4 barz make it a quick battle you spit first since i set the shit up
NO dickryding hate or crew votes
G/L

No we spit whenever.
If i see your verse up the next time i'm on i'll post mine and vice versa.

shmhh u herb do u want a battle or not

http://www.rapworlds.com/forums/showthread.php?t=42603
http://www.rapworlds.com/forums/showthread.php?t=43411

where's your links.

http://www.rapworlds.com/forums/sho...6491#post636491
http://www.rapworlds.com/forums/sho...6498#post636498


uppin fo ure verse

listen homie, your shit aint rising... kinda like a wreck ship
keep talking and get punched out... like the end of a night shift
Dis dude reps a "narrow-orchestra" yet he spits on"broad-band"
dis kid doesn't have "cable" so he bites his raps off "in-demand"
look kid imma lyrical assassin watch me lyrically assass him
Chop you up put you in da pc...your heartbeat is da modem flashin
dog i thought you heard Animosity will be da illest crew around....
man i let dis cat bite off my Audio and he still couldn't produce a sound.

*waits on your drop*

lmfao.......

ima keystyle you


its kinda sad that i think of you like worthy -competiton-
nah..please somebody wake me up when there is better -opposition-/
bitch look dont let me confuse your -ability- to write a ill -verse-
but you against me, you lack the -agility- to write a decent -curse-/
look at ureslef you can tell were the dirt stops and you -begin-
i wont touch you, with the disease's infested on your -skin-/
your verse is too boring to be doing punches so -hard-hitting-/
battling you i feel like i am fucking -baby-sitting-/


Throw Two bitch!!

Alright.
Lets see some votes ppl.

Ash Lee Ice AKA Dreamy Text

listen homie, your shit aint rising... kinda like a wreck ship
keep talking and get punched out... like the end of a night shift

your best line, and even that wasn't too tight cuz u used similes two times in one bar

Dis dude reps a "narrow-orchestra" yet he spits on"broad-band"
dis kid doesn't have "cable" so he bites his raps off "in-demand"

You're tryin to connect the words too much, and simultaneously completely fucked up your punch. I was like, "Uuh . . . Okay"

look kid imma lyrical assassin watch me lyrically assass him
Chop you up put you in da pc...your heartbeat is da modem flashin

Assass is not a word. Second line was a decent attempt at a punch

dog i thought you heard Animosity will be da illest crew around....
man i let dis cat bite off my Audio and he still couldn't produce a sound.

second time you talk about "biting off". okay finisher

Overall: Well, dont be expecting that crew of yours to come together anytime soon. You're not bad, and you got some good ideas, but your whole tech sounds like you try too hard.


-Devo D-

its kinda sad that i think of you like worthy -competiton-
nah..please somebody wake me up when there is better -opposition-/

okay punch, but weak opener

bitch look dont let me confuse your -ability- to write a ill -verse-
but you against me, you lack the -agility- to write a decent -curse-/

what does agility (ability to move nimbly and quickly) have to do with writing curses? This was wack

look at ureslef you can tell were the dirt stops and you -begin-
i wont touch you, with the disease's infested on your -skin-/

Weak punch

your verse is too boring to be doing punches so -hard-hitting-/
battling you i feel like i am fucking -baby-sitting-/

Weak

Overall: I can tell you were keystyling. well, I know you can do better than that. Unfortunately that's not gonna win this battle.

Verdict
-Devo D- was obviously bullshittin' and Ash just isnt too good yet. However, Ash had better punches and was more in the spirit. -Devo D-'s rhymes were mostly fillers, and both of you need to consider spittin more bars, cuz in 4 bars this was a waste of time.
Not tryin to hurt your feelings, juss stating the fact.

VOTE: Ash Lee Ice AKA Dreamy Text

lmfao ^^^ please please quit the dick ryding

-Devo D- was obviously bullshittin'

huh???? bullshittin ?



dreamy text : 1
Devo: 0

Thnx for the vote but when i get a real opponent i'll spit harder.
I actually didn't try here at all.

lmfao real oppenent you spat first you fucking herb
if u wanted a real match you should have come alot harder

Ups.
1-0..

[listen homie, your shit aint rising... kinda like a wreck ship
keep talking and get punched out... like the end of a night shift]

Wasn't a strong opening at all... Not only did it lack the instant appeal a battle verse should have, the "punch out like the end of a night shift" is horribly played...

[Dis dude reps a "narrow-orchestra" yet he spits on"broad-band"
dis kid doesn't have "cable" so he bites his raps off "in-demand"]

Wasn't that good, but the punch seemed all right... You definately need to get into the habbit of using a bit more word-play...

