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Extensions Will Be Granted Under Extreme Circumstances As Long As You Let Us Know In Time. The Day Before & Day Of Won't Cut It.

Voting Will Be As Followed: EXPLAINED
On Topic:
Depth:
Imagery:
Originality:
Flow:
Multis:
Enjoyment:
Vocab:

Overall:


Topic:
Government Scandals... this is your topic write it as you will.

check

haha, check...

The Demons We Discover

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UFOs, Alien Arrivals, & Supposed Denial Of Governmental Trials
A Vial Of Human Blood Sold For A Gray Child, Dissected For His Vitals
The Bible Told Of Coming Dawn, Something's Wrong With Our Mindsets
Stargates Are More Likely, Observed In Words Burned In Times Texts
Egyptians Gave Bastards Of Unknown Origin Centuries Of Subtle Reign
Their Peasants Were Strapped Upon Tables & Had Their Stomachs Shaved
Translucent Tubing Sent Thru Inner Organs, Watched By The Wardens
The Female Hybrids - Clones - Impregnated Then Forced Thru Abortians


Tied Here While My Tears Fell In Five Tiers
One For Each Level Of Hell I've Survived Here
My Spine Sheered, I Cried When Panic Ensued
I Pray, Dear God, Help Those Damaged For Truth


White Fetuses Piled On The Floor, Rivals In A War Completely Hidden
Those Deeply Stricken Gave No Prayers, Dear God May They Be Forgiven
Hearts Like Craters, Supposed Saviors, Emotions Then Molded Jesus
Mistaken Pharoahs In Weakness, Narrowly Grievous, Sold Souls In Pieces
Locked Away Without A Name, They Built Monuments That Dazzled The Ages
Mythical Castles & Sages, In Practical Stages History Unravelled The Pages
Buried Tombs Fairly New Were Constructed To Hide Bodies Of Parasites
& Remains Enshrined Can Teach Us, But On My Brush With Death Dare I Write?


Tied Here While My Tears Fell In Five Tiers
One For Each Level Of Hell I've Survived Here
My Spine Sheered, I Cried When Panic Ensued
Dear God My Lord, Help Those Damaged For Truth


Found My Personal Olympus, Patience Never Diminished As I Searched Sands
January 1929, Looking For A Simple Sign Of Existence &/Or What Birthed Man
My Crew Of Arabs Carried Shovels & Shadowed Me Thru The Old Kindgom
A Bright Day Died & Fades, Its Getting Late, "Come" But My Words Ring Numb
I Mounted My Camel, Grabbed The Guiding Handle & Continued Onward
Arabian Lands Of Grace, Beneath Demanding Rays, Giving Me A Long Burn
A Sudden Beam Ripping Chest Skin, Took My Living Breath & Captured Me
I Ascended, My Mind Demented, I Thought Survival Was Unlikely - Accurately


Tied Here While My Tears Fell In Five Tiers
One For Each Level Of Hell I've Survived Here
My Spine Sheered, I Cried When Panic Ensued
Dear God My Lord, Help Those Damaged For Truth


I Landed On A Deck Of Stainless Steel, A Weightless Feel Of Nausea
Painless Still, Dramatic & Highly Erratic Forms In Suits, Causing Blood
To Thicken. So I Vomit Haunted By This Toxic Air Covering Pores
While On My Knees, Legions Of Gray Demons Hover Above Me In Hordes
Hollow Inside, A Figure Says "Follow" I Tried To Change Directions
But Suddenly Froze Cold, No Longer Bold, When I Saw Strangled Legends
"Those Unable To Survive The Surgeries" The Blood Pouring Burgundry
My State Worsening, His Words Echoed When He "Thought" Them, Not Verbally


An Amen Of Sorts, Problems Contort Our Lives
Calm Them With Wars, Lord, When The Stars Die
Our Scarred Rites Export Our Personal Heavens
& History Forgets Stories That Evolve Into Legends


Im Locked Down, A Shot Sounds, Each Blood Clot Pounds As They Motion
Their Hands In Circular Patterns, Red Splatters Like A Broken Mage Potion
Numbness Survives But I Feel The Gentle Touch Of Blades Along My Skin
Turning, I See Friends, Bodies Torn Mouth Agap, Screams Must Belong To Him
In Fear The Tears Smeered On My Cheek, Trickling, A Fallen Stream
My Moans - Call Them Screams - Awoke Me & I Realize It Was All A Dream
There Never Was A War Within Government Hallways Or Human Quotas
No True Entrapment Of Humanity & No Foreign Species Bent Or Broke Us

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We Created Them...

