM SO I STOPED READING...

Lemme READ IT IM SORRY I LOVE U!:(

Royalty
07-07-2004, 12:50 AM
Can dom come over to my house? Or how about her because I SAY GAWD DAMN SHE WAS SO FUCKIN DESCRIPTIVE MY NIPS IS ON HARD AND MY INSIDES ARE ALL TINGLE

and MY TOES ARE WINGLING AND HEY I JUST BROKE MY WINDOWS FROM YELLING SO DAMN HARD GOD LEE

DANI I LOVE IT!!!!!

I SHOULD BE IN THAT SEX ACHOLIC CLASS

I LOVE HOW U DID SOME KILL BILL TYPE OF SHIT IT WENT FROM ONE SCENE STRAIGHT TO THE NEXT
THEY ALL IN A CLASS LOL AND SHE THINKING ABOUT DICK...THEN WAM HER DIARY SHOWS U LOL A SIMPLISTIC DAY OF SEX

YAY! I LOVE IT!

I GOT A CRAVING FOR DICK AND MORE OF DANI's READINGS!

.LadyMarmalade.
07-07-2004, 01:50 AM
Well wow...Talk about relating (lol)

I felt that your description was deep and very well expressed. (and i KNOW that dont make sense) lol
You know what you wanted to say, and said it perfactly!
I love the concept of this, it was very very creative. As was said before, not many people wouldve thought of this.
You KNOW you have talent, and I will never let you stop writing, wether its poems or stories. Your mind creates wonders, and it'd be selfish if you didnt express it, lol. I will definetly continue reading your novel and I look forward to the next chapter/entries.

OD HAY GNAHT!!

Thick Bitchez Inc.

-Evey-
07-07-2004, 02:03 AM
LOL thank you girl...*hugs jela* Im glad that you enjoyed it. *i knew you would*
and isha ur freaky ass dont need to read no more lol...you already freaked the fuck out! lol j/k! you know i love yall


.on.tbuod.I.lliw.od.ham.gnaht.

Thick Bitches

*stat* hunni I LOVE UUUU!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
*muahz*

~Damien~
07-07-2004, 02:25 AM
After reading this piece and really looking at it from a literary standpoint, I'll have to side with Truth and say that this was definitely an entertaining work of prose. There were multiple aspects of this that I found appealing but I'll just name a few so that I don't inflate your ego too much.. (~SMIRK~)


First, I found that the approach you took to help describe the situations that arose was very "down-to-earth." One thing about that is the fact that you give the reader a sense of comfort and familiarity with the writer. That's a definite plus..

Secondly, you seemed to capture the emotions and feelings of the (at the expense of sounding redundant) protagonist extremely well. That's something that I find very important when writing any piece of work..


Tight work, though..just make sure you work on the rest of it..



~1nE~

Tiliya
07-07-2004, 03:49 PM
mmhhh... I think the idea was very good, just something different from the other stories. Where do you got the concept from? It is very visionary

GIVE US A GREAT PLEASURE AND WRITE PART 2 :)

-Evey-
07-08-2004, 12:58 AM
^^^thanx. I got the concept from...well...i just wanted to do something that no one else has done. And wouldnt dare do. I just took a risk, im glad you all enjoyed it. Entry 2 will be up soon.

Łďčĸ¦«»¦Łďčĸ
07-21-2004, 01:20 AM
wwhhoooooooooooo Girl.... U Bout To Make Me Head To My Room And Throw Xk Up On Da Bed And Shit...lol.....this Was Sum Tight Ass Storytellin Skills ...the Vividness Of This Was Like Gawwwwwdddd Dayummm....lol Gyrl U A Freak ....but Naw Seriously This Shit Was Tight As Hell... I Aint Gonna Say What Everyone Else Said But U Know U Gotz It...lol.....

*waits For Part 2*

~z~

Status.Quo
08-23-2004, 03:44 PM
Whens Da Next Entry.??

-Evey-
08-24-2004, 02:37 AM
When I get settled in school.

NYC SPITZ
08-25-2004, 09:29 PM
Hmmm I can't even believe I read that garbage. And don't take this as "hate" I'm just giving my honest 2 cents.

This was horrible. The vocabulary didn't fit in with the topic , and when you used it , wether it was used incorrectly or not , it was sooo fucking cliche or sounded straight homo. The topic was retarded ... The plot okay ... So don't percieve this as hate feed ... I know what I'm talking about my dad writes for a living. Back to the vocabulary , I know you used it to spice up and impress the readers. The tactic didn't work because the meanings of the words were skewed and to me , horrendous. I also don't suspect a 16 year old blatantly describing her first time having sex in so vulgar a manner would take time to use that vocab , making it sound fake.

Here's what I think - stay with the plot , but write how you feel , not like a charlatan. Also , the topic was too raunchy. This didn't please me at all. You have some potential though. Keep at it.

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-Evey-
08-26-2004, 12:21 PM
*lmao*

for all the comments you typed...quote from the story, to support your comments.
if u cant then i'll take ur comment as a pure hate comment.

thanx

NYC SPITZ
08-26-2004, 06:31 PM
“Hi Faith” we all greeted the voluptuous woman who odiously drank a little too much red bull before she came here....

Note "Odiously drank" ... I see where you are going with voluptuous and red bull... but listen this is one example out of many ... just to show you I ain't hatin.... why would Red bull breath spur displeasure ... See how the adjective modifies the verb immediately after (drank) if she is happy she drank red bull why would these people be disgusted ... you've got to create a realistic atmosphere ... in reality if those stupid whores that do nothing but fuck see her they'd be like "yay she's gonna help cut down my fucking" red bull really wont be on their minds , and I highly doubt anyone can smell red bull or recognize red bull smell ...