[look kid imma lyrical assassin watch me lyrically assass him
Chop you up put you in da pc...your heartbeat is da modem flashin]

.......... :rolleyes: I'm not even going to comment on this one..

[dog i thought you heard Animosity will be da illest crew around....
man i let dis cat bite off my Audio and he still couldn't produce a sound.]

This was also presented in a very weak sense... The punchline wasn't effective enough...

Well, if that wasn't your best, I sincerely advise you start showing it. It's clear that you have a clear sense for punchlines, but you seem to lack the hard-hitting amunition that comes along with it. Your word-play could use some work, and you may want to also include more compatible multies. Generally, the delivery (in text sense) of the verse was simple. I understand you're trying to make a quick name for yourself and be recognized, but I think you should do a bit more homework on your opponents to inflict personal punchlines as well... I'm not trying to talk down to you, considering I'm no original of this site myself. This is coming from one new member to another... I hope to see better next time.

Rating: 6.5/10
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[its kinda sad that i think of you like worthy -competiton-
nah..please somebody wake me up when there is better -opposition-/]

Not very effective.... Considering she put everyone in a suspense state concerning her talent, I suppose the diss is decent due to the quality of her verse... I can give you the diss point, but that wasn't a great open either...

[bitch look dont let me confuse your -ability- to write a ill -verse-
but you against me, you lack the -agility- to write a decent -curse-/]

This made no sense to me at all... It looks like you just wanted to find some words that rhymed together to create the double bar...

[look at ureslef you can tell were the dirt stops and you -begin-
i wont touch you, with the disease's infested on your -skin-/]

Was this supposed to be a personal punch or what..? It appears it had the potential to be either a decent diss or punchline, but you definately overlooked your own creativity with that.

[your verse is too boring to be doing punches so -hard-hitting-/
battling you i feel like i am fucking -baby-sitting-/]

Not a good close. . . But you did have a point. There really wasn't a need for you to make to many hard hitting punches... Your second line was wack...


Well, you could use some work with your word play and multies as well... There wasn't anything amazingly creative about your verse, but you did kind of inch by with the two slighter punches which was more effective. I did enjoy it in a way, being as though it was a freestyle.... I believe you could have came harder though.

Rating 7/10
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Both of you underestimated each other, and that turned this battle into something not very interesting at all... I suggest you both work on your punchlines and personals a bit more, also incorporating better word play an multi lines instead of the one word rhyme scheme... It would help with the enjoyment of both verses. Due to the fact of more logical disses according to the verse presented...


Vote= Devo D

thanx for the vote still uppin pps

punches - ash
flow - devo
personals - tie(none really)
multis - devo(ash using assass and devo didnt do the best either but yeah)
creativity - ash

overall - ash

It was a close one like they said u all need to work on ya stuff and elevate...

thanx for the vote 2-1 to ash and please newbies dont tell me to elevate cos it was a quick keystyle i would murk you in one, you only have ten posts , herb of newbies makin my record, look bad who cant vote grrrrrrrrr

To Devo:

yeah motherfucker, but u cant tell me the same shit. i specifically said in my vote i wasnt tryin to insult yo ass, and i knew yo ass did a keystyle. Accuse me of dickryidng? get on top of your fuckin game for u step to me. Dont let me murk u, u dont want Lou. i dont care if it WAS a fuckig keystyle, that shit was WACK. WACK MOTHERFUCKER!!!. I'm tired of looking out for your feelings and shit, cuz ya'll aint kids, and if u is one, get the fuck off this site!

retarded ass nigga . . .

1 -I was not reffering to you!
2 -WTF has it got to do with you?
3 -I will murk you !!!
4 -To me that is a call out if u want a battle set the shit up and spit!!
5 -We shall resolve this matter over a battle if that is what you are
suggesting?

Dreamy
listen homie, your shit aint rising... kinda like a wreck ship
keep talking and get punched out... like the end of a night shift
Ok:best punchline

Dis dude reps a "narrow-orchestra" yet he spits on"broad-band"
dis kid doesn't have "cable" so he bites his raps off "in-demand"
no:nice rhyme scheme but not a good punchline this is rap not a 40 year old guys basement when want personals

look kid imma lyrical assassin watch me lyrically assass him
Chop you up put you in da pc...your heartbeat is da modem flashin
NO:WTF

dog i thought you heard Animosity will be da illest crew around....
man i let dis cat bite off my Audio and he still couldn't produce a sound
No:first line was kinda of a boaster second was good but sounded bitten


