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3-0 KO, 4-1 TKO, 1st to 5 Or Whoever Has The Most Votes By End Of Voting Period. Mods Will Discuss Tie Breaker.
NO Hate Votes, DR/CR Votes, Swaying, Feeding, Biting, Recycling Like Vex, No Beef Or Freeposting In Threads.
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Deadlines Are Midnight EST, 0-2 Hours Over = Free Bee. 2-12 Hours Over = 1 Docked Vote. 12-24 Hours = 2 Docked Votes. Anything Over 24 Hours Is DQ. Some Don' Like This Rule. Well Tough Shit, Don't Procrastinate & If You Show Up On Time Then You Won't Lose Votes.
Extensions Will Be Granted Under Extreme Circumstances As Long As You Let Us Know In Time. The Day Before & Day Of Won't Cut It.

Voting Will Be As Follows: EXPLAINED
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Depth:
Imagery:
Originality:
Flow:
Multis:
Enjoyment:
Vocab:

Overall:

Topic: Insanities Cruel Reality That is your topic, write it as you will.

Check In By: Saturday 22nd April
Verses Due: Monday 24th April

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...Created From Your Anti-Image...



Dirty Mattress Covered In Diluted Putrid Puke & Blood
Infused With Bugs As I Send Two Canines Through My Tongue
A Porous Taste, What A Horrid Waste Of Life's Elixir
Despite The Mixture, I See By Way Of Nights Old Fissure:
The Moon! Dancing Above My Shoulder, Behind The Bars
Entwined With Stars, Lost In Darkness: I Don't Find It Far
My Life Defined In Shards Of Shattered Moments Long Dead
When Attainting Insanity, A Buried Life's Hopeless Song Spread
However I Sang Effortlessly, Chest Deep, Full Of Breath
With Angels, Voice A Horde In One Accord, It Pulls My Chest
The Stoned Walls Are My Tomb & The Truth Is Ive Grown
In This Hell: Six-By-Six Cell Paded Walls Included: My Home
The Rabblings Of An Old Man Imprisoned By Social Wants
As I Stare Into The Depths With Zest, Giving Hopeful Taunts
Whats Insanity? You Dare Ask A Man With Half A Family?
Gasped In Flattery! Civil Servants Then Trashed & Damaged Me
Delay The Grade, Don't Judge Me: We Live In A Day & Age
Where Cold Fame Is Gained, Names Made But Change Is Played?
Guess Whoever You Are, You Want To Know About My Plight
So You Can Put Doubt To Flight, Look At Your Life & Count It Right?

You Act So Fucking Ugly...

Smug, You Judge Negatively If Its Deemed Different Or Odd
Mentors Drop! The Science Age: When Stupidity's Meant To Stop?
Yet We Exist In It - This Is Shit - People Glorify Dumb
Or Defy Clubs As A Singled Out Individual, Born Denied Love
You're Realized Scum! I See Ignorance At Upper Levels
Even As Legions Hide These Facts By Battling Other Devils
The Connection Is Dumb Fucks Where The Sky's The Limit
They Get Everything With A Cherry On Top, So Why The Gimic?
Oddly, People Are Zombies In The Body With The Grunts
As Schooling Falls, Stupidity Calls! Don't Think Its A Funk
Im No Christian But Listen: Religion Is Very Key Now
Because Before I Show You Insanity, Look At Me & See How
Regular Screams Sound Forced Out Of Any Mouth But Mine
This Could Take Awhile! Line Limit Doesn't Count, Fuck Time
Insanity & Religion Were Forever Linked Originally
This Shit Gets Thick! Take That Figuratively Or Literally
Demons Are Stories? Worry: That Thought Leaves Us Caught
Nowadays If It Deals With Shades, It Then Turns To Jesus Talk
Trifle Bible Bashers & Attackers Who Don't See A Link
In Each Culture Their Are Vultured Ghosts, You Need To Think
Bored For Minutes? Its Finished! You're Then Leaving
Betelguise Without Michael Keaton, Can't I Refer To Demons?
I See Them & As Fate Has It, We Can't Even Escape Habit
Strolling Within A Holding Straight Jacket & That Ain't Magic
Sides Guarded By Royal Rabble That Travel The Farscapes
Eating Dishes Of Scarred Fates & The Shrapnel In Tart Grapes
Holed Up In A Corner, Worn & Tortured Into This Apex
While Nude: Im Naked With Satan, Trying To Loose His Graces
If A Man Sees A Shadow, A Mad Foe Or A Mantel Of Black
They're Deemed A Dream Yet Evil Exists? There's No Handling That
Cuz Money Doesn't Corrupt Souls, Nor Does Enough Gold
Its The Voice In My Ear, The Boys That I Sheered, Cuts Show
& Whats Home? A Place Where You're Alone With Spirits
Or Bone With Dearest In Darkness, Oh God Knows I Fear It
The Nearest I Can Tell We're Falling, I See The Edge
Cuz We Attack Exact & Isolate Those Most Needing Friends

