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FIRST TO 5 WINS 3-0 KO 4-1 TKO

VOTES BASED ON:
ON TOPIC
FLOW
MULTIS
VOCAB
ORIGINALITY
IMAGERY
DEPTH
WORDPLAY
METAPHORS
HOOK ORIGINALITY

PARTICIPATING MEMBERS IN TOURNEY CAN VOTE & VETS CAN VOTE
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TOPIC:
Murder Mystery...Make up set clues and evidense of a murder case. You are assigned to the case and are trying to solve it. If you figure it out make it be like a famous person or someone well known & if they get caught. Like OJ :(

Good Luck

Checkin' In... Good Luck, Skitz... :cool: TRILLZ

checkin in...what a topic though...oh well...lemme murder it.....................................

i'ma drop right now seein as i can't get on durin the weekends anymore for a while.......

this dude got shot, and this time not-for-street-cred
it was for talking shit--never watched-what-he-said
bullets pierced his skin and left holes from shots-that-leaked-red
before the blood began to dry up and clot,-now-he’s-dead
body outlined, yellow caution tape and chalk-in-the-streets
the only suspects i had was from the beef when he fought-wit-the-inc
he had no talent/all that he could do was talk-in-a-beat
but he was hated on a lot which caused-me-to-think
that an over crazed fanatic tried to do-his-idol-justice
it was unlikely that the artist consumed-a-suicidal-substance
i had to call his fam and tell em all they can do-is-try-to-suffice
i remember telling banks: “i know whatcha goin through,-i’ll-find-you-justice”
knowin damn well that i couldn’t give a fuck now that he-was- silenced
but it was against the ethics etched in my job to be-this-biased
so i just said fuck it- -sucked in my gut, stuck out my chest and kept opinions- silent
cuz it was time for me to try and find some suspects and just get-some-clients

it was the death of a ho--who murdered half-a-dollar?
he was talking shit to the wrong peeps--dude just had-to-holler
about this-and-that/how this kid-is-whack when spittin-raps
tick-and-tack and tack and tick--someone capped a baller

i interrogated the murderous like: “i got some questions, you best just answer -this”
asked em if they killed fifty and they said the thought was blasphemous
that the situation had escalated and got just a little hazardous
but it didn’t get to the point where they aint make a man-exist
all the facts checked out which made the story-real
so i examined the body and found out there was a fourty-spilled
or cracked over the victims head by the murderer before-he-killed
a man who tried to rap but had less than half of mike shoreys-skills
so i found out that there was an aftermath-party
the night before and that the rappers-had-cardi
and jim-bean amongst other alcohols,-and-slims-team
got into a little knuckle scuffle in the hall-and-fists-beat
against fifties dome- -knives reached deep inside-his-bones
there were small cuts on his neck from where they tired to slice his throat
then they finally got sicka playin and just shot-the-fool
so now I’m downtown in this room, questioning kon-and-proof

Who would seek eliminating a lyrical, national treasure?
After being missing in all sectors, slim shady has been kidnapped & dismembered
Slim went from penciling records to bein’ identified by his dental records
I gotta find the criminals who festered & intensified this subliminal sequestor
Still startled, I scoured the scene of the abduction… a Baskin Robbins
Marshall’s final hour seen as a customer, having no problems
No entourage to stroll ‘round the block for some scoops of rocky road
But he got barraged & swooped on by some troops he probably owed
“It was like ten black vans,” said the clerk… “They sped off in diff’rent directions”
I was given an impression, though… this hit had no specific connection
To beef or money… no false alibis or demands of ransom
& Even random obsessed fans would ride on a manhunt…
The boss behind this plan was ‘bout to be handed a quiet tandem
Not to mention D-12 & Detroit were up in arms with riots & tantrums
Minus this bubble of fame, a man has been slain to a puzzle of pieces
Not hard to find trouble in the game… as I subtle my thesis, I’ll explain….

