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Topic:
Assassinating A Superhero... that is your topic, write it as you will.

checkin in

innit ......

decided to show cuz the topic's cool, best'a luck lee.


Topic: Assassinating A Superhero

Heart is savage , knocked a thousand .. This job guarantee'd hard to manage …
Sharply planned ish - Spidey, aliased: peter parker , a man far from average …
Practice ? My flaws too lacking to try; katana , jetpack , n' still packin a 5 …
Radar set , then I set out - get the lead out , it's time to start trackin this guy …
Bastid is sly - quick witted , clips fitted , my aim could take a twig - split it!
Sick wit it , keep eyein' the town - suddenly spot em , flyin around ……………
…………………………………………… Come to realize that it's true: this kid's wicked …
Wrist, flick it, 2 fingers in place - I do confess , i'm ill , but he shoot the best …
Dude'a flex , expell web ropes rumored to stick cement-like to human flesh …
Check boots n' vest, then start pumpin the trey , he's seen enough of this day …
Weapon blastin , Evades bullets in a second's fraction .. He's comin this way …
I Say, “Wassup , stop dodgin the master! Still gon get a part of this hammer” …
His mouth starts to speak , then crowds part to see as our audience gathers …
Banners, posters, read things like “Spiderman Rocks, Defeatin' The Proud”
Screeching is loud , bookies take bets , even before His feet hit the ground…
Contemplate beatin 'em down … Parker lands , stands n' chants, “Fall back!”
Damn all that , gunnin some more , webslings knock my gun to the floor …
……………………………………… Face to face , engaging in hand-to-hand combat …
Landin jabs , bomb back , he ducks n' dodges - “I know you aint stallin spidey!”
Outta nowhere a flip kick got my wrist split, he's sittin on the wall behind me …
Begin brawlin lighty , hits connecting with attacks evil enough to hex devils …
Draw iron blades, flex metal - Manage to spear this dude…
Takes 1 step back , jumps to the nearest roof , elevates this to the next level …
Techs meddle , drop firearms , equip: jetpack , fly up like i'm seriously pilot …
Yet from what appeared to be violent , rooftop seems empty and eerily silent …
“You fearin' me, right kid?” Though I'm nervous inside , aint hurtin this pride …
Then from the far end he sprints across my path , lined webs spurtin in stride …
Intent on hurtin this fly, to snatch his heart n throw it up so he flirts w/ the sky …
But aint certain if I , got the tactics to match his - obvious his learning is high …
Feel a burn in my thigh, Damn! How a man moves so fast, I'm askin ya Jesus …
Never the slashin deceases, til I grab his own knife, slice his mask into pieces!
He ceases, backflips, fightin ensues: Stakes higher than a mountain this time …
A thousand fists fly, duck a hook n' knock that spidey sense rite outta his mind!
This guy slips up, trips up, falls to the ground terribly - sits and stares at me …
As I take his blade n' stab em so many times it's like needles during therapy …
Apparently , I schooled the foul kid .. Ha! And they say this fool's astoundin' …
Dust off, head for the stairs as his suit starts to blend w/ the pool around him …

EZ niggaz.

:)

Sorry for the delay here it goes


The Assasination of Superman

ssshhhhhhhh
assasination work is a quiet game,
especially when you dealing wit the target that im tyring to aim,
at, attach the beam to the sniper rifle strap slowly,
peaking out the window with clothes and fatigues covered over me,
Check the scope make sure my bullet has a steady stream,
Cuz if I pull this off im walking away with hella cream,
but wait a minute I see movement,
He stood up and moved so quick it was like he was translucent,
he dissapeared,
So im nervous and puzzled sittin here,
I know he's superman but what in the hell did I just witness here,
I look down this 32 story New york city apartment building,
He's downstairs in a cold white suit hoppin in a phantom peeling,
out, damn I should have taken the shot when I had the chance,
But the thought of killing superman's greatness sent me in a trance,
Now he vanished in a glance, delayed my plans of killing this man,
I been waitin 48 hours already now I got to prepare to do it again,
But thats the job im came to do, and Im ready for this check,
and Im slick wit my killings so police dont pose a threat,
hold up ...............