And Here I Lay...

In My Own Hollow Daze, In A Phase That Remains A Fact
In This Cell Of A Hole, Spelling A Toll, It Detains My Laugh
Echoing Off Soft Stone, Im Oft Lone In Freezing Rain
In Wisdom, In The Fetal Position Enjoying The Squeezing Pain
Disease Then Came In Storms, A Form Of Rotting My Skin
Epidermis Implores Me, A Demon Exploring & Knocking Within
Im Cattle Left To Battle In Darkness During Lights Out
From Any Perspective & From Any Direction They Might Pounce
Believe Im Screaming: Tempted To Only Flee The Demons
"They Look So Beautiful" I Think, Tears Gleam When Streaming
My Hulk: An Englowing Tree! The Vines Aligned With Stalks
Spine At Fault! Luck & Hope: Fuck You Both, Rewind The Talk
Listen Closely & Know Me: This Insanity Isn't Cruel
A Family Is Futile & I'd Be Damned To Be Less Truthful
Civilization Always Deems The Unknown Immoral & Evil
Society's Canvas Of Corruption Paints Us Horrible People
You're Born All Numb, See Society Breeds Formal Dumb
See Through Proof Into Truth & Realize Im The Normal One

Because You...

Make Your Insane, Change Became The Villian In This Act
& As Days Go By, Flows Time, All Our Children're Missing Half
Growing Steadily Dumber, Into Heavenly Slumber We Go
We Had Sunlight For One Night, However Now Summer Sees No
I Bleed Yo, It Hurts Seeing & Not Believing This Shit
Im Screaming In Fits! Son Of Sam, Lets Leave Him To Shift
In His Grave, The State Saved Those They Call Worthy
But Under Rain Droplets All Are Caught Wet Cuz It Falls Purely
God Rains On The Just & Those With Lust In Abundance
Look On My Scars Real Hard, Stop The Farce Of A Stunned Glance
Locked Away, Its Not The Same Til Our Features Are Sand
In Prison, Unforgiven, Totally Insane Yet A Creature Of Man

You Made Me...


If I was the only sane person in an insane world would that make me the socially insane one?

In the case of a neurotic failure in life, his reasoning may be 'intelligent' within his own frame of reference, but is nevertheless socially insane...

He was insane, absurd, and preposterous. An unstylish, unattractive, or socially inept person! One slavishly devoted to intellectual growth yet unable to function in society. He was socially insane.

I just stayed up till 3 fuckin AM to finish this..if you wanna be gay, dock votes..do what you gotta..

Some say crazy? Maybe, I havent thought sane in years
Saw my mother slashed n killed, father brought those painless tears
And though Im slain, I hear..the plain screams she wept
Piercing my cold heart reliving those dreams of death
And even yet, I remain a lone family member to bear a fate
Taken into the hands of a man who took a stare with fate
Broken ribs and blood; a sick fuck they call me, but trust
What I do gives that rush, graspin' the same mind tarnishin love
My life, Ive partied with lust..taking this pride to heart
...But if I dont feed my fiend Ill likely die n starve
I find it marks, a beauty that no other can gain
Simply driftin' into a heaven with a troublesome name

heLL..

