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FIRST TO 5 WINS 3-0 KO 4-1 TKO

VOTES BASED ON:
ON TOPIC
FLOW
MULTIS
VOCAB
ORIGINALITY
IMAGERY
DEPTH
WORDPLAY
METAPHORS
HOOK ORIGINALITY

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TOPIC:
You are on a Safari trip "state with whom" and you are being attacked by rebels in the jungle. State what you would do. Also include animals encountered and weather elemants.

Good Luck

Checking In.

since Nickel ho-showed even after receiving 2 pms the biter is DQ'd...i'll get proof of that...so Snowwizza is taking his place in sted...same topic...she has 24 hours to check in...

.........in

Kenya, Africa......

At first wake encrusted eyes to a spear in the face
My first thoughts this must be fait - why did I come to this place
In thought out plans this was not in the itinerary
Scared, its hard to breath as I call my sisters name and she don’t hear me
So hot, Im blinded but can feel the sun as it burns my flesh
Total silence so Im starting to think from the group Im the last one left
Death - will it become me then the rebels start to speak
Swahili was not a class I took so their speech to my mind is bleak
Reap what I sow - so to my father I ask forgiveness
Forgive for my sins and help me somehow to outlive this
These mutinies are gonna sacrifice me if these bugs don’t kill me first
And the only sounds I hear right now is the snakes rattle as I quench for thirst
The night falls and I realize they left me here to die
Vultures start to eat at me so to my feet I rise
Thank you God I made it and this was a lesson in its worth
Your city is not the Jungle come to the Jungle and live this first

Take for granted nothing now Im bless full for my birth
Though God may not be visible I believe in all hes worth
As curses fall upon us please take your footsteps first
Cause with my faith I followed you and made it through the worst

Wounded I follow my own blood back to the path this started
Only to find that the Captains dead and the ship has been departed
Thoughts of my baby sister hits and how these rebels did her in
Tears evolve and my throat clogs with hopes that shes still living
Suddenly I stumble across the remains of more then half of the group
Faint I felt as I hit the ground assuming my sisters body lies too
Threw - I might have made it but my life feels somehow over
Whats the since in living now *wish my sis was here to hold her*
Lights appear as my restless body lays beside the rest
Breathless I couldn’t move until known hands pulled up at my chest
Half opened eyes I see her face as tears are rolling down
“Sis” she says “we made it now get your ass up off the ground”
Hands held we pray together - God this was a lesson in its worth
As said before - your city is not the Jungle come to the Jungle and life this first

Take for granted nothing now Im bless full for my birth
Though God may not be visible I believe in all hes worth
As curses fall upon us please take your footsteps first
Cause with my faith I followed you and made it through the worst

Good luck Vizzle

Rushed Garbage
By: Jamaal Jermaine Jefferson



A friend and I on a safari trip; we’re geeking and steadily trippin’.
Wanted to walk but the rain, it’s steadily drippin’ so in our Jeep, we’re steadily whippin’.
Mosquitoes are steadily zippin’ around and our blood they’re steadily sippin’.
It’s a good thing we got our shots otherwise we’d be deadly sickened.
Heartbeats quickened at the slightest bit of sound.
For we’re fearful of dangerous animals that might be lurking around.
I peep my surroundings, take photos of various scenery.
Stopping at times to smell the flowers. Damn, I love this exotic greenery!
And what’s this? I push back the foliage and see a watering hole.
Animals getting their drink on, I see species ranging from rhinos to prairie moles.
Mosquito bites are swollen and I look up to the sky; the darkness is becoming whole.
As I walk to the jeep, I start to feel cold. But it’s not the weather; I feel the presence of dangers untold.
It’s too quiet so I approach the jeep cautiously.
Feebly glancing around I wonder, “Ayo, where my posse be?”
A possibility an animal attacked my man? It seems I’ll never know.
For this tainted arrow pierced in my flesh distorts my senses. I feel my mind’s grip on reality letting go.