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And the huge dragon was cast down and out - that age-old serpent, who is called the Devil and Satan, he who is the seducer of all humanity the world over; he was forced out and down to the earth, and his angels were flung out along with him. Revelation 12:9

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For really they are the spirits of demons that perform signs. And they go forth to the rulers and leaders all over the world, to gather them together for war on the great day of God the Almighty. Revelation 16:14

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And he shouted with a mighty voice, She is fallen! Mighty Babylon is fallen! She has become a resort and dwelling place for demons, a dungeon haunted by every loathsome spirit, an abode for every filthy and detestable bird. Revelation 18:2

Nice verse, I'll post when I get back from hockey.

Peace

Cyan = Chorus of the Panamanian bourgeoisie
Bold = ronald reagan

Omar Torrijos, the champion of people-oppressed
At his death, the poor were left, feeble-n-wrecked
He legally-stressed, "democracy's" regal-effects...
And "zoned in" on poverty like an eagle-in-nest
Greed ceased-his-breath ; America leased-the-death
To control commerce's gate between east-n-west...

Released-in-press ; Torrijos promoting-the-drug-trade
While his ways in fact made toting-the-slugs-fade
Corporate maids amuck, greedy-n-planning-"laws"-banal
To dictate through the treaty-of-Panama's-canal
The tough locale continued company death-spree-lies
Democracy's dead, vis-a-vis the FBI
Officials deftly-tried to reduce-their-lies
Criminals hide, disguised in their suits-and-ties
The prize? A far cry from stints in penitentiaries
The most lucrative engineering project in-a-century...
Eventually the president lost, it was plain-he-was-deaded
So he skewed media views on Panamanian-ethics
They wouldn't let-em gain ground, he passed-all-limits
Along with Reagan's "cowboy" hollywood fast-draw-image ...
No flaws-in-it, I got him "seein stars" like astronomy
Don't help the needy, let's promote the U.S.'s-economy
It's on-me, backward countries fascinating-the-rich
The bureau's on this, I'm assassinating-the-bitch
Bomb his plane with a "glitch" cuz no association-is-left
He's bereft, decked ... I'll control-his-nation-in-death
What's next, frankess is something that I couldn't-avow
A role model for future leaders that we wouldn't-allow..
Now stopping hunger stops countries from molding-thugs
So we slandered it all, claimed "he's promoting-drugs"
Whole and just, there's no way to escape-the-order
Melted his brains with a bomb in a tape-recorder...

Disorder in America, a tragedy of greed-awry
Guys turned a blind-eye or believed-the-lies
Foreign headlines of America harassin-nations
"Murder, president dead in assassination"
In all places we were seen as decided-fakes
Just business as usual in the United-States....


"The missile is not created that can kill an ideal"

-Omar Torrijos, ( 1929-1981 )






Good luck

No SS, Fixion, or jimmy white votes. My fanclub is also not allowed to vote. Thanks.

i'll get to this tomorrow if it isnt finished up

I see you all infesting this thread like AIDS in african orgies during the 1970's....wtf @ the lack of votes??

