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Topic:
The Family Curse... this is your topic write it as you will.

Checking In. Nice Topic ;)

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We are looking at a man, his fingers brush his face as if for the first time, only the gilded edge of a mirror lets us know we are looking into a mirror......

My skin feels smooth, yet sharper than my shattered heart/
What use are my memories when all whom mattered depart/
My mind's tired, its been racing life's track for many a year/
Gazing blindly at eyes which have shod plenty of tears/
Life is finished, my only desire today is death and decay/
My life has been chronicled from birth's breath to today/
Mirror shifts, refocuses as I'm lost within my memories/
Born at dawn, bloody and violent....as births tend to be/
Ripped my way outa the womb into the world screaming/
Isolated still, until i heard something heard something/
The death sigh of a woman, heart felt sob from my father/
Her porcelain skin unmarked, bar the throb of a scar pure-
and clean, her death produced my life, soon wasted/
Life with father disciplined, his bark became a tune hated/
I stayed away for days, then weeks became years at a time/
Reconciliation then noticed he always appeared in his prime/
Further arguments drove me mentally and physically away/
I lived life on a razor blade, until i was finally betrayed/
Caffeine and Nicotine became my mind pain's Morphine/
Dad how have you aged without a blemish on your skin/?
Your 50 years of age and still look in your mid twenties/
Wheres the gray's and the wrinkles? you musta hid plenty/

The father appears in the mirror, almost identical to his son they could have been brothers

Son your wrong, i've been on earth longer than a half century/
Age is my enemy, damn i can't even remember my memories/
My bloods chemistry differs slightly from most of my peers/
I've lived as a ghost for years, cried a fucking moat of tears/
Your my one and only son...at least born in this generation/
Temptation coupled with frustration is a deadly combination/
Your blessed..and yet cursed in the worst possible manner/
Your blood intertwined with mine, you probably began here/ (points to his heart)
My own father told me this before he was brutally murdered/
Even to an atheist he's a man you've probably heard of/
A great man, he shone a beacon of light into many dark souls/
His remarks stole and encrypted into a book of his hearts goals/
Your blessing, a curse shared by his son's around the globe/
His blood son's, not those holy men surrounded in robes/
My brothers, my sons , we are chosen to wander here forever/
To forever endeavor to preach the words from heaven however/
We have no choice, in our veins runs the immortal blood of Jesus/
We have no future just multiple lives living in the mud with Heathens/

http://www.imagestation.com/picture/sraid201/pf3fd34cb75232b8abc434e30410a52f8/efff4625.jpg


*Warning : Based On A True Story*



http://www.imagestation.com/picture/sraid201/p2d550d1fc983608fb4c978ed3819c6a9/efff4628.jpg ivid Horrors, A Dimensional Glitch Leading Through Mental Portals,
Wishing The Curse Was Dead, Although It Lives Immortal.
Visions Of Anguish Was The Haunting’s Only Intention,
As The Mother Turns Her Head To See A Boy Hung By His Intestines.
Result – Depression. Although The Insecurities Blame Themselves,
Believing Not Even Christ Jesus Would Have Came For Help.



*Oh. But The Nightmare Was Real*



Brilliant Symphonies Of Screams Made The Mother Try To Stop-The-Beat,
Only Pain Was “Down The Road”, Never “Across-The-Street.”
Generations Would Not Speak-It. The Curse They Would Keep-It,
Not Even ‘Victoria’ Was “Laced’ More Than The Family’s “Secret.”



*The Family Background*



The Exterior Of The Family, Vivacious, Each Kissing-A-Cheek,
Attending Church Every Sunday Never Missing-A-Week.

Father A Minister, Mother Decorating Interior,
Oldest Son A Psychology Major With A Mind Superior.
Youngest Daughter, White Collar Job, Working For The Church,
Well Known To The Community, Proving The Families Worth.
But Once The Door’s Closed, The Curse Would Embark,
While Edger Allen Foreshadowed This Present Day ‘Tell Tale Heart.’
In This House The Foundation Was Pure, Innocent From The Start,
But They Say Lucifer Attacks The Strongest To Test The Heart.


*Listen Closely. This Is The Tale Of The Family Curse.*

*Setting : The House Of A Reverend. Infiltrated By The Devil*

Walls Tainted With Blood, Innocence Smeared The Surface,
Demonically An Evil Made Hope Seem Worthless.
The Cries For Help Subliminally Brought Tears Inside-Its-Calls,
Ironically The Light Always Seemed Darker Inside These Walls.
The Family Looked For A Cure, But The Curse Was On Another Level.
Because Mental Hospital Visits Only Began To Upset The Devil.
Dressed As A Serial Killer, The .:Curse Roamed The House:.,
Holding A Knife, That Eventually Aimed At A Spouse.