Silently ambushed by attackers unknown, they give no apology.
Safaris going awry, will we be experiments of bad biology?
Was taking the scenic route, now were taken by scheming brutes.
Safaris going awry, will we ever return to our traveling group?

From pitch black to fuzzy random colors, I’m starting to come to.
What have I been through? Head is hurting and it seems I’m upside-down too.
Vision starts to focus on my surroundings; I’m in some lifeless shambled room.
It’s dim and damp with a hint of ambiguous fumes; I think to myself, “I’m not leaving here anytime soon.”
The voices of the goons that kidnapped me can be heard. They speak words my ears can’t understand.
Speculations about their conversation arise in me. I could’ve sworn I heard “Bin Laden”.
Footsteps are coming towards my direction; now these voices can be seen.
Hard, unrelenting gleams are aimed at my position, these guys are preparing to do something mean.
Slowly, a knife wielder approaches me, I pray to the Lord make death quick.
Was upside down, now visa versa, the rope was cut! Talk about slick!
I’m helped up and asked if I’m all right. Hey! These guys speak English!
Now I’m pissed; “What was up with my capture?” “Why cause me such anguish?”
They tell me their tale of how the government was so bold
To take their freedom and rights, basically putting their lives on hold.
They ask me for help for they need an American influence, what should I do?
I ask them about my friend. They respond that him, they never got to.
After days on pondering, I decide to add to their story.
Join their cause, fight their “man” and give this clan a helping hand of glory.



Not even God can save me from snowizza's flawless victory. Excellent picece done by her. :)

ON TOPIC: J-Mizzle...he included the elements in which snow didnt and the same can go with animals/insects...
FLOW: It was pretty even, both fell off at times with not matching multis or when J stretched out a couple of lines...but if i had to choose then i choose J
MULTIS: J...i was feeling his multis alot more, flowed more fluintly...
VOCAB: J again i feel he took this..better vocab and better use of his words...and they fit into what he was saying...
ORIGINALITY: I kind of expected snows verse...J's i didnt expect the ending on..i was like wtf...SOMEBODY DIE...lol...but it caught me by surprise..J
IMAGERY: Def J on this...the mosquito thing and the greenery sight...the way things were worded were put nicely..i could sorta picture the safari as fo snow she sorta got more into the religous aspect and i wasnt really picturing God or Jesus on a cross in the safari
DEPTH: J had expanded his topic a little more, got more into the trip at first and the ending wasnt bad either...cant get too deep on this subject but J did for what it was worth
WORDPLAY:....
METAPHORS:.....
HOOK ORIGINALITY: I liked J's and snows wasnt bad...the religious aspect wasnt bad for a hook..

snow i felt got more into the religion side of things as i stated..wasnt into that a whole lot..didnt state the elements or animals/insects...granted u had a short notice u did well but i feel J had the better over-all topical out of you 2


J u surprised me...nicely writtin...

Vote J-Mizzle

Upping for votes for these 2.

Stop sleeping on this and vote please...

Very nice battle...

J Mizzle...

I was suprised at your topical style..It has long sentences but they some how read well and you had all the right pauses and a good structure..

Snowizza..

First i've read from you also..I can tell you've done this topical shit before because your structure was almost flawless..it could almost be the lyrics to a audio the way it had NO pauses and flowed so well...