On Topic: tie, both did their thing
Depth: hard to decide, bladed went into a variety of thing which ended up as 1 ending, and spits stayed on 1 topic through the end... i say bladed b.c he was able to incorporate a variety of things
Imagery: blades greater vocab helped put out alot of imagery and his imagery was more vivid than spits simple wordplay
Originality: bladed, didnt expect that at all, spits i kinda expected urs from the get go
Flow: tie, bladed had nice vocab which wasnt forced into the flow and fit well, line length was better this time than in our battle, spits urs was easy going as usual so no complaints there
Multis: tie, both used multis well, inners and outters, not much forced from either
Enjoyment: bladed, just liked his original feel to it, hooked me right in and wanted to go on, spits i expected and didnt get into it as much
Vocab: bladed, showed def superior knowledge in vocab and it wasnt forced

Overall: i say bladed won, won the catagories that mattered and it was more enjoyable to read, spits was average prolly procrastinated like usual, decent verse but bladed won this

Vocab: bladed, showed def superior knowledge in vocab and it wasnt forced


Not swayin, but LMFAO @ that comment..lolololol

uppin this

Multis...

NYC- Had a numerous amount of multi multis...
Bladed- Had a redickulous amount of single/double word multis...

Both had some that were off, so I'm not gonna pick a winner, because the multis were crazy and when coming that crazy, it's hard to keep a proper multi 100%

TIE

On Topic...

NYC- Had a more basic topic, which had a narrow idea to expand.
Bladed-Focused on everything, which gave us a bigger picture.

I never thought I'd say this, but I think NYC edged this because of the fact that it was BASIC,easier to follow one main point, instead of throwing mass ideas down.

NYCSPITS

Originality:

This was a tie too, I don't really think any of these were too original. The idea of original is creativity... none had a really big amount of creativity to it. This needs to elevate from both of you

TIE

Depth:

NYCSPITS: As I said, he focuses on one point and general idea. This gave one story life.
Bladed- Pulls numerous ideas. Gives a mass amount of stories life

BLADED

Flow:

NYC- nice flow, not too much that was off here.
BLADED- Same thing goes for your flow.

I think the multis really helped shit move along well.

Vocab:

NYC- Vocab had some advancements in it. I really don't know what other people were thinking.
Bladed- although better wording the SPITs, the content was rather slightly above basic. yea he had some advanced lit into it, but not really enough to beat spits.

NYCSPITS

Enjoyment:

None really were that enjoyable. not trying to hate on the verses put forward. lyrically they were good, but rather sluggish in content.

TIE

OVERALL:NYCSPITs

He edges this one lightly, and that's just because of the fact that he had a little bit more put forward in it. He actually decided to stick to one idea, which made it easier to follow, where the approach bladed took was much like societies ills, in the first couple of verses... which has been played upon numerous times. Had he included any creative twist to why this was happening, he would have taken the win.

On Topic: Tie
Depth: Bladed - Better thought out I think and there was more attention to detail
Imagery: Bladed
Originality: Bladed - I expected something to do with the US Government.
Flow: Tie
Multis: Tie
Enjoyment: Bladed
Vocab: Bladed

Overall: vote - Bladed. He had a much better verse in my opinion - much more thought out and original. I also felt Spit's verse wasn't that good. I mean, he was Reagan, so why did you have wordplay such as the "seein stars"? Thats not something that character would say. In technical terms, it was good, but nothing stand-out either. Bladed took this, quite easily imo.

On Topic: tie
Depth: tie (both took dif. ways and gave good detail to me)
Imagery: nyc
Originality: tie
Flow: nyc (felt balded's were a tad stretched)
Multis: tie
Enjoyment: nyc
Vocab: bladed

Overall: nyc...

iuno man, this was a real good battle....but, imo, bladed's first 2 verses were tight , but after that, he sorta trailed off into something else imo, just didn't feel as good as the first 2 verses to me...I liked nyc's story, no doubt it's based on a true story...and i mean, when it came to reagans part, i could picture him sitting in a little room with his neo-con buddies saying that type of shit... shit was real close, but i gotta go with NYC

On Topic: Tie. Both stayed on topic.
Depth: Tie again. Both included important details in their verses.
Imagery: Bladed. It actually made me fell kinda sick reading some of it. Real vivid images here.
Originality: Bladed. I liked the fact that it wasn't automatically US-related. Spits' verse had some original concepts to it, but was expecting something a little different. =\
Flow: Spits. Read right along, nice line length, Didn't have to stop n restart again like with Bladed's.
Multis: Spits. SOLID throughout, an all-the-time strength... Bladed's weren't BAD, but the question is whose were tighter.
Enjoyment: Bladed. It was original, therefore kept me more interested as to the outcome and where he was going with it.
Vocab: Bladed. It wasn't forced, and actually added to the overall feel of the verse.