Devo

its kinda sad that i think of you like worthy -competiton-
nah..please somebody wake me up when there is better -opposition-/
Ok:this an ok opener kind of a filler

bitch look dont let me confuse your -ability- to write a ill -verse-
but you against me, you lack the -agility- to write a decent -curse-/
ok:the flow was tight but not much of a punch

look at ureslef you can tell were the dirt stops and you -begin-
i wont touch you, with the disease's infested on your -skin-/
umm:the rhyme is simple and i dont know if its a punch

your verse is too boring to be doing punches so -hard-hitting-/
battling you i feel like i am fucking -baby-sitting-/
good:best punchline but you should have said more on the second line
metas:none
punch:Devo
Personals:Tie
Rhyme:Devo
Enjoyment:Tie
Overall:Devo
hard to decide because of the keystyling but devo got it with punchlines only advice is PERSONALS

thanks for the vote stiil upping 2-2

This Goes To Devo9-d
His Punches Just Seemed To Come In Harder,i Think This Battle Was Maybe Rushed A L;ittle,doesnt Seem Like Much Thought Was Put Into It

Devo-d 1

thanx for the vote still upping on cotes 3-2 to me

Ups.
Need votes here.

uppin please pps appreciated :D

Flow/Structure: Ash Lee
Punches: Devo
Personals: Tie
Metas:
Multies: Ash Lee
Creativity: Devo
Consistancy:
Wordplay: Tie
Enjoyment: Devo (only just)
Overall vote: Devo-D

Devo clearly for the punches... Devo, check my drop out man "Going Nutz!" and leave feed please, it's in my sig... Oh and people go and vote on the battle with me and Devo please, thanks.:)

thanx for the vote still uppin :D 4-2 to me

punches and creativity went to dreamy text... i dont got time to break it all down right now...but my vote goes to Dreams

Lol ^^ Still Uppin 4-3 Please

Keep em coming.
Voters saying D had better punches.
Can the next vote show me where he had better punches.
Just wondering. And thnx every1 for the votes so far. 3-4

^^^^Dream, your punches were very weak, Devo came hard with the punches and defiantly murked you with his punches... Dream, you think you own this site already, I think you should just STFU.

Keep em coming.
Voters saying D had better punches.
Can the next vote show me where he had better punches.
Just wondering. And thnx every1 for the votes so far. 3-4


lmfao shmmh ^^

thanx for the vote 2-1 to ash and please newbies dont tell me to elevate cos it was a quick keystyle i would murk you in one, you only have ten posts , herb of newbies makin my record, look bad who cant vote grrrrrrrrr - devo d

Ayo i may be new to this site but i battle people in real life been keystyling on aim where we don't have days to reply and i have been on other sites if u think u can murk me set up a battle nigga don't ever call me a fucking newbie again though u don't even know me...

STFU ^^ JOG ON NO ONE CARES ABOUT YOU !



uppin please

Devo: 4
Ash Lee Ice: 3

still uppin pps appreciated

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Dreamy
listen homie, your shit aint rising... kinda like a wreck ship
keep talking and get punched out... like the end of a night shift
Ok:best punchline

Dis dude reps a "narrow-orchestra" yet he spits on"broad-band"
dis kid doesn't have "cable" so he bites his raps off "in-demand"
no:nice rhyme scheme but not a good punchline this is rap not a 40 year old guys basement when want personals

look kid imma lyrical assassin watch me lyrically assass him
Chop you up put you in da pc...your heartbeat is da modem flashin
NO:WTF

dog i thought you heard Animosity will be da illest crew around....
man i let dis cat bite off my Audio and he still couldn't produce a sound
No:first line was kinda of a boaster second was good but sounded bitten


Devo

its kinda sad that i think of you like worthy -competiton-
nah..please somebody wake me up when there is better -opposition-/
Ok:this an ok opener kind of a filler

bitch look dont let me confuse your -ability- to write a ill -verse-
but you against me, you lack the -agility- to write a decent -curse-/
ok:the flow was tight but not much of a punch

look at ureslef you can tell were the dirt stops and you -begin-
i wont touch you, with the disease's infested on your -skin-/
umm:the rhyme is simple and i dont know if its a punch

your verse is too boring to be doing punches so -hard-hitting-/
battling you i feel like i am fucking -baby-sitting-/


PUNCH:devo
mega metaz:devo
personals:dreamy
flow:devo
joyment:devo
Creativity:devo

vote:devo

thanx for the votes all much appreciated thats my win 5-3
good battle dreamy keep at it