I guess this is my intro to you all...I am just a rookie, i started writing rhymes when i was young, but i stopped until recently when 50 Cent put out his newest rhyme, "Just a Lil Bit". So I guess i could show you this rhyme, its short, rhymes are great, tell me what ya think:

30K fo ma chronic/
sellin fasta than Sonic/
mo money by the minute/
an im the only one swimmin in it/
with this deal that i got goin/
All my thoughts jus keep flowin/
hopin my skillz'll start showin/
with all that i write/
I see myself growin/
with all the rhymes that im throwin/
dove head-first into this game/
now i gotta make me a name/
Tryin to live the life of fame/
usin each different style/
so i neva stay the same/


(chorus) Just came to the rap game/
all i want is a name/
or some highlight to frame/


thats all i got fo now...verse 2 is in the making.

no feedback? :confused:

yall dont talk much huh?

ok, what tha fuck? not one damn word of advice, im here fo feedback...