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ORIGINALITY
IMAGERY
DEPTH
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METAPHORS
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TOPIC:
You come home from school to your mother being raped. State who it is ie, authority figure or someone you know. And what you would do. Give age that you are too.

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You come home from school to your mother being raped. State who it is ie, authority figure or someone you know. And what you would do. Give age that you are too.

School Politics~Concentration~In To Deep A Thought To Notice The Faults
Distraught..I Open The front Door,Stepping Over Fallen Groceries Bought
Concededly I Amusingly,Observe The Scene Ingnoring The Faint Cries
On This Floor The Truth Lies,Curiosity Leads To Investigaten Like C.S.I
Raspy Voice~"Mom You Home?"Seemed To Be My words Of Choice
Gasping for breath,Each Step With ~Poise~ Torwards a Faint Noise
SomeThings Wrong I Can Tell,As My Feet Increase Speed........
I Hear Something Under Me,Could It Be The Basement Underneath?
As I Walk Down The Steps,I Quelled,The Feeling I Felt Flourished
Butterflies In My Stomach Die,Depraving My Mind Of Any Courage
Hear I Stood~Entrance To The Wash Room, Knob Cold As Grip It Like Vice
Knob Turns As I Rub It,Images Blind My Eyes As It Turns clock wise
As I Enter The Room ~goons~ Free-Flow Posted Like a Freak Show
I See-Men, Pumping My Mother Full Of Sea-men...
Who? How? Why Now?Probably Planen To Sell For Ransom
Attack Random, Situation Turned The Opposite Of Handsome

I tussle And Scratch,3 robbers In,Black To Match There Brims
There Running A Train On My Mother..I Know This Is Considered A Sin
Theres A Line I'm Ready To Cross Over Time...
I Waited 16 Years For This..Shiiit NIGGA TAG ME IN!!!!!

They Fam From School,Told Em A Random Time For Random Cash
Moms Strenth Is Obvious,They Couldn't Body~Thus..
Her Pride Is Too Gassed To Be Fucked In The Ass..
"Wrong Time Of The Month Hun,No Son",Blood Flowed Like A Cup Of Water Tilts
Lord Help Your Nun,My Demon Mind Full Of Filth To Consider Raping A MILF
Its Like A Weight Lifted Off My Chest,This Incest Almost Drove Me Crazy Waitin
Watchen The Situations,SpeculaeN,Like This Shit Is Normal To Be Masterbaten
I Watch As They Strike Emotionless,To A Motionless Shell Of A Female
Shes Lost Conscience,Was Fun At First,But Got Worse As Time Could Tell
Guilt Rises Tall As My Manhood,I Grow Balls And Demand A Stand Still
They Point The Gun Tellin Me So Stand Still,Or The Ghat Make Me Will...
I Remain Shook,"Look as i say",She Cant Take No More Shes Dying..
They Start Laughing As I Start Crying,They Throw Me Down Were Shes lying.
I Struggle To Get My Balance,Fight Valiant As I Rip A Mask Off
The Gun Goes Off.. I Hold My Stomach Staring At My Mothers Violated Body
I Fall Devils~Beside Me,What Goes Around Comes Around In This Society..

Coming home from school to a Raped mother..

*Walks home from school*

Clouds surround the atmosphere rain pourin amongst my face, But by grace
I intake a deep breath, in Doomed with each step cause I was expelled from my school…
It felt soared of cruel, I got in a Fight or Fued & used my pocket knife, I always kept for a tool
I stabbed through that sucker but now I must face the wrath of my mother.. Im troubled
The Pattern I Guttered troubled from the Gash of the other.. I staggered that Fucker
I put a Jab and a Slash in his gut though.. but in the end he cried he would get his revenge
And this Menace again found the exact spot where I lived.. If only I knew ahead of time
This Vicious Swine would mean those intimidating words from his Mouth in da midst of a joust
Cause when I entered my House I seen that Same Bitch kid on my Couch…
With my Mom’s Tits in his mouth, She’s screamin & blood from her Pussy walls were leakin
I lost my reasons adrenaline quickly rushed through my Vein while this Bully causes more pain
Engorged in vogue Rape.. my mother appeared to me to be that precious Lamb in abhor slain
But my muscles could not restrain that ache of Hate, in bein dazed in rage for my mom’s sake
From dis Bitch nigga with a Smirk on his Face, I Will Kill U were my Exact words dat escaped
Endorsed with pure Rant and Raves, I felt a Demon inside of me leashed.. That Internal Beast..
Inferno heat… intrigued by this Phenomenon because my Fist and his Face would meet…

*Hook x2*
Uhhh ohhh somebody’s bout to Die..
Should I jab him in the Eye.. Burn his Body watch him Fry..
Uhhh ohhh somebody’s bout to Die..
Should I Kill him Fast or Slow.. After I break this Bastards Nose..