May 19th, found myself alone with some prey to fight
A sweet 17 year old girl, crying, as she prays for life
With haste I bite..piercing..drawing blood from her soft lips
Teasing me with screams that Ive hungered to stop bliss
..The havoc begins, as I tie her arms already tattered n slit
Kissin' her sweet cheeks, lickin the blood off her massacred wrists
Triste!..Such beauty, hearin' her gasp for air is a gift I fiend
As I put nails through her feet insuring she cant kick n scream
Some day I live this dream..a nightmare no ones wishes to see
But to hear the faint sounds I adore, I feel she gives into me
.."Take my member bitch, Ive never fucked such a slender chick"
As I talk dirty to her she says nothin', her minds starts bending in.
Such a pretentious stiff, like it better when they tug on
Your shirt beggin', but this ones passed out from blood loss
She lays there, arms full of blood as I take her corpse
Place my weapon in her treasure start to make my course
My patience never displays remorse, Ive been fucked enough
And now say that I chose this prey she'll just have to tough the luck.
Finally..feeling her insides I breathe a simple sigh of relief
....Kissing her cold body, theres no more hiding her grief

Euphoria..

After hours of work, my body has finished the deed
I pick up her purse to find out who was living my dreams
Stephanie Payton..seems like a name that Ive heard before
But her beautiful body, so great, nothing could worse this score..
Some say Im mad, angry, but I was born to hunt..
Keep calling me crazy, I see myself as the normal one

*Gregory Payton at the age of 18 was arrested on May 21st for the rape and murder of his
6 year old sister. He was tried as an adult and will be serving 25 to life.*

My Hulk: An Englowing Tree! The Vines Aligned With Stalks
Spine At Fault! Luck & Hope: Fuck You Both, Rewind The Talk
Listen Closely & Know Me: This Insanity Isn't Cruel
A Family Is Futile & I'd Be Damned To Be Less Truthful
Civilization Always Deems The Unknown Immoral & Evil
Society's Canvas Of Corruption Paints Us Horrible People
You're Born All Numb, See Society Breeds Formal Dumb
See Through Proof Into Truth & Realize Im The Normal On

^ That was deep as fuck: really introspective, thought-out and well articulated. That bit was really hard-hitting, very descriptive in its own right and a whole perspective of insanity crammed into a few lines.


After hours of work, my body has finished the deed
I pick up her purse to find out who was living my dreams
Stephanie Payton..seems like a name that Ive heard before
But her beautiful body, so great, nothing could worse this score..
Some say Im mad, angry, but I was born to hunt..
Keep calling me crazy, I see myself as the normal one

^ Very nice ending... Really vivid story, very descriptive and very imaginative: you characterised Greg or whoever well and his actions and behaviour matches with the theme of insanity and etc.

I thought both verses were VERY different... BT's was more like a commentary and discussion on insanity, really getting to grips with the subject and the subsequent effects it has or may have. The drop was very intellectual, littered with nice vocab and the syntax was very good. Fix's on the other hand was different because his was more story-line based around a set character and his actions due to insanity. It was very graphic and vivid, and just rolled off the tongue. On a technical note, both were also very good: both had good rhyme schemes, nice flow to the verses, structured right, and etc.

To be honest, I think its too close to call. I really liked Fix's verse because it was imaginative and creative, I honestly didnt think the femal character gettin raped and etc would end up being his sister. On the other hand, the verse by BT was VERY well thought out and is clear alot of effort went into it. It was different from Fix's but was still very nicely written.

Vote - Tie.

1-1 Uppin'

.:Bladed Thesis:.

