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Topic: You are on a small 6 person plane catching a ride to a near by island. During the middle of the flight you have troubles (explain what kind) and the plane goes down into the water and you and 1 other person are the sole survivors. Explain what you do to try and survive and the outcome.


Deadline: Check in by Saturday March 19 by 11:59 pm EST
Verses due Sunday March 20th by 11:59 pm EST
Only have 12 hours leway time (docked 1 vote) Anything over you lose a vote. (This only applies for when verses are due not check in.)

check- i have a problem though-i dont have access to a computer saturday or sunday,so can i drop my verse monday?

^ I Have Dat Same Prob'.. I Won't Be Able To Drop 'Til Monday Afternoon, PST.. If It's Aiight, Dough.. It Shouldn't Matter 'Cause Both Ma' & Myself Will Drop On Da Same Day.. Jury Still Out..? Chickity-Check Check-In, Y'all.. Good Luck, Gurl.. :cool: Trillz....

sorry so late, i was havin problems with this computer.


boardin this plane- apprehension strikes tha cells of my brain
pause for insight-this flight could be my invite to Hell's domain
my man Dwight sensin the tension-restored my serenity
now they closin up the door-six aboard-pass tha Hennessy
fastened my seat belt-poured a glass of age old remedy
passin the vast clouds to altitudes of no identity
my mood became relaxed-thoughts of Jamaica-out i passed
awoke to screams"we're gonna crash-the plane is lackin gas"
commotion metastasized-complete fear occupied all eyes
tried to compose my mind-aircraft defiantly took a nosedive
enclosed my chest with a life vest-grabbed Dwight n lept
facin jeopardy's test-plunged deep into tha seas depths
lost my breath as i descended-my body felt paralyzed
opened my eyes-we on an island-surprised i'm still alive

My boy was fadin quick-what a day plus a fucked up trip
infected limb makin him sick-alone completely helpless
inspected tha wreckage-tha radio was smashed n disconnected
found a medical kit-cleaned his wounds wit disinfectant
rounded up some fruit to consume-heard tha sound of reggae tunes
2 dudes came zoomin thru at the time it was high noon
seemed too good to be true-shook Dwight to tell him tha news
no response-laid lifeless-how could only i pull through
no seconds for waitin-gave mouth to mouth resuscitation
he started coughin n shakin,i'm weepin wit elation
headin home i felt amazed-a mix of emotions i cant explain
my next vacation wont consist of oceans or airplanes

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COULD A MOD PLEASE ERASE THAT ENTRY??


boardin this plane- apprehension strikes tha cells of my brain
pause for insight-this flight could be my invite to Hell's domain
my man Dwight sensin the tension-restored my serenity
now they closin up the door-six aboard-pass tha Hennessy
fastened my seat belt-poured a glass of age old remedy
passin the vast clouds to altitudes of no identity
my mood became relaxed-thoughts of Jamaica-out i passed
awoke to screams"we're gonna crash-the plane is lackin gas"
commotion metastasized-complete fear occupied all eyes
tried to compose my mind-aircraft defiantly took a nosedive
enclosed my chest with a life vest-grabbed Dwight n lept
facin jeopardy's test-plunged deep into tha seas depths
lost my breath as i descended-my body felt paralyzed
opened my eyes-we on an island-surprised i'm still alive

Confusion regains control-illusions both new n old
Thoughts insane yet i grab hold-the story just unfolds
My boy was fadin quick-what a day plus a fucked up trip
infected limb makin him sick-alone completely helpless
inspected tha wreckage-tha radio was smashed n disconnected
found a medical kit-cleaned his wounds wit disinfectant
rounded up some fruit to consume-heard tha sound of reggae tunes
2 dudes came zoomin thru at the time it was high noon
seemed too good to be true-shook Dwight to tell him tha news
no response-laid lifeless-how could only i pull through
no seconds for waitin-gave mouth to mouth resuscitation
he started coughin n shakin,i'm weepin wit elation
Seeking a quick way home-set sail on cruise ship
aint fuckin with blue skies-rather risk it on tha titanic
headin home i felt amazed-a mix of emotions i cant explain
my next vacation wont consist of oceans or airplanes