“Rap has lost an icon, again,” scrolling across tickers & headers
Who care’s if he was seen with the lights off? The ‘wigga’ was better
Than 99% of his peers… I gotta find an end to these tears
Of those who once upon a time lent him their ears…

Coroners are gathering up limbs, guts & half of his liver
It feels like I’m ten, again… putting together action figures
All is coming into place except for Slim’s tongue & his heart
The two things he said the industry never won from the start
“We got a suspect,” my radio blurted out loud while I recollected
“Who?” I suggested… the words out the chief’s mouth were not expected
“Please repeat, 10-4” I asked about an image unreal to my eyes
Cause once Eminem’s skills’ sufficed, we was like ‘who is Vanilla Ice?’
“Thought you was in the UK ambience gaining an audience” I interrogated
“I was, honest,” he said… “But my conscience weighed on me how this was orchestrated”
“You familiar with the phrase ‘a favor for a favor’” he asked…
“I owed one to the man who introduced me to paper & ass”…
In exchange, VI asked for invincibility & a safe haven to not bug out every night
Then the entity behind this case was revealed… Suge Marion Knight
I inquired if he knew whereabouts to look for Slim's dispelled findings
“They’re stashed in Suge’s freezer… in a bucket of vanilla ice cream”…*whoa*

ON TOPIC: Both stayed on topic very well so this would be a tie
FLOW: easily DTP flow was so fluent and solid, no mis haps or anything that would fault his flow, skitz had some shaky parts that werent worded that well and messed up the flow
MULTIS: same as above...DTP had some real nice multis
VOCAB: no one used real difficult vocab, but DTP worded his vocab a little bit better and made use of the words better
ORIGINALITY: i kinda expected this from both, but DTP's ender had me rollin....
IMAGERY: easily DTP, the way things were worded to me stood out i got a better feeling of what was being said and i could picture it easier
DEPTH: DTP...better descriptive depth and wording depth to me....
WORDPLAY:...
METAPHORS:...
HOOK ORIGINALITY: Neither stood out me...so its a tie here


pretty nice topical battle, DTP showed his audio experience with how he made his flow incredible to me, fluently flowed with multis, better description i think, this was close but not that close...skitz u did a nice job, i still remember that resident evil piece u did, if u did this on that type of calibur it woulda been a tough choice to make

vote DTP

ON TOPIC - Both, neither wandered
FLOW - DTP, Skitz's flow was off in places most noticebly in the second bar in the hook. DTP had a more complex rhyme scheme going and it was more consitent.
MULTIS - DTP, Both had nice multies but DTP's worked better
VOCAB - DTP, he used more complex words, and his bigger words were used correctly. It seemed more natural than when Skitz used "blasphemous."
ORIGINALITY - DTP, the whole ice cream thing that he carried from start to end was brilliant. Using "Slim Shady" made me worry it was going to be dull, but it was interesting than the "blood-play" (that's what I'm calling it) in Skitz's verse.
IMAGERY - DTP, his story's structure made it easier to see it as the visuals built on each other.
DEPTH - DTP, while his stories was a little further out their (crazy), it still connected more to reality. The emotions made sense while the line "couldn’t give a fuck now that he-was- silenced" in Skitz's verse seemed a bit random. Thematically it fit together better, and it was easier to connect the emotion since it seemed more believable. DTP's word use also added the depth that Skitz's verse lacked.
WORDPLAY - DTP, there wasn't much in this battle but DTP still had a few great ones. The most obvious was the ice creame wordplay, and another good example was in a line I'll quote later...
METAPHORS - DTP, Metas usually show up in wordplay, Skitz didn't have any.
HOOK ORIGINALITY - DTP, the hooks weren't special, but DTP's was more complex as far as flow and how it connected details both in the real world and in his story.

Favorite Line Of the Battle:
"Minus this bubble of fame, a man has been slain to a puzzle of pieces"
I just liked that concept, it's a mystery/puzzle resulting from being chopped into peices.

Vote - DTP

ON TOPIC:Tie....Both set the scene and followed topic well.
FLOW:DTP was easier to flow, and was consistant.
MULTIS:Tie, both hd consistantly good multi's
VOCAB: DTP his vocab didn't feel forced.
ORIGINALITY: Tie, both came up with original concepts.
IMAGERY:DTP, they way he implemented vocab to really set the scene.
DEPTH: Tie, both went into detail.
HOOK ORIGINALITY: Tie, niether really shined.

OVERALL : DTP
Both were good, but DTP rhymes flowed welll, good use of vocab. Some of skitz's verse felt forced to me.
Well done to both of you.

DatThurrPoet wins by KO 3-0 & will advance to face the winner of the Torch Rellik Topical.

Good Battle.