Rules:
Everyone should know the basic rules. No bitching or fighting in the threads. Or shit talking. 1st offense results in 1 docked vote, 2nd offense results in dq. Everyone must vote on atleast 1 other topical or you will be docked a vote.
How to win:
If your opponent no shows, (IF YOU NO SHOW YOU WILL BANNED FROM THE NEXT TOPICAL TOURNEY EVENT)
or 3-0 Ko or a 4-1 ko or a first to 5. If a vote is placed as a tie each will get 1 vote a piece. and if it goes to 5-5 i will be the deciding vote.

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Length: Up to 60 lines

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Topic:
You come in contact with a rare disease and after hundreds of tests done to you by the worlds best doctors it shows that you cannot die. But you age as normal and feel the effects of it as well. What do you do, attempt to do? How do you handle this? What things do you see in your life and experience?
**Note you can add a hook if you want and dialogue, this will not count against your line limit**

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The Life Of The Endless, Forever Alive- Forever Friendless
Why does God Resent Us? Isn’t There Some Good Alive In us?

Looking Back...

The Diagnosis Scared me, This Was Nothing Like What Life Had Prepared Me,
I Became A FreakShow-Science Rarity, I went to The Doc and Begged him to Repair me
Narrative:“We’ve never seen this, Listen Carefully, I know It’s Hard But...”
“And With That I Was Out the Door, Seeking Blood”
I was young at the time, Arrogant and Blind, Tempted by an Endless Time Line
Always Holding play.. Rather then taking Time to Stop and Rewind, Instead to Remind
Myself that I wasnt like Humankind, I would rob and steal without fear of retributions for crimes
As Time intertwined, The light of the everlasting Devine, Fate and Destiny were no longer words of mine
I seeked every Adventure, Raced peaks many feared to Venture, Named Histories greatest Inventor
Each and Every Wife? I’d resent her, I’m so frail and Fragile now it hurts to Apply my Dentures

Tell it like it is..

Life as a Gift and a Curse, If Given a chance I’d Flip To Reverse, Die Mortal and Grip to the Hearse
I was to Eager to Get to the Verse, Skip the Rehearse, An Encaged Soul Eager to Disperse
There Has to be a reason, I pointed to Genetics, surely that is it... It must be in Heretics
Certainly no more logical explanation, science otherwise would reject it,
They told me to just Accept it, So I gave them My Life and said “protect it”
But I quickly found myself amongst their other past Lab Pet Shit.. Why is life all about Regrets then?

But Then Again...

If I had one Gift for the world I’d give them, a fraction of all my combined Wisdom,
I even went as far as tellin mother earth I would At least Outlive them
Age became my Only Competition, I knew math from Pie to Long Division,
Famous Inventors..Albert Einstein? Albert Nobel? Are you Kiddin? I out did them
I Majored In life, Why Has Death Become my Only Addiction ?


It’s been good...

I Walked with John The Apostle, Single Handedly Spread The Gospel, Eased tension when things got Hostile,
Lived past the Brink of Impossible, A Modern Day Dinosaur, I’m just a Living Fossil
I’ve been pure of strife, Gathered Memories as sharp as a Knife, Stabbed in the Back by each Wife
Made light of dark nights,Yet for all the good I do, I find no cure for this curse called Life
I Have jumped Off of Every Mountain Peak, and felt Pain, Pain That Laughed At Novacaine,
I shouldered Pain, and cried my Tears of Rain, Watched Peers fall from Fame, And all I Claim
Is to My Own Disdain, No Matter What Displayed, Nothing Outdates my Name, My Claim To Fame?
I’ve pointed any weapon you can Name, Devised the Most Precised Aim, Alas, No Weapon Can End My Reign
Began to Blame every lover,I remember blaming my Mother, My Father, My Sister, My Brother
But for All the Blame I’d Appointed, Blamed myself more than any Other
I felt as God had Cursed me, Resented me now more then Ever,
Pain Over Pleasure, A Forbidden Treasure Beyond Any Mere Measure
Suddenly I felt Clever, Reached Feats I Didn’t think I’d Ever, And Surpassed Goals I Thought I’d Never,
But I soon found my Truth, Earth’s greatest Endeavor, A Living Guardian Angel Forever

next time... atleast let ur opponent check in...


(no need to respond, dont need thread cluttered)

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Life longer than the 9 months in that bitch I come from
I run fully towards what these mortals run from
Come from a time when my people despised
After some time the wrong doing they realized
But everything revolves and those feelings revised
Savage exterminating tactics devised….

