RULES:
8BARS 2BAR HOOK 8BARS
NO EDITING POSTS *ANY MAJOR PROBLEMS COMTACT ME*
NO FREE POSTING
NO SWAYING VOTES
SHIT TALKING GOES IN DESIGNATED THREAD

CHECK IN TUES BY MIDNIGHT GMT
VERSES DUE SAT BY MIDNIGHT GMT
*NO EXCUSES WILL BE TOLERATED UNLESS OK'D BY OPPONENT*
*EXTENSION 24 HOURS MAX*

FIRST TO 5 WINS 3-0 KO 4-1 TKO

VOTES BASED ON:
ON TOPIC
FLOW
MULTIS
VOCAB
ORIGINALITY
IMAGERY
DEPTH
WORDPLAY
METAPHORS
HOOK ORIGINALITY

PARTICIPATING MEMBERS IN TOURNEY CAN VOTE & VETS CAN VOTE
EACH PARTICIPATING MEMBER MUST VOTE ON 1 BATTLE AND PROVIDE LINK

TOPIC:
Make a plan to assassinate the President. Explain how it is executed and the outcome of it. Give a location too ie American or foriegn soil.

Good Luck

Check in... Me and Fixion agreed that our deadline is Wed. So basically, the rules change, if that's okay, that way we can get our votes in sooner, and it's not as rushed. Same rules apply, with extension and all. If that's okay with you Voks, please state your approval to make it official.

if it's this wed. i dont care..next week wed. no...

This upcoming Wed. Because we didn't feel it was necessary to devote an entire week to a drop.

Yes..


Im Here..

Im gonna post Thursday if thas cool..

I got work and things..

Plus I jus wrote a new audio and gotta worry about my battle with Orc..

If thas cool with you Shawn?



next time pm him dont clutter threads

Yeah, that's cool. I'll post when you do. I got hit up with my 12 page term paper and some speech stuff... end of the semester is coming up, so stuff is getting pretty tight, (hence why I haven't been near as active here at RW). If you need to push til Saturday, lmk on messenger.



Like Vokals Said...Next Time Hit Him On Messanger....Or PM

"History Re-Made"


Intro:
Your mission, if you choose to take it, is for the next 4 years be the president's body guard. On November 22, you will arrange his assassination.

Dallas, Texas, November 22, 2004

Like 'ring around the rosie', 1 typical 'round', and they mystically they 'all fall down',
Enough of his vain, blood stained, uncontained 'battle calls', we just rationally 'mute the sound'
Sittin in the limousine, 2 feet from the pres, ill-nervous, like I’m the man for the mission,
I'm assertive on the surface, and in between 2 heart beats, at my command, we listen,
'cause there's a sniper on the roof, but a pistol gripped tightly behind my back,
It's the classic titled proof, when I switch bullets to instigate lies and cover tracks,
He gets out, 1 step to the next, one foot less, and hear the bullet shot,
Through the vest to the chest, and 100 feet away, a rifle's dropped,
So we got the perfect 'setup', like a dozen 'computer props',
On the surface, the sniper stepped-up, took credit for the sniper cocked,
As for the rest of our conspiracy: This is politics, it never stops, we plannin' around the clock,

Rest in Peace, for every bullet that shot a significant and foreign, ‘innocent’!
Through death he stole ‘virginity’, with vain words as his instrument,
Yes, I live with it, I spit with it, blood which drips slowly from my conscious,
Only not as lowly, but as lonely as the false political promise

Like JFK, we reenact the conspiracy, fearlessy, with gunshots blazing,
'Tearlessly', watch a man die, but fortunately it's 'rainin',
So on November twenty-second, I blessed George with fake salutes,
It was all fraud, in Dallas Texas, we're all a member of the spoof, from the feelings to fake proof,
Break through, America aches too, take literally to the expression "Shoot!",


Rest in Peace, for every bullet that shot a significant and foreign, 'innocent'!
Through death he stole 'virginity', with vain words as his instrument,
Yes, I live with it, I spit with it, blood which drips slowly from my conscious,
Only not as lowly, but as lonely as the false political promise

I believe you did it wrong..but I aint that concerned..

Jus make sure you follow the rules :)...

Haha Im playin..


*Dusts off paper*..

He holds the country in hand..huntin the man but where does fate lie
Haste hides..but Im quick to murder..hitch a burner never will hate die
I can taste spite..I stare at my waist..make sure I have my back up
2 pistols..get an attacked rush..so I pack the rifle for the last touch..
I use no mask..thoughts feelin burnt out like a passed blunt..its a far walk
Ive had hard talks..whether to do it..but I still pack my rifle in a guitar box
Walk the roads..kick rocks..the hate I meant it..restless havent slept in 3 days
But it needs to be done..hes deceased grace..Im now ending the games he plays
Continue walkin..I seem late, but maybe my minds stuck in the past
My heads in bubbles..the States..this country is sad and still struggles to laugh
His power..we`d have to huddle to crash..but like sickness a shot will do it
Now Im there..see the crowd..I walk up to em..my hands are as hot as fluid
I still stalk my prey..watched his ways..our eyes clashed but I blocked the usage
And I think to God...as Im starin at hate, hes impaired my faith..he made such a rotten human
But still the plot is fluent..get to my stance..pull the gun and rock one to em
No time to talk..Prez is starin at death..baring a stress..my post Im walkin to it...

