Goin Roast You Alive Dog,my Fires So Hot/
Got Every Skill Going,everythin You've Not /
My Shits So Tight,like A Tailor Sewn My Lines/
Your Rymes Bout As Tight As A Pair O Loose Fit Levis.

You A Tru G Dog?coming Str8 From The Streets/
The Only Streets You Been, Was Kissin Mike Skinners Feet/
Wats It Feel Like G/bein Dissed By A Mc From Stoke/
You Guys From Gunchester,man You All Talkin Joke.

See I Run Wit Some Of You Boys,hung Round With Donnington/
The Best Deal You Gonna Get Is Doin An Advert For Boddingtons/
Or Are You The North Side A Tru Born Hard Hilbilly/
That About Right Cuz Ya Nursery Rymes Are Just Silly.

Lets Turn Up The Gas,switch On The Butane/
I Try To Refrain But To Reign I Got Give Pain/
You Goin Out Like Cobain Just Leavin A Bloodstain/
While Again I'll Celebrate,crackin Open Champagne.

I Said Twenty Bars,could Go On All Night/
Whippin You Up Like You Was Angel Delight/
But That Shit Tastes Good And Your Taste Is Bad/
Just Impaled You With Ryme,jus Call Me Vlad.

Respect Devo-d,know A Lot O Guys In Your Area Thru Dealings N Jail,where Bout You From G.

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http://www.rapworlds.com/forums/showthread.php?t=50917&page=2
http://www.rapworlds.com/forums/showthread.php?t=50978&page=3


WTF 20 bars is that what you need to right a decnt ~verse~
still paroling around cross dressing make up, looking like a ~nurse~

This nigga dint listen mayne he cant afford to pay ~attention~
let me tutor your ass and put you in ~dentention~

I mean look at this punk he got stabbed in a shout ~out~
your rhymes are basic and wack when you shout you still aint ~loud~

you a dick ryder, damm he got fired from a blow ~job~
stil waiting in the showers to pick up the soap watchin his dick ~throb~

man wen i look at ure mom is she suppost to be on a ~diet~
shes on a triet get it wotever there is she will ~try-it~

I mean look its only my sixth bar and you getting ~killed~
you aint on fire, not even if ure verse was gettin ~grilled~

look im battling you over a PC and still you be giving me a ~disease~
you are paper in the wind bitch and im the strong blowing ~breeze~

plimstar i cant believe it that you studied for drugs ~test~
this nigga stupid, he weres pink bras around his ~chest~

i aint wasting my time on you im going to finish your arse right ~here~
you just a waste of space garbage mc get back to prison you fuckin ~queer~

no hate or dickryding votes kamikaze ryders cant vote
explained votes only

upping for votes pps

uppin for votes pps

everything before the last 3 segments were ok i guess, but all of this is yuk.
You need to look at Smack DVD or some real undergroundbattles from people who win, cuz this wont work. I really don't want to get into explaining but i will for your sake as to why.

See I Run Wit Some Of You Boys,hung Round With Donnington/
The Best Deal You Gonna Get Is Doin An Advert For Boddingtons/
^i guess that was ok, but doesn't mean it was nice.

Or Are You The North Side A Tru Born Hard Hilbilly/
That About Right Cuz Ya Nursery Rymes Are Just Silly.
^too simple in thought, it sounds like your straight rhyming but...
either on or off the net, you need to make your rhyme patterns more complex.
Use more multi-syllabic rhyme, wordplay, etc. Got to the vet arena and see.
Reason i say it? is becuz ANYONE can rap like this and win, but sooner
or later, this format is 'lyrically' and 'strategically'....uninteresting.

Lets Turn Up The Gas,switch On The Butane/
I Try To Refrain But To Reign I Got Give Pain/
You Goin Out Like Cobain Just Leavin A Bloodstain/
While Again I'll Celebrate,crackin Open Champagne.
^whole 2 bars sound like freestyle, cuz there's no connection with opponent.

I Said Twenty Bars,could Go On All Night/
Whippin You Up Like You Was Angel Delight/
But That Shit Tastes Good And Your Taste Is Bad/
Just Impaled You With Ryme,jus Call Me Vlad/
^carrying that whipping up metaphor to the next line just sounded annoying.
I mean, just re-read it yourself.

You wanna make as much lines as you can connect to your opponent, whether you know information about them or not, use your own witt. Not to diss you or anything, but i want you to understand my vote.
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WTF 20 bars is that what you need to right a decnt ~verse~
still paroling around cross dressing make up, looking like a ~nurse~

This nigga dint listen mayne he cant afford to pay ~attention~
let me tutor your ass and put you in ~dentention~

I mean look at this punk he got stabbed in a shout ~out~
your rhymes are basic and wack when you shout you still aint ~loud~

you a dick ryder, damm he got fired from a blow ~job~
stil waiting in the showers to pick up the soap watchin his dick ~throb~

man wen i look at ure mom is she suppost to be on a ~diet~
shes on a triet get it wotever there is she will ~try-it~

I mean look its only my sixth bar and you getting ~killed~
you aint on fire, not even if ure verse was gettin ~grilled~

look im battling you over a PC and still you be giving me a ~disease~
you are paper in the wind bitch and im the strong blowing ~breeze~

plimstar i cant believe it that you studied for drugs ~test~
this nigga stupid, he weres pink bras around his ~chest~

i aint wasting my time on you im going to finish your arse right ~here~
you just a waste of space garbage mc get back to prison you fuckin ~queer~
^There isn't really anything here in mind i would like to quote but you did have more aggression in your verse then pilmstarr did, if it wasn't for that, i would've probably voted for pilmstarr.


vote= Devo-D

thanx for voting still upping pps

1-0 still uppin

punches-devo
multies-n/a
flow- tie
enjoyment- both
delivery-devo
overall- devo d

sum: devo came harder plimstarr was way too elementary with the flow...no real setup or personals at all it was just elementary...

thanx for voting 2-0 still upping

This is how it broke down
Punches: none
Similies: devo-d
Flow: devo-d
Structure: plimstarr
Style: devo-d
MY VOTE GOES TO: Devo-d
This was not a good battle at all, rhymes were just too basic.
Not to down you both, but just trying to give you some opinions and feedback for future battles. Keep practicing, practice does make perfect.

Thnx For The Votes All 3-0 Thats A K.o Nice Battle Plimmstar Keep Elevatin Bruh

Safe Bro,see Ya Again Soon,when I Got My Head Around The Style Of This Site,respect

Pilmstarr came way to basic. D actual tried.
So he gets my vote here.