iight house rules
10-20 lines
48 hours to spit after topic has been picked

I'll post links later

have any topic ideas?

come up with some on your own as well
no particular order either
1. you come home and fine your wife cheating with your bestfriend what do you do
2. conversation with lucifer
3. vietnamese sniper in the vietnam war (frame of mind and what not)
4. death row for a crime you didn't commit
5. faced with the choice to kill your sister or see her raped dabble between both ideas

iight man , conversation with lucifer is good

my links will be up today , so as the verse

http://www.rapworlds.com/forums/showthread.php?t=64029&page=2
http://www.rapworlds.com/forums/showthread.php?t=63995

here it is 20 lines , intro and outro is NOT counted




CONVERSATION WITH LUCIFER



INTRO
*man turns off the lights, goes to sleep
With his head phones on, playing the melody
“You’re bout journey into the mind of psychopath killer
Blood spiller, mentality much iller...” *


VERSE
Fuse multiple syllables into lyrical miracles, produce and confuse
Radical ethical skills seduce and amuse than family use and abuse
Your diligence, like doctor you lose “patience”, go for vengeance
Start engines, deep inside of heart raging, torturing but engaging
It really suffocates when family debates your success, highly hates
your estates, always states shit, isolates, their life simply variates
From boring to dead, its sad but that’s realism that puts criticism
On my shoulder, cynicism like boulder, its harder than racism
Damn, for God’s sake, this is a dream and how’s that I’m awake
What, Lucifer! It must be fake, pills I had to take, it was mistake


*LUCIFER SPEAKING*
No you don’t hallucinate, I’m devils advocate, devil has retaliate
He says “HATE”, spread it, dislocate their heads and accumulate
violence, that’s the main substance fuck diligence, that’s nonsense
Spill their blood, take offense, that makes sense, fuck defense
Use your fucking fame, by the way never say God’s name
on loud its good he didn’t came but he could plus its lame
O SHIT I SAID IT, NOW HE’LL COME


*JESUS ARRIVES AND SAYS*
No you don’t hallucinate, I’m GOD’S advocate, God has retaliate
too He says “BELIEF” not grief, believe in fate, start before its late


*LUCIFER AGAIN*
You fucking biter, biting my lines
You see God is unoriginal, knowledge minimal, status clinical
Speech cynical, you wanna be like him, that’s not sensible


OUTRO
You are right, I’m sick of being used, where’s my shotgun
*takes his shotgun, steps in front of his parents
Starts rapping Eminem’s song…
“You’re bout journey into the mind of psychopath killer
Blood spiller, mentality much iller, than you could ever imagine
In your wildest dreams…” “NOW SCREAM”
Starts shooting and kills whole family, hahahaha……*

iight , waiting for Vaughn

okay keying hopefully done tonight...

you gonna spit

Shit my fault I wrote it up just never put it down on the site I'll put it down tonight or I'll give you all my rw cash.... But either way I got you I'm sorry 4 taking so long my dude

iight lets make it winner gets 100 eCash

even better , lets make it 500 , I dont have it right now , but I'lll pay it when I can , so do you accept that

The path i choose simply doesn't require the greed
but i could supply what you want get all of ya needs

whether weed money cash hoes or the sex
this conversation is pointless duke you getting me vexed

wait sex, how bout a chick thick with a fat ass
hell yeah since you rap bless you wit skillz like i did ras kass

or fuck it i'll even throw in the money of bill gates
yeah but for the love of money is the reason i feel hate

fuck it tho, i been really thinkin of stacking my bread
Yes my little puppet now i'm starting to get in ya head

What? Nothing ponder my offer for the rest of the day

nah you said sumthin bout head what the fuck did u say?
cuz you kno niggaz be needing head don't be want to fuck

yeah i'll bring jenna ja pamela any bitch willing to suck
for all that shit just sign right here on the clip board

i'm thinkin how could you bless kass when u workin against lord

i thought spirtually to bless it was threw Jesus Christ
my dude if you already happy on earth who needs him right

Anything you need i got you i'll open the doors
Say no more fuck give me the pen my soul is yours....

cyan person
black lucifer

i'll post links now... i was going for a more comedic aspect of a conversation....

iight ppl vote
here are some cats for you
FLOW
VOCAB
MULTIS
CONCEPT
CREATIVITY
ENJOYMENT

vote ppl

someone vote, btw mods move this in Verses ready subforum

FLOW:Green
VOCAB:Green
MULTIS:Green
CONCEPT:Green
CREATIVITY:Green
ENJOYMENTGreen
Vote: Green.

Vaughn needs links.

Wow this is a pathetic battle.

FLOW-green
VOCAB- neither
MULTIS- Green
CONCEPT- I'm assuming this means stayin on topic. so tie
CREATIVITY-.....Green
ENJOYMENT- Neither

vote- green

But take that with a grain of salt. ANYYYYYYYY topical head on this site would have merked u with that shit. You forced every part of that. you need to stop going to rhyme generator.com or w/e the fuck ur doing and be natural.

"Use your fucking fame, by the way never say God’s name
on loud its good he didn’t came but he could plus its lame"

You should be ashamed of yourself for including that bar lmao. I'm not even hating, this is honest feed. That is a bar that should have never even been considered yet you put it there.

You have potential, and your structure isnt bad, but it's your forced bars, forced flow and forced multis that kill you.

Honestly, if you came like that at me I'd take every category and KO you.

Just elevate from there, I gave you plenty of feed

FLOW green
VOCAB green
MULTIES green
PUNCHES green
CREATIVITY green
ENJOYMENTgreen

VOTE- green

FLOW- gc
VOCAB- vaughn
MULTIS- GC
CONCEPT-GC
CREATIVITY-GC
ENJOYMENT- BOTH

vote- Green C

Good battle uppin