Rules:
Everyone should know the basic rules. No bitching or fighting in the threads. Or shit talking. 1st offense results in 1 docked vote, 2nd offense results in dq. Everyone must vote on atleast 1 other topical or you will be docked a vote.
How to win:
If your opponent no shows, (IF YOU NO SHOW YOU WILL BANNED FROM THE NEXT TOPICAL TOURNEY EVENT)
or 3-0 Ko or a 4-1 ko or a first to 5. If a vote is placed as a tie each will get 1 vote a piece. and if it goes to 5-5 i will be the deciding vote.

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On most cases extensions will be discussed between me and your opponent.
Length: Up to 60 lines

Have fun and enjoy.


TOPIC:
Your involved in a plane hi-jacking and notice it is a significant person known around the world. Who is it? Explain how it happened, it's destination. Whats going on what you do and the outcome of it all?
**Note you can add a hook if you want and dialogue, this will not count against your line limit**

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THE TERRORIST
I bypass the security without a close inspection
Stand in the lobby, heart beating rapidly like fatal infection
I wipe the sweat from my forehead and glance behind me
Breathe a sigh of relief, there’s no chance they’d find me
I sneak to the basement, search for the right placement
Perfect! Behind the boiler, they’ll never escape it
I offer a prayer of thanks to the God who guides my actions
And take off my backpack in a gliding fashion
I can’t deny the attraction of fighting this holy war
The prosperity of his believers; the people I know it’s for
I take the small black case out and repress my laughter
I’ll address it after, now’s the time for my craftwork
In perfect sequence with the draft-work, I set the clock
Thirty seconds should do it, if I run non-stop
The timer starts, I race like a sprinter leaving his mark
Escaping this spark of destruction which breeds in the dark

THE CIVILIAN
I stand working alone, Just 10 minutes untill i can go home
Not seen my family for days, Ive only spoke to them on the phone
That droning tone of the machines and chatter drills through my head
But I dont listen to them, I believe what I already knew instead
And I dread it to be true, I couldnt handle the rumours
But what I didnt know is that in 30 seconds, People could be suffering tumours
And so I carry on as usaul, My pen in my hand
Another good days work , I felt so proud, So grand
I stand up to leave, But I couldnt believe my eyes
A huge explosion sails through the building, A wail of cries
Smoke filled the lungs of each of us, Coughing and weezing
I stumble through the rubble, Struggling to breath, Dust causing sneezing
I feel like Stevie Wonder, I see nothing but black in each place I look
Who could of done this? Planted an evil seed leaving the heart shook
With exits blocked by raging fires, I stand in amazement
With a view from the window, I see help outside on the pavement
and the screeching sirens, Bring joy to my ears
But my work destroyed, Not just todays but the whole years
I let out my tears, Its not just work lost, But friends
And I hope these bombings dont set out new trends
A voice in the distance, Confirms the best of my hopes
But seeing is believing, So I stop and pinch myself
Realising Im not dreaming, I call back to the voice
I see the figuire in the corridoor, And I scream in rejoice
How this wasnt Gods choice, But the workings of evil
Thank God I made it, And so down I Kneel
To pray for those victims, Who wern`t so lucky, And please
Dont let this happen again, And dont let family plant those evil seeds
For the sake of mankind, Why cant we all just live in peace
And as Tupac said " We gotta end the war in the streets let alone the middle east"

I thought this was to do with a plane hi jacking? Mind theories ish has nothin to do with a plane hi jacking.....or is that just me??

Anywho........30min key.....its lacking multies for the majority...focussing on the content...but yeh..1st ever topical :(