My Fav Parts (Fav Line In Bold) :
The Stoned Walls Are My Tomb & The Truth Is Ive Grown
In This Hell: Six-By-Six Cell Paded Walls Included: My Home
Whats Insanity? You Dare Ask A Man With Half A Family?
Gasped In Flattery! Civil Servants Then Trashed & Damaged Me
Bored For Minutes? Its Finished! You're Then Leaving
Betelguise Without Michael Keaton, Can't I Refer To Demons?
In My Own Hollow Daze, In A Phase That Remains A Fact
In This Cell Of A Hole, Spelling A Toll, It Detains My Laugh
Civilization Always Deems The Unknown Immoral & Evil
Society's Canvas Of Corruption Paints Us Horrible People

.:Fixion:.

My Fav Parts (Fav Line In Bold) :
Some say crazy? Maybe, I havent thought sane in years
Saw my mother slashed n killed, father brought those painless tears
May 19th, found myself alone with some prey to fight
A sweet 17 year old girl, crying, as she prays for life
..The havoc begins, as I tie her arms already tattered n slit
Kissin' her sweet cheeks, lickin the blood off her massacred wrists
.."Take my member bitch, Ive never fucked such a slender chick"
As I talk dirty to her she says nothin', her minds starts bending in.
Finally..feeling her insides I breathe a simple sigh of relief
....Kissing her cold body, theres no more hiding her grief


On Topic: Bladed (On Topic Because It Got Boring. No Change Or Creativity…Just Plain)
Depth: Fixion
Imagery: Fixion
Originality: Fixion. His Was Not Expected, Which Was Refreshing
Flow: Bladed
Multis: Fixion
Enjoyment: Fixion
Vocab: Bladed

Overall: Fixion

2-1

Uppin.

BT

Whats Insanity? You Dare Ask A Man With Half A Family?
Gasped In Flattery! Civil Servants Then Trashed & Damaged Me
Bored For Minutes? Its Finished! You're Then Leaving
Betelguise Without Michael Keaton, Can't I Refer To Demons?
In My Own Hollow Daze, In A Phase That Remains A Fact
In This Cell Of A Hole, Spelling A Toll, It Detains My Laugh
Civilization Always Deems The Unknown Immoral & Evil
Society's Canvas Of Corruption Paints Us Horrible People

^^ the above provides great imagery, especially the ending bar. Iw ould have liked more like this from you throughout.

Fix

..The havoc begins, as I tie her arms already tattered n slit
Kissin' her sweet cheeks, lickin the blood off her massacred wrists

^^ nice flow and emotion

.."Take my member bitch, Ive never fucked such a slender chick"
As I talk dirty to her she says nothin', her minds starts bending in.

^^After reading the ending this jumps out alot...

Finally..feeling her insides I breathe a simple sigh of relief
...Kissing her cold body, theres no more hiding her grief

^^ nice line

On topic: Bladed (Followed a similar theme throughout, although it became vague/monotonous at times)
Depth: tie
Imagery: Fixion (more specific detail)
Originality: Fixion (His ending was fresh)
Flow: Bladed (Fixion some parts of your flow are awful...same with bladed but he had better inner and finishing multies)
Multis: tie (both had a good deal)
Enjoyment: Fixion
Vocab: Tie ( Fixion used all of his vocabulary accurately. Bladed left me wanting to know more specific details, because a variety of scenerios popped into mind when he used different words...mostly just not made explicit in the context)

Overall vote: Close, but I'mma say Fix edged this...

Rationale: Bladed, you fell off after the 1st verse. I lost interest even thought hte flow was there, because the content seemed to edge into the land of vagueness and monotony. Fix's remained steadily pretty good till the end, where everything was revealed in a huge surprise.

3-1

:)

Bladed

On Topic: I thought you did a nice job on this, its like you explained all the aspects of insanity in a story that was one giant metaphor for insanity. It tempted me to want to test my limits of sanity… 5/5

Depth: Its hard say this was and wasn’t deep, for the fact it really wasn’t so much of a story as it was a tale of insanities ways. You went into depth about the topic and explained different ways of it, so I liked it… 4/5

Imagery: Excellent, you are one of the dopest individuals at creating a vivid and graphic picture, your vocab makes it possible, great imagery… 5/5

Originality: Yes, I can easily say this was original because I never expected anyone to take this angle on the topic. 5/5