Overall: Bladed.

Spits~ Your verse wasn't BAD and by no means does my vote mean that. I liked how well it flowed and you moved your story right along. Nice job on it.

Bladed~Wasn't expecting that. Great imagery and superior vocab. LOVED THIS!

Nice battle, you two...
Stay Forever Elevating...

lmfao @ gen editing my relevant posts...shit like that makes this site gay...

That vote shouldn't even be counted...vocab? I used superior vocab, it was not forced, and was relevant to the topic...I'd like quoted examples of my "forced vocab" and bladed's "superior vocab" next time some1 votes or else it's not counting

Matter of fact I'm not allowing LadyRae's vote until she quotes examples of my "forced vocab" and bladed's "superior vocab" , as well as a description of what she deems as "on topic"

pz

Stop complaining about the damn votes, they were all explained well enough. If you want to challenge the votes, then the votes given for you will also be challenged. You can't just not allow every vote given against you.

I didn't say that your vocab was forced, Spits, simply that Bladed's was VERY good and still wasn't forced in a way that took away from his verse. His wordchoice amplified the overall feel of the verse.

go ahead and dispute all the votes kron, my vocab was more sophisticated duh...it just doesn't make logical sense to give him vocab, I just want some quotations DUHHH

Bladed's verse

Hearts Like Craters, Supposed Saviors, Emotions Then Molded Jesus
Mistaken Pharoahs In Weakness, Narrowly Grievous, Sold Souls In Pieces
Locked Away Without A Name, They Built Monuments That Dazzled The Ages
Mythical Castles & Sages, In Practical Stages History Unravelled The Pages
^my fav part

was a very profound written work i loved the structure, message, and creativity

spit's
Released-in-press ; Torrijos promoting-the-drug-trade
While his ways in fact made toting-the-slugs-fade
^ i really liked the start
No flaws-in-it, I got him "seein stars" like astronomy
^seemed slightly forced and i'd read-heard it before

this was also a good verse


was using bereft unless he was saying he loved but wasn't loved back... i'll give the benefit of the doubt though

On Topic: tie both were on topic
Depth: i thought bladed went more indepth
Imagery: about equal
Originality: bladed's was more original to me i really enjoyed it seemed more complex
Flow: both had nice flow
Multis: both had nice multis
Enjoyment: i honestly enjoyed bladed's more though they were both well written
Vocab: spit ill had this one... some might have thought some seemed forced but they all seemed in place to me... i hesitated on bereft then i realized he was saying the president had love for the country but we have no love for him

Vote: bladed i just think he put more into it

great verses on both peeps parts

stay up

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im gonna be honest if there's one thing that spits won by a longshot, it's definatly vocab.

Vocab is an extended knowledge of words one gains as he is taught. (my definition) not how well you word what you write.

Not trying to sway/dickride/hate... just giving my opinion, because there seems to be a dispute going on about this.

im gonna be honest if there's one thing that spits won by a longshot, it's definatly vocab.

Vocab is an extended knowledge of words one gains as he is taught. (my definition) not how well you word what you write.

Not trying to sway/dickride/hate... just giving my opinion, because there seems to be a dispute going on about this.


Whiteowl's knowledge of rap > Ladyrae's knowledge of rap.

I don't allow rookies to vote on my shit...

I would also argue against gen's vote but that's like trying to throw and eggshell through a brick wall ... just won't get through the denseness

With mind bogglingly irrelevant comments like "spits sweetie his vocab was just better" ... im gonna have to disallow it...trust me I gladly accept honest votes like bustahymen's....

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by the way this is fucking bullshit I had shit to do that was unexpected and couldn't post it should be 2-2 right now

anyways im out pz