..Journey Wit' Da Click To Da Far East, Pick Up On My Foreign Game..
..& Orange Chicken Recipes, Perhaps Trick-Up On Da Floors Wit' Some Dames..
..Jus' To Think.. My Squad & I Couldn't Afford A Plane..
..Let Alone A Private Jet.. Had No Time To Fly It Yet..
..'Til Now.. Me & My Dog 'T'.. Da Other Four Jus' Came..
..To Chill Out.. It Is Nothin' To Me To Board Up A Bus Or Train..
..& Ride Out Like Da Fast & Furious Thru Spots; Paris, Europe..
..Hide Out, Mad Flirtin' On Broads Wit' Fat Asses & Stirrups..
..But I'm Catchin' A First-Up On My First Mind's Intuition..
..@ Da Same Time, We're Hurried Up Into Da Sky.... Nah', I'm Jus' Trippin'..
..I Hope.. Nope, ALL Should Be 'Hood On This Expedition..
..We'll Cope 'Cause God Is Good.. For All His Blessings, I Listen..
..Still, Somethin' Is Subjecting My Vision.. I Go To Check Da Control Panels..
..Projectory Meters To Da Far Left Clickin'.. Signals Blowin' Out Like Candles..
..Lil' Alarms Goin' Off.. "What's Da Deal, Yo'" ..'T' Comes Rushin' In..
..Told Him We 'Bout To Dart Head-On Into A Loft Or Hill.. Da Rest Are Pushin' In..
..Best We Put Trust In HIM.. We Hit Ground, Crushed Bushes & Brushed Stems..
..Da End Seemed @ It's Whim.. Finally, I Let My Legs Touch Whatever's Under Them..
..Looked Around For Da Four Other Men, But Death Got It's Upperhand On 'Em..
..& Took Grip Of They Souls, I Bit My Upper Lip & Bust My Head, Concussion..
..Plus My Nig' 'T' Layin' On Da Side Of Da Plane.. "Quit Playin'" Said One Side Of My Brain..
..But I've Been Lied To, Again.... This Is Too Much Insight On Pain..
..So I Hobble Towards Da Captain's Quarters & Grab Da Stashed Heat..
..& Ask Myself "Why Does Life Have To Stay Lacking In-Order..?" Go To Relax On Da Beach..
..Contemplating If This Was An Unsung Meeting We Had Wit' Fait Accompli'..
..Or Do I Take This In As 'Tongue-In-Cheek' & Jus' Wait On Death To Come Dyin'....?
..26 Lines.. Blah'.. Jus' A Quick-Key, Y'all.. Good Verse, Ma'.... Stay Up.. Uppin' For Votes..:cool:Trillz....

[ma-spitfire]

FIRST GLANCE
Thanks for the shout out baby. (My real name is Dwight)

FLOW
I had no problems whatsoever.
(10/10)

MULTI USAGE|METAPHORS|WORDPLAY
I was feeling the multi usage. They seemed natural and not at all forced. Nothing TOO spectacular, however.
(9/10)

VOCABULARY|GRAMMAR
The had some nice words peppered here and there throughout your drop (EX: metastasized). Grammar was alright.
(3.5/5)

CREATIVITY|DEPTH|ORIGINALITY
Hmm... I did like the depth that you put into your drop but I didn't think it was very creative as to how you and me got saved. To me, that was rather blah.
(7/10)

OVERALL COMMENT(S)
Good drop done by you ma. You never fail to impress me with your ability to accept and apply feedback to your drops, resulting in quick eleVation. My only gripe is that well, the ending was rather lackluster.

DROP RATING
(29.5/35) OR (84%)

[DTP]

FIRST GLANCE
Your font color is similar to mine. :mad:

FLOW
No prob. with you either.
(10/10)

MULTI USAGE|METAPHORS|WORDPLAY
I didn't much multis but I did see and like your metaphors (Especially the "Signals Blowin' Out Like Candles").
(8/10)

VOCABULARY|GRAMMAR
Nothing spectacular but grammar was on point.
(4/5)

CREATIVITY|DEPTH|ORIGINALITY
Now you... you did the thing on these categories. I really like how you really took the time to explain how the accident down and what was going on during the freefall of the plane. It didn’t have a "the plane went up and then it came down" feel like ma's drop plane crash did. Oh and the "I couldn't think of anything else to write" cliffhanger, I liked, lol.
(8/10)

OVERALL COMMENT(S)
Nothing really. Everything is pretty much explained in my categories.

DROP RATING
(30/35) OR (86%)

DTP gets my vote BUT ma-spitfire did the thing and had this been anyone of lesser ability or if DTP had gotten lazy in his drop she would have taken this. Stay up, baby. :kiss:

I went with ma-spitfire's first post instead of second, since they didn't really give an explanation as to why we should go with the second post.... that in mind, i just felt spitfire's was too simple. I enjoyed the flow, but the whole 'plane running out of gas' seems relatively weak. DTP's was a little harder to follow, I think cause of the punctuation, but the story seeme to flow a little better. It reminded me of his audios which I guess was appealing. If an emcee doesn't change too much from text to audio, vice versa, then that's sayin' something.... anyway, vote: DTP. Both did well though.

I vote DTP by a hair




spitfire..........from a technical perspective, it was real dope, ya rhyme scheme was dope but I didnt like the plot, the story moved along too fast, didnt allow for suspense to build up.......plus ya ender was blah.......i mean you go from 2 reggae mans approachign you, to you doing mouth to mouth, to all of a sudden being on a cruise ship, lol.......things just magicalyl appeared, lol..........you shoulda spent more time developing the story and elaborating more



DTP.........ya was the exact opposite, I didnt like ya rhyme scheme or flow too much, seemed choppy at times, but you made it up with a decent content, i liked the finisher a lot more, it was more thought out then spitfires, the development of the story was also a bit more logical and flowed more smoothly........so you win on that account mostly





good stuff guys



peace