I swear, this Boy tried me for the final time and in my vital mind I’ll wipe out his final stride
Till his Life declines from mere existence.. My God’s my witness; he shall go to hell Indicted
Convicted on Judgment day, wit a big ass puncture left in his head from dents my fist engraved
This is that day.. I grabbed him by his neck with a Strong grip.. his eye already swollen black..
So that’s how I could tell my mother fought him back but for dat he’ll leave wit a broken back
Unpitying Actions, with his unwitting of laughing got him Back slapped and dragged.. yanked
Through the Living room Carpet, I twisted his Arm till I broke his armpits to leave a scar quick
His scream ricocheted and echoed off the walls.. This nonsense should have never started
But he brought it on himself.. I proceeded to devour his health.. till he felt a shower of guilt
I took off my leather black belt.. and tied it around his throat till his Voice was remote
His tone when he spoke.. was agonizing.. but I wasn’t acting Nicely.. I was Scrappin Shiesty
I kept on fightin, My mom laid on da Couch motionless though in her it seemed death confided
Her breath was striding.. pacing, and it was sad she had dealt with this rude Awakening
By a Youth of Satan.. If I had a Gun I would of Blew his face in… induced by da fuse Im facin
My mom finally got to da phone and called the Cops.. Half talking while her Voice in shock
I knocked da Boy comatose & threw him outside my porch sittin there till da Cops approached

*Thug Life Nukka* *C-walks out da thread*

But he brought it on himself.. I proceeded to devour his wealth.. till he felt a shower of guilt


I meant to say... devour his health... but I cant change it...^^^^ Verse 2 line 9...

*My error*



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Uppin for Votes...

only battle witout a vote...

Up for votes for these 2...


*Will vote in about 2 hours when I have the time*

ON TOPIC: Both equally kept to the subject so it's a tie.
FLOW: Rellik. Torch's overusage of pauses (I'm guessing thats what the ~ stands for) threw his flow off. Rellik never skipped a beat.
MULTIS: Rellik. Torch did have good multi usage but Rellik's seemed more natural and rolled off my tounge easier, thus making it more enjoyable to read.
VOCABULARY: Once again, a tie.
ORIGINALITY: Holy crap, Torch all the way. I was expecting the oh-my-God-my-mother-is being-raped-I-must do-something-about. I was not expect incest to be a issue in here. That put a whole new spin on this topic so Torch gets this with ease.
IMAGERY: Torch. Come on, he wrote about fucking his mother.
DEPTH: Rellik. I really like how he got into detail with how he stabbed his oppenent and what was going through his mind when he saw his mother getting raped by the same the guy he previous battled. To me it was like when Peter Parker let the robber go at the wrestling match only to find out that it was the guy who killed his uncle.
WORDPLAY: There was not many but Torch gets this with, "...The Truth Lies,Curiosity Leads To Investigaten Like C.S.I".
METAPHORS: NA.
HOOK ORIGINALITY: Torch. That last part fucking surprised the shit out me and had me making roffles.

FINAL VOTE: This was a very close battle but Torch gets the win because he had an innovative approach to this topic and he excuted it nicely.

ON TOPIC: both drops were on topic - tie
FLOW: Torch - his structure and flow were a little better think Rellik has a couple of stretched bars
MULTIS: Rellik - just had a better use of them
VOCAB: tie - both used good vocab in their drops
ORIGINALITY: Torch - his story just seemed more original and I felt his a little more
IMAGERY: tie - both drops were very creative and had good imagery
DEPTH: Tourch - both drops were deep but I thing Torch got into his a little more
WORDPLAY: tie
METAPHORS:
HOOK ORIGINALITY: Torch - Rellik's hook was pretty basic - Torch hook just stood out to me and worked real well with his verses

This was a close battle but I got to give it to Torch - I think overall his drop was a little better then Relliks

Interesting... Thx... 2-0 Torch..

[center]ON TOPIC
FLOW: Relliks flow was on point, Torches fell off here and there (maybe read it wrong)

MULTIS: both had some nice Mults but i also think that Rells were more relevant to the piece than Torchs

VOCAB: distraught-milf-quelled Torchs uncommons
engorged-joust Rel's uncommons
i went by words that most wouldnt use on the daily and by this Torch took this one

ORIGINALITY: yeah pretty much a tie here..........

IMAGERY: tie

DEPTH: gotta go with Torch on this one although it was by a narrow margin.......
he just gave better visual phrases....while Rel gave visual words and descriptions

WORDPLAY: didnt really catch any..(not sayin there were none)

METAPHORS: na

HOOK ORIGINALITY: goes ta Torch real creative....although Rels was hood as fuck.....

OVERALL: i gotta go with Rel mainly because his verse flowed nicely, and was more of a complete story to me..everything went well together.......took a real crazy subject and made it work with heart felt shit..........
first para-hook-last para....
Torch nothin taken from you you did ya thing, i just connected with Rel's shits more......
ILL SHIT FROM BOUT THOUGH.........ESPECIALLY WITH SUCK A HEART FELT SUBJECT....

Torch wins 2-1 due to time stoppage.