Boarding the plane with only sunshine on my mind
I entered the aircraft now leaving our shores behind
I usually get bored in time with these lengthy flights
So the idea of sleeping pills was a tempting sight
A significant fight to resist but the desire was there
With the pop of a few pills I was no longer there
Hidden n shared within the depths of my dreams
I swear though I was hearing piercing screams
Awoken from cloud beams and tedious quietness
Eyes opened slowly, only to see bloodshed n violence
And a man standing ova a body with gun in hand
Blood smeared chairs, all chaos from but one man
But I didn’t understand, what was his purpose
What was his reason for doing god a disservice?
More to the surface, but what was his reason
From the body count it looked like hunting season
Now fitted for treason an obviously lacked a soul
I looked around to see who would crack then fold
Or attack as bold, but faces where cold n frightened
The man paced the aisle, my spine just tightened
I took a look at his face, and then terror struck
If it was who I suspected, we were out of luck
He then stood on a chair, ready to give the orders
Pointed his gun at aisles and divided us to quarters
The purpose? Unsure of…I crawled to my position
Talking to other survivors, they new our opposition
Alquaeda trained proposition was who we faced
An with a bomb strapped, time now became a race
“Was this our fate?” I whispered to the other survivors
“If we go down trying at least people will admire us”
But will require us to take fate into our own hands
He fired a shot, signaling he was ready for his plan
He told us to stand and moistened his lips to speak
“Your about to make history, without limbs to treat”
“Or souls to keep for this plane is on course for death”
Almost choked on breath, learning the planes intention
Heading towards parliament house was his suggestion
I then gave the signal, getting ready to rush this man
Eyes circled waiting moments for the drop of my hand
20 odd now rushed to stand and charge an attack
Bullet shells flying, I expected one through my back
Or one to tack n wound while people die left n right
Dodging bullets I stepped, steadied n lept with might
The leap took me right to his rib cage, flawing him
Right then, 12 others attacked n started mauling him
Noticing a hand free, he reached for the detonator
If we couldn’t stop him now, there would be no later
Then a second of silence, time froze to slow speed
The button armed, the plane shook below me
The grim reaper appeared n was ready to follow me
Body started hollowing my soul started to wonder
Innocent lives saved while still dieing with honor

Let the voting begin, explained votes please...

Okay:

Mind I even went as far as PMing u to edit ur's but I guess you didnt "mind".

Voting....

Mind Theory: Yours was good for wat it was, but that is the problem, in a TOPICal Tournament, the TOPIC is a huge part of it. You went way off the topic. While you did have some creativity, i felt your ending was very expected. I liked your piece, given a DIFFERENT topic I think you would have won if you stayed on it.

Ezek: Your's was much more simple then what I expected. But the flow was definately there. Story develops well, and you stayed on topic while still using your own creativity.

vote-Ezek.

thanks for voting...yeh i know it was basic but i took away lyricism to tell the story n ish..but yeh...1-0...vote up ppl

the voting ...........

MIND THEORY
your verse was good didnt really keep to the point that much in my opinion, structure was ok but it just didnt seem original to me, you flowed a bit of topic

EZEK
your verse structure was pritty basic, but it had a good flow, and good creativity, it was good to read and seemed very original.


Vote= Ezek

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0-2 him

i didnt really stick to the topic but whatever

i lose (prolly) good battle ezek

zeke - I liked your verse, obviously it isnt your best but it still tells a pretty fucking nice story, all the way though the flow was on point, and the multis which were there came off so nicely, good work on that. The story itself, not being majorly original (tough with such a topci) was told very skillyfully, the imagry was nice and i felt that i could really picture the attack. Few things your verse lacked, vocab was alright but coulda been better and obviously it coulda been more technical with multis inners etc. The big long single verse coulda also been broken down, with a hook or vocab or something? wasnt a major problem just a bit intimidating reading such a long block of text.

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Body started hollowing my soul started to wonder
Innocent lives saved while still dieing with honor

Overall was a nice verse maybe you coulda taken more time on it but....whatever, 7.5/10




mind theory - Your peice wasnt bad at all either, you didnt exactly stay on topic which let the piece down a bit. If you had at least been slightly more creative i woulda given this battle to you. The terrosit verse i liked, flow was once aghain real nice, multis were there but not anything exceptional. I nocitced that niether of you incorperated the "important person" which woulda been much better. Both of you also seemed to be the sterotypical "Islamic terrosist". Mind, was your attack set in the airport? Anyway back to your verse, the civillian's verse i didnt feel was as good as the terroists one, but twas still pretty good, i didntly like the stevie wonder meta much. The structuture went a bit erratic towards the end of the verse but the flow wasnt comprismsied luckerly.

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The timer starts, I race like a sprinter leaving his mark
Escaping this spark of destruction which breeds in the dark

Overall it was a pretty good peice, i woulda prefered it if you had kept to the terroist all the way thought your peice,
7/10




Vote Zeke by a smidgion

Closed. E.Z wins 3-0 KO & advances to the next round....