Flow: Superb, fluid and easily read, no complaints 5/5

Multis: Excellent multis, half the words you used for multis I never woulda thought to do or attempt, rarely was anything forced or sloppy…. 4.5/5

Enjoyment: Pretty enjoyable, I enjoyed that u dared to be different and didn’t go with the popular/traditional way of doing a topic, more or less a documentary on insanity…. 4.5/5

Vocab: Your vocab level far exceeds any I have seen on this site, and it all fits in well… 5/5

Overall excellent and well written piece, the thought process of it all the brainwracking vocab and vivid descriptions u gave were genius… HOF verse imo…. 38 /40



Fix

On Topic: You were on topic with what needed to be done, but I am disgusted.. 6 y/o… u wrote the part of an insane person…. 4.5/5

Depth: I would have liked to see you NOT procrastinate and really have gone more into the story and a little more detail and background maybe or even the set up to the rape… 4/5

Imagery: Pretty graphic, but excellent, the way you describe the scene where he was raping her was prolly one of the most disturbing things to me…. 5/5

Originality: Yea, it was original, I never expected anyone to write about raping a 6 y/o sister… 5/5

Flow: It flowed pretty well, but it seems like u concentrated more on the story aspect instead of the whole package… 4/5

Multis: Decent, nothing really stand out or complicated, you were levels below bladed in multis, but u still had nice multis… 4/5

Enjoyment: Yes and no, I don’t like the raping of a 6 y/o.. disgusted me, but the fact that u got out of ur comfort zone and went graphic and insane I enjoyed… 4.5/5

Vocab: Pretty good, nothing stand out and nothing that hurt you… 4/5


Overall, I would have liked to see you put forth more of an effort and not key up a last minuet deal, but for it being a key it was brilliant, you seemed more concentrated on the story more than anything else instead of perfecting everything u perfected 1 aspect…. 35/40


Overall I think bladed won this, more rounded verse, I liked his concept and originality with it, the dare to be different feel of it, I think I may be one of the few who truly understood his verse, nothing against fix, but if u applied urself and didn’t wait to do this, I think you could have won this… HOF battle

3-2

Good battle so far Bladed..

Uppin for some more votes..

can i get a more indepth explanation from JimmyWhite...? i believe explained votes are part of the voting criteria...

nice battle, Fix...

voting tonight and would like to battle winner

votes needed

voting tonight and would like to battle winner


smh....

On Topic: Bladed - His was the more obvious way of telling the story, where you could easily see that insanity was the main theme of his piece. Fix's was only really apparant at the end of his respective piece

Depth: Tie - Both did well, but could have pushed it a bit further. Felt Bladed could have gone into more detail about thoughts and emotions, instead of using a dominating 'narrative' style, and Fix could have gone further into describing the scene and setting up the story better

Imagery: Fixion - Tough one to call this. Bladed had some real nice imagery, but the reason I didn't choose him over Fixion was that some of it seemed forced. I'm not sure how to explain, but it seemed that some of the imagery was unnecessary and distracted attention away from the main storyline. At times I was reading it, and I'd find myself lost in the imagery and wonder to myself "is this part of the story, or is it thoughts going on inside the mind? Or was it just the general "scene setting/describing" imagery familiarly used with the narrative style of telling a story? This is why it attracted attention away from the main story for me. Fix's imagery was more to the point, and it was easy to decipher what was being described/set, how and why.

Originality: Fixion - The ending did it for me. Fix always seems to have a twist at the end of his pieces, but he leaves you guessing right til the end and rarely give clues until the very end, which is the sign of a high class writer. Bladed's perspective was original, but it lacked a certain "oooh" factor, as in it lacked something within the story that was out of the ordinary that really engages the reader.

