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Topic: Imagine you have just died. Speaking from your soul's perspective, do you take the stairway to heaven, or the stairway to hell? Why is this?

Check In By: Friday 10th March
Verses Due: Sunday 12th March

Checking in.


Saracen PM me, and tell me which approach your taking(heaven/hell) that way we can both feel free to use the opposite and make this a reallllllllyyy good battle

In... ^ And I really don't know yet..

http://www.soundclick.com/pro/view/02/default.cfm?bandID=410370&content=song&songID=3607096

Written to THIS beat, if you'd like to play it as u read

*Jason is a man wise beyond his years. He is 45 years old and single. He is a member of the U.N and has dedicated his life to keeping peace and trying to make the world a better place for everyone.*

* CNN: "At approximately 3:35 A.M this morning,U.N advocate Jason Nesbitt was shot and rushed to the emergency room at East Bay Hospital where he is in critical condition. It is believed he will not make it through the night.....*

Jason:

Darkness is everywhere, I feel my body pulled in 100 directions
Light is everywhere but here, I felt the bullet penetrate in my midsection
The Intersection was crowded.... We were on our way home from Peace talks
But I guess that's what I should expect, because everyone with a piece walks
I tried to call for help, but I felt my Lungs collapse as I exhaled
I felt frail, and the thoughts overwhelmed me like a lopsided Scale
I inhaled.... *gasps* Only blood filled my lips, I couldnt move my hips
"Are my legs still there? Will I walk again?" Shut up Jason, get a grip~
I slipped into thought as I walked in my memories of past times
In my mind, I think all along I realize this would be my last time
A Flash! *blind* Thats all I can see.... but what happens now?
I know my souls stuck... It's trapped with no hope of coming out
I'd shout, but all I hear are echo's of my past reliving their glory
It's gory, watching myself re-enact my entire life's Story For Me

*Jason sits down in the realm... It's completely dark, with no light... Just him, and his memories*

I feel as if I could float, My body seemingly holds no weight
I debate whether or not this was meant to be my fate
I'd faint, but truthfully I'm being torn to pieces by Satan And God
Lured by a Million Angels voices, but pulled by a million demon squad
I sob, as my every last fiber is stretched untill they can't hold themself
I know I lived a good life... So "surely i'll goto heaven!" I told myself

* The nothingness, turns into a portal that contains two paths... One towards Heaven, and one towards Hell. *

To My left, I see hope and prosperity... I approach as they glare at me
The angels fold their arms and block the entrance. Don't they care for me?
I'm scared to be here, So I wander towards the stairway to hell
I dwell on the thought.... But the demons also block that stairway as well
This must be some spell! I took three steps back and paused as i'd collect
My thoughts as well as my self respect, and figure why Im Heaven/Hells reject
I detect the problem as I look back at my flash backs a little bit closer
I was a living humanitarian, but at the same time a "Most wanted" Poster

One half evil, one half pure... My blood stirred, my soul surged within
Half of me belonged in Heaven... While the other half to be condemned
So Then, I took the sins of men to the place I belonged, my new home
I was right next to The Lord himself, I'd was revived by deeds of my own
I've grown to look back at the border of Heaven/ Hell and now miss it..
The only angel who LIVES Life.... Yet Died DEATH and dismissed it
* CNN: "U.N Advocate Jason Nesbitt was announced dead this morning, after facing gunshot wounds to the abdomen on July 24th, while walking in a peace walk in Kuwait. The gunmen is believed to still be at large, and is to be considered armed and dangerous. Anybody with information please contact...."

Nice verse... I'll write mine tomorrow. I have to get more of this essay done first tonight..

Should be a good battle..

The story of Mark, his angel, his demon and the Angel of Death.

I hear whisperings: soft but rapid, spoken but seemingly mimed
My thoughts are vapid - a product & token of a dreaming mind
Their scheming confined to themselves & I’m fiending behind ‘em
Fishin for answers; I could feel a dazzlin light beamin and blinding
Although my eyes are firmly closed. Trynna listen so I strain my ear
As someone confirms codes that’re familiar. I shout to claim I’m here
But it’s useless effort. Surely they can see my frame is near?
And at that moment they say my name clearly. I’m famous here?
Impossible – I’m common, who cares about me? Mostly my Beth
Situation is buggin me so I lie still and listen again - almost dead

"You’ve got a mountain to climb – The allegations are immense
Show me why he should go elsewhere – and have evidence"
"There are many examples of purity and good conduct
Take him from a sample of the community – the hood obstructs
Many youths and others from being chaste and well behaved
Like the time he witnessed for the DA. Where he dwells is grave
And dangerous & it coulda cost him everything – possibly life
You knew that well – better than anyone. He’s loyal to his wife
An honest father, a dedicated sibling & he has faith and belief
His fate was brief – he isn’t a thief, so please spare him the grief."

