This story is based on a true story with a couple of added twists to make the story interesting...this is part I

Setting: Boston Harbor, Midnight Present Day

Part I: Betrayal

I took this nigga and his seed into my crib raised both of them really while i was damn near a child myself. now this nigga has me standing at the edge of the harbor with a gun pointed at me and his niggas in a boat ready to shoot if i try some james bond shit and hop into the water. By now u thinking this is some shit to be in but u dont know the half of it.Lemme take u back so u can really undertand

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^^My thoughts exactly

This could have a possibly alrite concept, but the way you're writing isn't good. It doesn't engage the reader, it sounds like you're just telling us the story off the top of your head like it was gossip or something. Also, the idea I have of your story so far, is pretty cliched..

(expectable and overdone)