yo what up spitz due by tommorow

rules
10 linez
1 round
3-0 is k.o
5.0 is win

it dont matter who go first

10 lines damn...aight

did u want longer

~ p.s. battles are supposed to be bout 10 bars , not 30 ! .. lmao .... ~



i just said ten

cus some cat posted that

spit by tonight dawg




yo my ~lines~ will ~penetrate~ your~vocal~cords~have you ~screamin~high~pitch~praying to da ~lordz~//1
ya makin a ~mokery~of wak ~rap~boardz~slicen while im swingin ~my~swordz~//2

my ghats will ~reincenerate~ your ~brain~with ~hollow~tips~peircing your ~temple~blood~gushin~//3
~uzi~shots~got you ~confused~inject ~devine~with~nuclear~aidz~put this ~omen~ in a ~cuncusion~//4

heating this nigga up ~radioactivly~put him in ~amnesia~fukk up dis niggaz ~memory~//5
you ain a ~blood~omen~cuz i split ya ~vaines~and infected you with ~viral~h.i.v~//6

~denomic~lashin~when im killin with a ~passion~i make sure my ~enimies~envey~me~before i start ~smashin~//7
im~thrashin and ~bashin~omen the illeterite~couldnt brong heat if i caused him heat ~flashin~//8

im ~causing~lethal~desructionz~my ~heat~causing~emceez~deadly~life~eruptionz~//9
im ~str8~splittin~ur~slyablez~got u ~studderin~shakin ya like the parkinsnes ~disease~cauing ~interruptionz~//10


feedback???

pleeze???

Grim Reaper your finishing move must be " the Sleeper"(zzzzzzzz) / your girl is the same age as R. Kelly's so don't worry you can keep her / Grim only reaping losses / you couldn't spit sick even if you were nauseous(barfing)/ beat you bad like a white boy at a L.A riot / your rhymes ain't phat(fat) they must be on a diet / you paid people to listen to your CD cause even for free no one would try it / blow your head off / but your still gonna have to face defeat / the closest you got to making a song / was running in a "track" meet / have "Faith" / i might give you "One more chance" / this "Bad Boy" ain't no "Biggie" / cause truth is he don't want war like France(U.N Resolution) / i'm leaving "Knights" on "Death Row" for killing my time you ain't "Armstrong" so don't bother picking up the "Lance"(try to figure out that bar) /

...bLaH

uppin for votez

Grim Reaper- Simply put, Waaaay to complicated, and Waay to forced. You're multis at times made the verses hard to understand and boring.
Example-"im ~causing~lethal~desructionz~my ~heat~causing~emceez~deadly~life~eruptionz~//9
im ~str8~splittin~ur~slyablez~got u ~studderin~shakin ya like the parkinsnes ~disease~cauing ~interruptionz~/"

Not much wordplay or punchlines made it feel flat to me. Another problem plagueing this rhyme was the flow was off in a lot of places. Good use of multis where your competetion lacked, but to me it was detrimental to you.

Divinebloodomen- Mad, Mad puches, I'm slightly impressed. To me, good use of punches and humor is critical in winning my vote. I'll admit a lot of your punches were a tad on the simple side, as far as rhyme structure, and multis go, but still funny.
Example- "Grim only reaping losses / you couldn't spit sick even if you were nauseous(barfing)"- See, rhyme structure is way too simple, but I really liked the punches.
Example-beat you bad like a white boy at a L.A riot / your rhymes ain't phat(fat) they must be on a diet / you paid people to listen to your CD cause even for free no one would try it" The first two lines, again too simple, but funny, and a great metaphor with the first line. The last line should have been excluded from the rhyme alltogether.

I considered both verses good and bad in totally differant respects.(Grim being good with the multis, and Divine being good with th punches). But like I said, to me punches count more in a battle, so I'm Definatly given this vote to
Divinebloodomen!!!

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nice vote

but does vocab count

lol

this is how we vote at my site

pick best lines from each contestant

flowz-
vocab-
metas-
mutlis-
formation-
creativity-
suprise-

well no beef it koo

WoW i MuSt Say I WaS sUrPrIseD To gEt a voTe...i WaS EXPeCtInG tO LoSe thIS oNe tOo...TYKE i'm switching styles cause when i spit metas and get creative i tend to get over the youngstas heads...check my other battles(J-I-Z-M AND MCD)...in those battles i lost to simplicity and basics!...then when i tried that approach i lost to Ms Mack...so i'm experimenting...but pleasing people on this site has been a bitch...i've beating some really good peoples(been spitting since 8yrs. old) on other sites but the people and Mods were older...so they understood me...but i'm definetly having trouble here!...THaNkS fOr thE VoTe! and the breakdown!


...yo Grim quit with the spaming your littering the boards(can a MOd take care of that please)...this ain't "your" site...learn something while your here...like how "this" site rolls...peace and respect!

...but pleasing people on this site has been a bitch...i've beating some really good peoples(been spitting since 8yrs. old) on other sites but the people and Mods were older...so they understood me...but i'm definetly having trouble here!...

yea it is a bitch pllezing them

usually i get k.o with such high vocab and ish

Yeah, you'r vocab was much more advanced, but I don't vote on a point system or anything(1 point for this 1 for that). I vote on the overall effect the verses leave me with. This was close as far as skill goes, but he dissed you way more, and that counts more to me. No beef.

ok i guess i will use more idsses next time i really didnt think i would have to but aight

I'm not the only one who votes, and I don't pick the winner. It's just something to work on the next time. Stck with your vocab and multis, just fit some good punches and disses in there too. But enough spam, uppin for votes!

uppin for votes still

Divinebloodomen won.....

grim- when people hear a battle they dont wanna sit and think about what u just said they just wanna hear somethin hot that they will get

im not gonna wanna hear a battle go home think about it for an hour then realize it was good

uppin...