He has lived forever, they call him a relic
Old age and death you can smell it
Has trouble remembering his story he tells it

I am world famous everyone seen my picture
Religious scholars everywhere apply scripture
To my predicament my birth they predict it
It’s been a long time since sip tit
I persist but I still exist even after slit wrist
My life won’t resist death won’t answer
Even if he has Aids or cancer
The doctors ran the test I am immune to death
While cursed with this cruelty of this ailment
Seen the brown people shown cruelty by the pail men
Seen regimes that Hitler esq. Hide there deaths
In the soil the, laborers toil, the earth spoil
Men fighting over new resources beside oil
No one loyal assassination attempts foiled
By my illness, my will is unfulfilled…..

His memory starts to fade

What was I going to say next?
It looked liked I was to stay hexed…..

He starts to get incoherent
His conscience you hear in
It has stepped in
Seen new weapon
That scraped the earth
Babies raped at birth...
By nuclear side effects
New regimes hide the deaths
Brutal genocide they hide
That is the end of this aside

His face with wrinkles, crease in the forehead
Lost his love he not deceased but can you be more dead
Old age he can’t even sallow food
When she died I said I want to follow you
Now I live a life of solitude
Passing with time the last of a kind.
The cruelty of racism I remind

iuno if votes can only be given by participants in the tourny or not, but here are my thoughts anyways....

well, first off, it would have been good to read more about specific events that you would have faced in this type of situation, for instance, contagious , you rhyme about being a lab rat, and having tests done, but what kind of tests, what type of shit would they feed you, how this rare disease might fight off these things that would in any other case kill a man...and king , you rhyme bout seeing genocide and what not, but what kind of genocide, were you a part of it? get stabbed in the hear and still walking maybe?, that woulda been a good addition..

both flows are off imo opinion, con's are too long, and the kings are too short..
both got multis, but con's got better ones in my opinion, (though the flow sorta decreases the multis affects in both rhymes)..
vocab goes to con, used more lines thus more space for more complex vocab n waht not. ,both y'all shoulda used the given amount of lines to be more specific and use more vocab and complexity..

con's got some good original shit, like that dentures line, and the majored in life/death addiction line...
i dunno man, it just doesnt seem like king put much effort into this at all,

so, vote = contagious

I'll try and break this down as much as I can while I have some time, I apologize if I miss anything out.

Was the writer on topic? Both writers were on topic, nothing seperating them in that respect

Flow- Both flows were entirely different, but neither was really consistent. Contagious' structure was very stretched at times and King's structure seemed very short at times too. Neither really had a consistent flow throughout the verse

Multis- Although pretty simple, King had a fairly consistent amount of multis in his verse. Contagious also had a consistent amount in his verse, but a lot more complex than King's. Only thing that let Contagious down was the stretching of the lines sacrificed the flow of the multis and therefore the effect of them.

Vocabulary - Contagious had far more complex vocab and more detail within his verse compared with King, who was rather simplistic a bit too often.

Originality - Both had some original ideas, obviously the whole verse isn't going to be completely original and creative, but I felt Contagious had better originality and far more consistency in that regard

Imagery - Both verses created a vivid image of the situation in my mind and I understood exactly what each writer was trying to express/portray.

Depth - As Adam said before, both writer's could have gone into greater detail in certain aspects of their respective rhymes - King could have gone into more depth with the deepness of his feelings and Contagious could have gone into more depth with the 'lab rat' situation, possibly explaining in more detail what was going through his mind as these experiments were going on and how they were effecting you mentally.

Both writers had a nice unique aspect on the topic given. Styles were very different which made reading both of them refreshing. As explained above, both could have improved certain aspects of their writing, especially with the structure I felt. But my vote goes to Contagious for the overall more consistent verse.

Flow- King

Multis- Contagious

Vocabulary- Contagious

Originality- Contagious

Imagery- Contagious

Depth- Contagious

Hook Originality- Neither

Wordplay/Metaphors- Meta's to Contagious

Kinna one sided battle, Contagious..i thought ya lines were over stretched which made me lose tha flow in a few places...you had some strong imagery that helped and u went into a good amount of depth with the topid telling it from different sides which was a good idea...

King, ya verse was cool...but really didnt match to Contagious as much...u kinna sat on the surface with it and i thought u coula taken it further...flow was real nice with tha shorter lines...some nice imagery and good ideas used..

Overal Vote - Contagious.