Odiously would be used well describing an alcohol addict , not a lady who just drank red bull energy drinks.

There is alot more , and I could really elaborate only on that one sentence but I am too lazy now have a nice day this is not hate feed by the way.

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-Evey-
08-27-2004, 12:21 PM
Odiously...is a typo u fuckin moron...Its suppose to be odviously...if u were as "smart" as u claim then u woulda saw that. Just by the way the sentance is you could tell that it was a typo...i didnt see it or else i would have changed it.

And the "red bull" thing shows Hyper activity, see if you've ever had it you'd know that it makes you jumpy. The character faith came in all excited. The red bull thing was a figure of speech describing how she was acting. NOW you said "in reality if those stupid whores that do nothing but fuck see her they'd be like "yay she's gonna help cut down my fucking" red bull really wont be on their minds , " see thats not true. they might think "yea shes gonna help" but fuckin will be on their minds...it is an illness and it dosent get cured by going to a class. If u paid attention you would see that she was thinking about fuckin and getting help but her thoughts kept conflicting eachother.

sweety you have no idea of what your talking about...get ya thoughts together and try another example because the one u gave isnt cuttin it.

thanx

THE TRUTH
08-27-2004, 02:27 PM
I wish somebody would read some of my stuff on the forum and comment so vigorously!

That would be appreciated.....you can run my shit down, and I wouldn't even talk back.....

WUNZ to everybody

ROSE.
08-27-2004, 05:54 PM
Why did I just come to this?? I should of read this aloong time ago! Great skills you got Diamond, can't wait for the next entry...:)

and truth...I read yours...

NYC SPITZ
08-27-2004, 06:29 PM
No that's not obvious , wow okay take it as hate , and yeah the red bull metaphor sucked cause I highly doubt the woman teaching a class tryna help sex addicts would be over energetic and also there is alot of other stuff but you're jsut gonna be like "NO THAT WAS A TYPO" or "YOU ARE A FART FACTORY" or some other inane shit.

I am just trying to help with some honest feedback relax , and take it like a woman cause I can write better than you and I'm just giving a few pointers.

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THE TRUTH
08-27-2004, 06:35 PM
^ and you can probably write better than me, so give me some feed! NOW!

-Evey-
08-27-2004, 09:07 PM
I can write better than you

ROFLMMFAO....put ya money where ya mouth is...

NYC SPITZ
08-27-2004, 09:38 PM
uhh I don't need to prove myself , I can write way better than you...why prove myself to an online slut writing about sex , by the way you suck at writing. I'm just laying it down like it is. Why is it every time someone recieves honest feedback that is negative they flip out? whatever.

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-Evey-
08-28-2004, 12:13 PM
im not tryna see all that blah blah blah shit...put ya money where ya mouth is or dont type shit to me no more. Its that simple. Shit if ur gonna say you're better at least have enough balls to prove it.

NYC SPITZ
08-28-2004, 12:43 PM
okay...I got better things to than write essays on online rap sites so I can recieve props from an online ho...kay? Good.

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THE TRUTH
08-28-2004, 03:08 PM
I would like to see a lil somethin somethin from you SPITZ...... that would give more credence to your comments, and would allow me to assess my work better. That being said, take some time out and write a lil bit of anything, and post it.......it's not for propz, writing is practice on RapBoards.

NYC SPITZ
08-28-2004, 03:16 PM
give me a topic

Xkwisite
08-29-2004, 07:25 PM
okay....i am doing this as a nuetral entity....i find that this "challenge" of writing could be semi entertaining......because i can see both points being made.....and in some portions i agree with Spitz that some word choice issues could be improved.....on the other hand i can see (as a writer) the atmosphere tha Diamond is trying to create and unfortunately NYC...yes....you can smell red bull on someone's breath....and someone that drinks too much of it can be realllllly annoying.........red bull can be just as addictive as alcohol..........they say that if caffiene was treated as alcohol 3 out of every five Americans would be in CA classes........anyway.....



Topic: You are 14 years old....you have just walked in on your parents having sex with another couple....instead of stopping and trying to apologize to you....they keep going.......describe your feelings....and what you are seeing....



I decided on this topic because of the vulgarity of it....that being said....it seemed right only because one of the comments that you had made when you critiqued Diamonds Piece was that it was vulgar...to prove that you are better writer you should be able to take this topic (in its very grotesque descriptions) and expand on it in a better manner that you think Diamond did.....



i look forward to reading it....

NYC SPITZ
08-29-2004, 08:30 PM
Yeah I think it's impossible to describe it realistically without vulgarity if I HAVE to describe what I'm seein as a horny 14 year old feelin' his cheerios. I said the topic as a whole was too vulgar...so that's dumb

THE TRUTH
08-29-2004, 10:47 PM
NO, write about that......I'll do the same; and we can see what we both/all come up with. That would be cool. Write a couple pages on XKs topic and post it, and I'll do the same.....at least before Wednesday.

WUNZ

Xkwisite
08-30-2004, 08:04 PM
Yeah I think it's impossible to describe it realistically without vulgarity if I HAVE to describe what I'm seein as a horny 14 year old feelin' his cheerios. I said the topic as a whole was too vulgar...so that's dumb



Spitz...that is the whole point....you said that Diamond's topic was too vulgar in general.....you also said that you were a better writer than her.....the obvious way to prove that you are a better writer would be to write about something AS vulgar as her topic....or even more vulgar than hers.....so....case in point....that is the reason why the topic was created...I am not trying to take a side....I am merely being a nuetral force to facilitate the argument with the best examples possible.....I believe that it might be able to start a new trend on RW....so....participate, stop complaining....

fraze
11-03-2004, 04:47 AM
damn mami u a freak lol no i got to say i liked it though was that a real experience or just a story