*Oh God I’m Sorry…*





The House’s Bathrooms Would Fill With Steam, Music From Dreams,
Organs Playing With The Sound A Young Man’s Screams.
Mother’s Tears Appeared As Soon As They Opened The Door,
The Family Curse’s Blood On The Walls With A Knife On The Floor.
The Only Animated Part Of The Scene Was The Musical Charm,
As The Mother Fell Weeping Into Her Husband’s Strong Arms.


*Now I Lay Me Down To Sleep,

I Pray The Lord My Soul To Keep.

And I Pray That I Die Before I Wake,

So This Nightmare Will End For .:My:. Parent’s Sake*


*Setting : SutterHospital In Roseville, CA*


The Family Curse Now Present, Although It Was Part Of The Past,
The Mother Holding Her Son, Happy The Nightmare Didn’t Last.

As I Looked Into My Mothers Eyes, I Knew The Pain Was Done,
They Couldn’t Kill The Curse, Because They Wouldn’t Murder Their Son…

*The View Of The Readers Slowly Rises Out Of The Hospital Where James Apgar A.K.A JimmyWhite Was Laying. The Mothers Face Buried In Her Son’s Arms*

*Welcome Home Son*

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thought we needed to vote on Topical Tournament battles....nice verse btw Jimmy

^Lol Shit. My Bad. I Think It Will Be Fine.

On Topic: Tie
Depth: Imperium
Imagery: Imperium
Originality: Imperium - felt it was more original than the haunted scene that Jimmy had.
Flow: Imperium - I felt there was too much commentary by Jimmy and it was somewhat stop/start
Multis: Both had good multies, but Imperium's were better I think.
Enjoyment: Imperium
Vocab: Imperium took this with excellent vocan that didn't harm the flow in any way

Overall: Imperium. It looks like I think Imperium took this by far, but that wasn't the case. there were many aspects which I think Impotent edged like Vocab and Multies and others I think he won by a mile like the flow. I think the stop/start feel you get with Jimmy's verse kinda ruined it a little bit - the content was there but there wasn't much cohesion and fluency to the verse. And I also think the typical gothic background described was not very creative, somewhat expected.

Good battle, anywya...

Ight Cool. 0-1...Lyrical Gothic? Lol, The Shit Happened In Real Life.

Uppin For Someone With Real Lyrical Knowledge. ;)

Ight Cool. 0-1...Lyrical Gothic? Lol, The Shit Happened In Real Life.

Uppin For Someone With Real Lyrical Knowledge. ;)

Lyrical gothic? :confused: Anyway, this aint the place to shit-talk or w/e...

I will get to this later tonight...

^Before He Even Votes, I'm In A Battle With Him Currently. No Hate, Just To Make Shit Fair.

lmao... i never dickride, hate noone in a battle... It's only the net, if someones verse is better then someone elses, I let them know

0-1 Upping

On Topic: tie, both did what was asked for the topic
Depth: i say Imp, i liked the angle he took with his own original feel
Imagery: both had it on and off, some parts stood out more than others for both individuals, so i say tie
Originality: Imp, b.c his wasnt a story that actually happened it was his own story with his own feel to it, i could see how jimmy's would be original, but i just wasnt feelin it that way
Flow: jimmy ur size/font fucked with the flow to me, so i resized all that it was pretty decent, imp had a pretty solid flow too, so i say tie
Multis: Imp, his just matched up a little more imo
Enjoyment: both had their enjoyable parts, but somethin about Imps made me want to read more, maybe the originality aspect b.c i didnt feel like i was reading a news article in a paper
Vocab: could go either way, but Imps went better with his verse and wasnt forced

Overall: Imp just out classes jimmy, verse was more solid all around w. less flaws, jimmy's wasnt bad, but it wasnt good enough to advance him in the tourny

vote imp

decent read

On Topic: Tie - Both followed topic
Depth: Imperium
Imagery: Tie - Close one this because both had some real nice and vivid imagery, which was consistent
Originality: Imperium - Tough one to call really, but Imp gets the advantage for having to make his from scratch without prior experience of the situation
Flow: Imperium - Dunno if it's just the font, but Jimmy's was hard to flow. Plus the start/stop style really made it difficult. Imp's was nicely structured and easy to follow
Multis: Imperium - More consistent
Enjoyment: Imperium
Vocab: Imperium - Nice array of vocab used, which was relevant when used

Overall: Looks like Imp by a landslide, but again, some of the categories were pretty close. Felt Jimmy could have benefitted from using a more consistent structure. I know I myself use dialogue in-between verses, but in this case, it was really difficult to follow the story from start to finish without being interrupted. Imp's was a very nice read. Solid and consistent, not many faults that I could pick out, other than a few stretched lines in the 2nd verse. Nice battle guys

Vote - Imperium