Flow: Tie - Bladed started off with near perfect flow. However, it did drop off at times, which was inevitable considering the length of his verse. Example, in the 3rd verse, use of the word 'civilization' was relevant in the storytelling, but disrupted the flow. Fix's flow was fairly solid, but also dropped at times, and was especially evident when looking at the structure of his verse, with the tendancy to use a few too many stretched lines

Multis: Bladed - This was also close, but I feel the Bladed's multis that he uses in every piece are the most original and well thought out multis I've ever seen anybody use online. Without multis, Bladed's verse would struggle to flow, but because of the superb use of inner and transitional multis, Bladed has to take this. Not saying there was much wrong with Fix's multi use, because his was also very strong and again one of the best multi users I've seen, but Bladed really shines in this category.

Enjoyment: Fix - As said before, I felt Bladed's imagery and narrative style within his verse somewhat detracted attention away from his main storyline. At times it became monotonous, and I found myself tempted to skip through lines until something interesting happened. Fix kept my attention all the way through, with more suspense and a wicked twist at the end of his piece, so I've gotta say I enjoyed Fix's verse more

Vocab: Bladed - Superior word choice, again this category is one that Bladed shines in every time I have read one of his verses. A wide range of vocab, which was relevant and well thought out. Carefully selected to have the most effect on the reader, really nicely done

Overall: Close one to call this. I felt Bladed was superior in the multis and vocab department, and Fix was superior in the storytelling and originality department. Both verses were very different from one another, and both had very unique styles. Bladed went for the more narrative style, switching from personal thought and emotion to describing the scene in a different perspective, which was refreshing to read. I did however felt it lacked a certain "oooh" factor as I mentioned before, where not much was happening and I felt perhaps a shocking twist or some sort of realisation would have grabbed the reader's attention more. Fix was somewhat the opposite, where his storytelling was excellent and the thoughts/emotions were captured superbly, but it was at times lacking more descriptive scene setting and character development. Put the styles of verses together, and you'd have one hell of a verse. But in this case, I felt that because both Bladed and Fix had a different perspective and writing style to one another, it was too hard to say who was superior. So I'm gonna have to give this one a tie

Vote - Tie

4-3

Uppin.

Voting later 2day.....

On Topic: Tie..Both did what they where meant to do

Depth: Tie - Both did well, went in to great detail..i was leaning to bladed on this one but fix held his own enough to create a draw

Imagery: Fixion - Some graphic picture's drawn in the way he raped his victim..drew the picture of a physcopath well

Originality: Fixion - Like a few have said about fix..tend's to always have the 'twist' in his pieces at the end of his story that leaves u with the shock factor..

Flow: Bladed- Always brings a good understanding of flow to his pieces, its evident by his structure n line length..it did fall off a few times in spots but i notice when fix writes text that some of his lines tend to be streched in attempt to cram more into a line...

Multis: Bladed - I was going to call this cat a tie, everytime i see bladed's drops..always packed full of mutli's and inners or transitional multi's mid bar to create a solid flow..would be great in audio with that understanding..fix held his own as always but i did feel some where kinda forced..

Enjoyment: Fix - This cat is always hard to vote on..once again, i think about what stuck in my mind from the battle, and its hard to go past someone who can right a piece that draws u in then slap u with a twist..disgusting yet shocking twist..bladed's style is effective as fuck..his n ill topical head like that..but when u have someone slap u with a twist it tends to help u lean that way...so thats why fix takes the cat

Vocab: Bladed - Almost impossible to take this cat from bladed in any topical battle...very supperior selective/relevant vocab in every piece..his vocab range is endless n it displays from his drops..sometimes i wonder how the fuck he does it lol..but needless to say he took this cat pretty easily..

Vote- Fixion

Reason; Was alot closer then first though..i mean on the score cards, nothin seperates them...Both told a unique n original idea but i found the story telling ability of fix came through this tourny...his twists in his pieces more often then not have provided him with his wins...bladed comes ill everytime..most consistant topical battler ive ever seen..but just lacked that shock value that fix delivered on this battle...



You can accept if u want..i think im respected enough to drop a fair vote

5-3..

Should be it..good battle Bladed..we said we would do a rematch.

Good tourney Gen.

Praise your champion.

And I would like my winnings =)..

u'll get it tomorrow

Thank You Sir..=)