"You keep me coming back for more.."
This night has blessed me...
So I was seated next to a new potential love. New feeling. New passion. The lights of the city glistened so high and reflected through the windshield onto his face. The shadows surrounding were beautiful, I wanted to read his eyes. I wanted to read his soul. I was thinking in my head about wether I am ready, ready to love someone, and to let myself fall. So consumed in thoughts of everything and lost in my own little train of thoughts that leads to blurred visions and dreams. I look out the window...and there he is. Waving towards me. Looking at me, and I glanced over. It was him. The love of my life, the beat to my heart. Waving at me, and I froze. I put my hand up and waved and whispered "Hi Calvin". Not that he could hear me, or come close to recognizing the soft whispers in my voice, the same whispers that I hushed that night.."I knew I would get you one of these days" Echoing through the seconds of time and the lightened room. Lightened from the sunrise and the early, early morning hours. I put my head down as he disappeared in that car, I closed my eyes... and when I opened them my head was on his chest, my hair all around him and I’m kissing from one end of the chest to another. Left to right. Kiss after kiss. So suddenly and so fast, yet so gently and softly. It gave away what I felt for him right there. I looked up and saw him dozing away with a smirk on his face, and I laid down. He wrapped his right arm around me, and he fell asleep. I stayed awake for some time after. Humming in my head.."baby your all that I want..." and I hold him close "when I’m lying here in your arms." Living a dream "I’m finding it hard to believe," And I wish that this moment, would last forever "we’re in heaven"...
I woke up hours later with him turned away on the opposite side of the bed. He had passed out so drastically, no movement would wake him, but..I had to get him up for work. After continuously attempting to wake both him and Michael up I gave up. I nudged his shoulder trying to get him to speak to me "Calvin, wake up! I can't get Michael out to wake up"..He shifted a little "Okay, just a sec". He turned around and fell right back asleep. I sat at the edge of the bed desperately searching for a smoke. There was one in front of me, with no lighter handy. I took my stuff and got dressed. I slid across the bed and kissed him as I was leaving. "Call me tomorrow"..And I closed the door.

I stepped out of tailor into the wet morning grass. It was a cold yet sun filled summers dawn. I walked over to work and I was ready. That day was the best day of my life. With very little sleep I was a very happy and cheery girl that day. I expected Calvin around 12:30 to get up and eat. I’m not sure that he showed up at all. I had to go uptown to work, so I was disappointed at not seeing him.When I got off of work there was a message from Calvin,"Hey, I was pretty drunk last night, I dont even know when you left me this morning. I woke up and had no idea where I was, call me later". I smiled at the thought of him waking up clueless. It turned out that he had woken up butt naked and jumped out of his bed to find the landlord lady cleaning up last nights mess. The one thing that I wanted to tell him from that night is that I had an amazing time...One thing that I never got to say.

I lifted my head back up and I was lost in the lights again, in that same car. It was as if reality just flashed before me. Of course I’m not ready to move on..
Silly girl.
"Love is all that I need, and I find it there in your heart...
It isn’t so hard to see..We’re in heaven"

Just something I wrote, and thought I'd post in here. It's a story that keeps going, but that's just a part of it. Feedback please.

I loved your imagery in this... If it's one thing that you do ALL THE TIME, it's paint a picture in your reader's mind. I felt it was better in the beginning with the car scene, but when the imagery faded slightly, emotion took over, and it went on from there... So far, great story, and since it is kinda personal, brings it to life all the more. can't wait to see this continue... Keep writing, girlie...

Of course I’m not ready to move on..
Silly girl.
Heh..
Liked the ending - very nice way to wrap it up. This was very surreal; dream-like. I enjoyed the read.

Thanks for your reply
This story has so much emotion that comes straight from the cores of me. I havent read it since I wrote it but like now, its like I relive it. Every second and moment, and feeling. And it makes me cry, because I fall right back into that situation all over again. It may mean more to me then it does to the rest of you but and I hope the feeling it gives you will be the same one I share. So meet me half way with text..
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I enjoyed reading this, I loved how you incorporated the song 'Heaven' into your story, was it playing on the radio in the car or something? Really liked your descriptiveness it made it real easy to actually imagine and get a feel for your story... I kinda had it playing out in my head if you know what I mean. You should post the next part, I wanna read more! :)

The song heaven plays a big part because from that night, not at the car but when he fell asleep I was humming that song and falling in love. And maybe I will post the second part, thanks for your reply...

i liked readin that divine that was deep. and well written. you had a joke here and there....it was tight. i don't think niggas sposed to post here but i had sumthin to say so....

You are supposed to post here
and thank you =]

well put together for quite a short poece of writing