..
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You rule this country n you may hold fate in hand
The man makes himself.. but you dont make the man
Ive standed this rape..enuff.. but still your raping stands
I`ll give you a taste, except it`ll be your own tasteless plan
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I hope everyone remembers this date at hand..but Im trying to think in..
Deeper to peoples thoughts..am I a creep or God..it`ll all be gone in a blinkin
Drawn to the hintin..everyone said they hated what lack of grace he gave
Im made to save..so as a leader..I`ll literally make sure he takes his grave
How could one behave this way..still say he wants to protect the land..
I`ll stress this man..sick of it..I pull of the rifle and give his chest a glance..
How many times has a person caressed this chance...and actually followed thru
I could watch the hollows spew..my mind is blank and Im starin with a hollowed view
His speech only bothered few..laughter..how could people meet the demands
I want to be beating his fans..no air..no recognition..whos seeing this man..
Hes been reepin to plan..a distaster but people only care the day after
Myself past earth..another world invisioned.. but his demon face in laughter
How it cant change is sadder..but I can put a end to his blundering mouth
It seems like a druggin..no one can fight him..we`re already tumbling down
I look at this thundering crowd..wondering how..damn..this is pointless..
Tell me where the point is..Im now realizing..tomorrow a new idiot will b appointed

Yeah, I just re-read the rules, and realized I could've gotten 16 more lines in... damn, that bites the big one.

Nah its cool..


Vok would prolly disqualify you..

But it aint a big deal..

Fixion, the ending was dope...i loved the fact you stayed on the psychological effect of the assassin as he was going thru it, you tend to talk often from 1st person perspective; i think that's one of your stronger points in writing and it guided you well through this.

Icon, you had a potentiall dope ass verse. i loved the set up and the plan and parts of explaining the strategy but at the same time i felt that you didn't get the reader much involved with the killer himself. The outline and was good but then somebody will be like..."what happened in the second verse?". Fixion did excellent with that.....(right before shooting the president, he came with the hook and continued next verse). You killed the president first verse, and then you found yourself struggling in the second verse a bit, that's just what i think.


overall, both verses were good....but i thought Fixions was a little bit tighter as far as an outline for a story.

No I won't DQ him, that'll just be his fault. Otherwise...
Fixion 1 - Icon 0

ON TOPIC: Fixion, he finished it for one, and that basically won the topic, got more into it and it stuck out more to me...
FLOW: pretty close, i would lean towards icon in areas but fis in others...so i call flow to fix b.c in his 2nd verse it was more fluent to me
MULTIS: pretty close again but i liked fix barely
VOCAB: I would say icon took the vocabulary, fix didnt use anything too stand out to me, just his normal dumbed down vocab...haha j/p
ORIGINALITY: I liked both, i liked how icon had 2 people in his fix was alone..i figured that would happen, i liked how fix ended his i suspected icons ending...if icon would have expanded his more and followed the rules he coulda made it better...fix on this
IMAGERY: both had their writtins very desrciptive in this, could sort of get the feel like I was the one trying to kill him...tie
DEPTH: Fixion easily went into more depth b.c he had the requirements...icon u left me out to wonder if u coulda came alot better if u fulfilled what was said to do
WORDPLAY: No real noticeable wordplay by both, but fix had some better stand out ones to me
METAPHORS: Same as above
HOOK ORIGINALITY: I was lovin icons hook more, i feel he had the edge on that as a more experienced audio head to come up with a nice hook...


This could have been alot closer of a topical battle between u 2 if icon had payed attention to the rules..i would like to see a rematch w. u 2 in the BA or the VA given another strong topic...icon urs was well writtin and done and u were close on all catagories but again if u finished it completely this battle coulda been a whole nother story...

Vote Fix

Good battle you 2

ON TOPIC: fix... his was alot more clear on what the topic was... and he masde it very cleatr how he did it..and what he did
FLOW- fix... i wasnt feeling icons rhyme scheme at the beginning.. mainly cuz you dont use multies.. and tmulties help the flow out alot
MULTIS- fixion... icon didnt have ne
VOCAB- icon...
ORIGINALITY- tie...
IMAGERY- fix... his imager was very good
DEPTH- fix
WORDPLAY- tie
METAPHORS-tie
HOOK ORIGINALITY- icon

vote: fix

Fixion Wins By KO 3-0
Advancing to battle the winner of the J-Mizzle/snowwizza battle.
Good Battle