ON TOPIC: This was a WIDE topic..so yall coulda really talked about ANYTHINg and coulda stayed on.But j mizzle really dedicated his first verse to describing the scenery..wow Snowizza got staight to the point.Both were flawless the direction they went but i just enjoyed hearing about the moles and animals drinking water :)
FLOW: Even To tell the truth..J Mizzle's was almost like a Rap..While snow wizzas was really just poetry in motion.So i say Tie..
MULTIS: Both had multi's but Snowizzas flowed so well its almost hard to notice the multis she incorperates so EASILY into her work.Mizzles i could point out easily also but i think his were a little more fluent.-Jmizzle
VOCAB: J Mizzle..SNowizza had some words but i understood ALL of them..which is great for me.and thats why i really really want to vote for snowizza on this..but chances are..if TOrch can understand everyword in the topical.The vocab isent big enough.There were a few words i couldent understand from j mizzle and he put them in nice..sometimes to rhyme also..
ORIGINALITY: Umm both were expected..but yall put them so nice i was really into it.But deff snow wizza because she added her sister into the situation..though i dident get the ending..
IMAGERY: J Mizzle..Though snowizza described her situation nicely..Jmizzle just went to the extreme to put me right there with him through text..and i could picture it.
DEPTH:Snow Wizzas..cause you can read her verses and get several different things.J mizzle was deep but it was a straight forward story..i enjoyed it though.
WORDPLAY:Can't really remeber seein any..
METAPHORS:^
HOOK ORIGINALITY: Both were very good hooks but i have to say..i enjoyed j mizzles more.His shit was just..iono.Almost like a rap chorus but one that gets stuck in your head because its so clever.-Jmizzle

Even tho j mizzle's flow fell off a little during the first verse he brought it back quickly and described his shit nice.He suprised me and snow wizza dident disappoint either.Its all about which story you liked more..which scenery.And i've had my fill of "sad" stories..so i vote

J Mizzle..

Tho you got nuttin to be ashamed about snow wizza..you hit em hard.

Y'all Got One Of Da More Interesting Topics, In My Opinion... :D

ON TOPIC... I Like How Both Worked Da Topic... It Was Nice To Hear 'Bout Da Animals In 'Mizzle's Drop... 'Wizza Started Off Wit' Intense Action... I Declare A Tie On This...
FLOW... Both Had Nice Flows, Dough Some Lines Seemed Stretched @ Times... Even In My Eyes...
MULTIS... J-Mizzle... I Liked How He Started Off Str-8 Murderin' Multis In Da First 4 Lines... 'Wizza Had Some Nice Ones, Too... But They Didn't Connect Consistantly Throughout Like 'Mizzle's...
VOCAB... 'Mizzle Easily... Even Dough He Should Confess @ Least One Of Da Words He Used Was For Da Rhyme Scheme... But He Did Word Da Lines Fluently...
ORIGINALITY... Both Stories 'Whurr' Very Original, But I Liked How @ Da End Of 'Mizzle's He Decided To Join In A Spiritually-Enlifting Effort... I Don't Think I Would Have Thought Of Dat Myself...
IMAGERY... Good Imagery From Both... I Liked How 'Wizza Mentioned Da Whole 'Stumbling-Over-Bodies'... J-Mizzle's Was Nice How He Mentioned Da Mosquitos (& Da Shots... I Could Almost Feel Da Needles From Prior)... Tie 'Hurr'...
DEPTH... Nice Depth From Both... I Felt More Of 'Wizza's Situation, Dough Wit' How She Threw Family Into Da Scene...
WORDPLAY... N/A... Except Wit' Da First Lines Of 'Mizzle's... After Dat, It Was Even...
METAPHORS... N/A...
HOOK ORIGINALITY...Again, I Gotta Hand It To 'Miz'... Nice Lines From Both Hooks, But His Would Probably Fit On An Audio TRK Jus' As Well On His Drop...

"...The night falls and I realize they left me here to die
Vultures start to eat at me so to my feet I rise..." = My Fav' 'Wizza Bar (Dough She Did Miss Out On A Whole Other Bar In Her First Verse)...

"...Mosquitoes are steadily zippin’ around and our blood they’re steadily sippin’
It’s a good thing we got our shots otherwise we’d be deadly sickened..." = My Fav' 'Mizzle Bar...

VOTE... J-Mizzle... Nice BTL Between U Both... I've Seen Some Of 'Wizza's Drops, & I Know Dat If Maybe She Had More Time To Compute... It'd Be A Diff'rent Story ('Specially Considering Da Fact Dat She Filled-In For A Ho-Show)... Good BTL... :cool: TRILLZ

J-Mizzle wins by KO 3-0 & advances to the 2nd round to face Fixion.