Narrator: After two days of JRT being on his hunt for Superman there still
of sign of him. Did he blow his cover? Will Jrt ever get paid?
Well Lets see.........................

I looked downstairs and guess who it is,
Navy Blue phantom, red S on the hood yeah thats his,
He hops out and throws the keys to the valet like nothing is up,
So I ready myself again and this time im not fucking it up,
Soon as he walks in the lobby I see him in his bedroom,
Damn hes quick..... let me hurry up and reload this shit,
Hes facing the closet and Im aimed at his mullet,
Only one bullet can kill this man and I got them green bullets,
My aim is steady and perfect, finger on the trigger so I jerk it,
Suddenly my scope is blurry and I cant see a single person,
but little did I realize Superman was in my room and turned the gun on me,
He turned the story into the assasination of J.......R..........T
Damn

Narrator: So as the story goes, Superman prevail again. I mean he is a superhero damn it. What did you expect? You cant kill Superman. Well better luck next time.

True pretty good battle...

On Topic: Both had good on topic verses.
Lee J- 5/5
Bdz- 5/5

Depth: Both had a decent light of depth in there... I feel bdz edged more, because he completely described a fight
Lee J- 3/5
Bdz- 4/5

Imagery: Imagery came good from both, but they had ver little in depth discriptions that would make you actually use a full blown thought to be like damn.
Lee J- 3/5
Bdz- 3/5

Originality: I feel Lee J pulled this one, just because everyone figured to kill a super hero, but noone took time to think, super heros never lose, and this is what made his a little better. Both still had the idea of using a famous super hero, why not Arch Angel, or one of the not too well known X-men. For that I feel both lacked.
Lee J- 4/5
Bdz- 3/5

Flow: Flow was decent from both, but the flow was a little too basic from Lee.
Lee J- 4/5
Bdz- 5/5

Multis: Same thing with this... Lee multied just certain endings, Bdz pulled it with numerous word multis.
Lee J- 4/5
Bdz- 5/5

Enjoyment: None really made me drop my jaw, but both were decent.
Lee J- 3/5
Bdz- 3/5

Vocab: Not really too much complex or outstanding vocab used here, but I would say Bdz edged this by a little bit.
Lee J-3/5
Bdz- 4/5

Overall

Lee J- 29/40
Shit couldda been more complex, I know you have the skill

Bdz- 32/40
This is really my first topical I’ve seen by you, but it seems you have a huge amount of potentional.

-Die Bdz-
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thanks for votin' .. glad you showed lee , nice shit ..

bump.

On Topic: Tie - yall both definately came on topic for this piece
Depth: Tie - I thought both of yall provided many details about the story. I knew what was happening anyway
Imagery: Die - I thought he did a better job describing things. He would describe something by using metaphors or similies or whatever.
Originality: Lee J: both of yall were kinda predictable but Lee J had a more creative ending imo.
Flow: Tie - both flowed well to me
Multis: Dieabdz - he just used more and he had some within the line
Enjoyment: Tie - both verses were aight
Vocab: Tie - both showed nice word usage

Overall: Dieabdz - Ima be truthful. I wasn't feeling either of these verses too much. Maybe its cuz i'm not to into the topic, iono. something was missing though. so i digress. anyway, coulda really went either way but I think he did a better job with descriptions basically

On Topic: Tie - both on topic in their own ways
Depth: Die a bdz - He easily took this through superior imagery and wording
Structure: Lee J. - Both were wack, but die a bdz your "............................................" shit pisses me off....kid got more periods then females on menstrual cycles and shit...and god damn die a bdz your bars are stretched as fuck..it's ok for text I guess tho...
Imagery: Die - More depth/better wording on similies and metaphors
Originality: tie - both predictable
Flow: Lee J. - His bars weren't 80 miles long
Multis: Dieabdz - alot more transitional multies and end multies...inner multies maintained somewhat of the flow he lost through stretchedness
Enjoyment: Tie - Both kept me entertained...I was going to say die a bdz but his ending was weak
Vocab: dieabdz - slightly better, probably due to better wording

vote- Dieabdz

rationale - slightly superior lyrically, although stretched...some better concepts and more multies to keep me entertained, although some multis weren't well placed. overall decent battle

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I voted for Die, but NYC voted first the battle was over