This can’t be true. What am I listening to? Who are these people?
Its unfeasible. Can’t be true. I must be mentally unstable or feeble.
“Whoever this is, you’re evil. Straight up sick and twisted!!!
They considering my existence? And worse this dick is assisted!!”
"You have a valid point, Christian. He’s good natured and benign
But mistakes were made & with 30 odd years he’s had enough time"
"Exactly – he isn’t all-religious and whatever you’re claiming
If he’s so clever, why does he gamble and curse? Stop complain
This ain’t good enough. He’s had his chance and he blew it. Point blank
You’re misleading yourself and I’m disappointed by that fact."

Thinkin this is a joke, a prank from a mate, they have these traits
My mind state worsening: “please, mate.. enough, cease the debate
..Seize this crate and open it. I needa breath before I faint!!”
And the reply was silence – useless attempts Forced restraints…
Voice hoarse from complaints. Got time to recollect my thoughts
I reflect how I was taught and raised & how for respect I fought
Perfection I sought; honest, loving, caring, genuine. A true star?
I’m thinking how my friends fucked up & took this was too far
"You are dead. The end & demise. Your freedom I’ve excisioned
And yes, its all true and very real… And I’ve reached a decision"

On Topic:Tie
Depth: Saracen
Imagery:Tie
Originality:Cont
Flow:Cont
Multis:Saracen
Enjoyment:Tie
Vocab: Saracen

Vote = Saracen. Both had alright verses, I think Ive seen better from both. I wasn't too enjoyed with the verses, the read wasnt fantastic. I believe Saracen
took it with his vocab and the other qualities he held over Cont.

Overall, I wasnt too suprised with the outcome, I know Saracen is pretty strong
with the topical side of things. I just liked his story better.

Lmao. yea

1-0 uppin

On Topic-Cont Saracen's never even explained which set of steps he took
Depth-Saracen
Originality-Cont slightly... with the fact that that neither heaven nor hell let him in at first
Flow-Tie
Multis-Saracen
Vocab-Saracen
Enjoyment-Cont
Imagery-Cont

Overall- With saracen's not mentioning which set of stairs he took as mentioned in the topic, caused this to make my decision to Cont

thank ya. 1-1

On Topic: Contagious. He actually got around to making a choice, whereas Saracen sorta let others do Mark's thinking for him, and never came to a conclusion of his own.

Depth:Saracen. Went more into detail as to why he belonged in one place or the other.

Imagery: Contagious. The "angels with arms folded" part was real nice. He took this part hands down, although I DID like Saracen's panick-y feelin part where he's like "Get me outta this crate"

Originality:Tie. It was a really specific topic, so it's difficult, but I wasnt seeing much original from either really.

Flow:Close. Can't really say...

Multis: Tie. Contagious didn't have as MANY, but some of Saracen's seemed kinda forced... Maybe it's the way I was reading it, but eh...

Enjoyment: Contagious. Because of the approach he took we got more of a look into the character's thoughts and feelings... It got me more into the piece.

Vocab:Tie. Both had great wordchoice throughout.

Overall:Contaigous. Structure-wise, both verses were pretty well-matched... Props for that... But Contagious brought it better when it came to content overall. Nice battle, you two...Stay Up!!!

Uppin

On Topic: Contagious
Depth:Saracen, he took it more in depth with which was where he should go.
Imagery: Contagious, from the shot to the midsection to the angels and demons not refusing to let him in.
Originality:Tie.
Flow:Tie
Multis: Saracen
Enjoyment: Contagious, I just enjoyed the read more.
Vocab:Tie
Overall:Contagious, because I did enjoy the read more but also I was kinda disappointed on Saracen not sayin where he went. I thought Saracen had a nice drop and I really liked the way he incorporated the Demon and Angel of Death. I don't know if that's how you chose to do it or you ran outta lines. I just would've preferred to know what the final decision was. Regardless it was nice battle and I think both made for nice drops.

Stay Healthy

thank u 3-1

On Topic - Contagious... overall felt he brought more to the topic given...

Depth - tied... equally deep on both sides, with ups and downs...

Imagery - Contagious... more emotional and connected with me on a good level...

Originality - tied... didn't like either's take on it...

Flow - Saracen... was consistent...

Multis - Saracen... more multies tho some were forced... having multies is better than no multies, in my opinion...

Enjoyment - Contagious... the emotional level he brought to his verse was more enjoyable to me, as the reader...

Vocab - Contagious...

Overall - Contagious... well thought-out, more true to the topic, and superior imagery won this for him...