House Rules ..
Vet Votes Only ..
10 lines ..
Due whenever ..

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Hoe .. bitching about not making the thread soon enough .. i'll even post .. bitch .. do yours asap ( i know its due whenever ) ..

Links -

http://www.rapworlds.com/forums/showthread.php?t=67708
http://www.rapworlds.com/forums/showthread.php?t=67640

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Explanations -

Line 4 - Havana is a place in Cuba .. his name is sCilenCe .. staying quiet .. geddit ? ..
Line 6 - Ruben Studdard .. fat and black .. and studdard = stuttered ..

http://www.aahceleb.com/picture/rubenstuddard_004.jpg

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Line 10 - Napolean Bonaparte .. Bone Apart .. and " loud enough " .. again .. his name's sCilenCe ..

( I don't think most vets would require these explanations but just clearing things up .. )

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You're rhymes're a mystery, put the pieces together, it's worth the trouble
Burst the bubble, n wackness isn't a part of your life, it's the whole puzzle !!
Stare into the muzzle, I'll be dancin on ya neck, I ain't the type to fool ya
sCilenCe can't be Havana good time cuz there ain't no stayin quiet in Cuba !! *
Shut ya mouth hoodlum, can't even finish a sentence when ya talkin smack
Scared to talk, and you Studdard so hard I thought you were fat and black !! *
Lose back to back, soft and stunted from abuse, Sci's a poor gay creature
Nay, fear ya ? Only thing hard n long on you was the fourth grade teacher !!
RW don't need ya, I crush frames so ya best believe that this whore is mine
And I'll break your back BoneApart-e loud enough to snap Napolean's spine !! *

pwned.

ma bad i aint see this shyt

CheCcin in..//...///

ill spit when i get back form work..

do me a favor...no fucking free posting...
after i spit all i wanna see is votes and "Uppin"

you got issues with a vote PM me with links as to why its hate or D/R
and i wont accept it.....and visa versa.
i know we beefin but thats no excuse to have an unorginized battle.

Link1: http://www.rapworlds.com/forums/showthread.php?p=818756&posted=1#post818756
Link2: http://www.rapworlds.com/forums/showthread.php?t=65456&page=2
Link3: http://www.rapworlds.com/forums/showthread.php?t=60639&page=3

^^ nice verse con...no lie. it was decient.

vv but mine is better LOL.
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ayo......
im 'CON.TRODICTING YA SIGG', cuz you 'NOT JAY-Z'...
'CON. JIMMY & SPITZ' dick rydin, should be 'CALLED THE GAY-3'//*


CON.trary to belifes, Con's not black at all, but 'ARABIC IN FACT'...
that dot headed fag could be the main cause of 'TERRORIST ATTACKS'//**


its not a CON.spiracy how my 'PUNCHEZ CON.NECT'...
while you blurt out stupid nonsense, like you a fuckin 'FUCK! WIT TERRETTS'//***


come 'FUCK WIT THA TECH' leave Con. bleedin out tha 'FRONT OF HIS CHEST'...
damn ryght im 'ONE OF THA BEST' my lyrics leave Con. str8 'HUNG FROM HIS NECK'//****


'ONE OF THA DEAD' Con. been realized as 'PATHETIC AT BEST'...
ya lyrics need help, so CON.sider this a pronoun & 'PREDICATE TEST'...
like a kid wit bad grades...Con. just got 'SENT TO HIS BED'//*****
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EXPLAINATIONS:
*= .Con, jimmy white, and NYCspitz is ALWAYS in a thread together....


**= i dunno he's either mexican or arabic LOL. arabic went better so i used it.
http://www.rapworlds.com/forums/showthread.php?t=65829 (http://www.rapworlds.com/forums/showthread.php?t=65829) <<~~~PIC OF CON


***= people with terretts blurt out nonsense cussing...


****= my lyrics leave him committing suicide


*****= he mentioned a teacher....so im basicaly saying IM his teacher.

deleted posts not needed and con i had to merge ur 1st 2 posts so it would register in the system as u verse scilence instead of con vs con

will vote on this later

^.. thank you vokal ..

uppn .. ?

You're rhymes're a mystery, put the pieces together, it's worth the trouble
Burst the bubble, n wackness isn't a part of your life, it's the whole puzzle !!
the last multi of the 2nd line was horribly off, the punch was ok not great

Stare into the muzzle, I'll be dancin on ya neck, I ain't the type to fool ya
sCilenCe can't be Havana good time cuz there ain't no stayin quiet in Cuba !! *
pretty good punch and WP, fool ya and cuba is a bit far fetched though

Shut ya mouth hoodlum, can't even finish a sentence when ya talkin smack
Scared to talk, and you Studdard so hard I thought you were fat and black !! *
ehh, not feelin it, i get it but didnt have any wow factor to it, simple WP

Lose back to back, soft and stunted from abuse, Sci's a poor gay creature
Nay, fear ya ? Only thing hard n long on you was the fourth grade teacher !!
meh, dont like it, no personals, punches are weak, WP is bleh...

RW don't need ya, I crush frames so ya best believe that this whore is mine
And I'll break your back BoneApart-e loud enough to snap Napolean's spine !! *
finally a good bar, atleast u closed it well, still personals are missing

overall, started off ok, got really weak in the middle, last bar was ur best, personals were minimal and ill-effective, still seems like ur rusty...


im 'CON.TRODICTING YA SIGG', cuz you 'NOT JAY-Z'...
'CON. JIMMY & SPITZ' dick rydin, should be 'CALLED THE GAY-3'//*
not a good opener...

CON.trary to belifes, Con's not black at all, but 'ARABIC IN FACT'...
that dot headed fag could be the main cause of 'TERRORIST ATTACKS'//**
nope, again a poor punch , shitty personal, these concepts are quite played

its not a CON.spiracy how my 'PUNCHEZ CON.NECT'...
while you blurt out stupid nonsense, like you a fuckin 'FUCK! WIT TERRETTS'//***
not good, the whole CON bit is gettin old with the words... no punch nor personal

come 'FUCK WIT THA TECH' leave Con. bleedin out tha 'FRONT OF HIS CHEST'...
damn ryght im 'ONE OF THA BEST' my lyrics leave Con. str8 'HUNG FROM HIS NECK'//****
not even a punch...poor quality, somethin u'd see from like 2002

'ONE OF THA DEAD' Con. been realized as 'PATHETIC AT BEST'...
ya lyrics need help, so CON.sider this a pronoun & 'PREDICATE TEST'...
like a kid wit bad grades...Con. just got 'SENT TO HIS BED'//*****
started badly and ended it badly

overall, after reading the 1st 2 bars i saw no hope, this was a piss poor verse and nothing of vet quality which u were enquiring about, seems like u need to go back to the basics and practice on some more newbs and elevate


overall con, his verse wasnt as poor, made an attempt at personals while scilence just used words with con in it, which isnt a personal or name flip.. both keep elevating

^.. thank you for breaking it down .. i am rusty .. and am on bed rest .. i cant sit for more than 10 minutes .. so i had to do it quickly ..

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dont sleep...
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common MOD's yall can vote too...
we just wanna get this shyt out the way...
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Stop uppin the thread every 20 minutes

^.. you coulda at least voted .. its vet votes only ..

^.. you coulda at least voted .. its vet votes only ..

^^*agreed*
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vote !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! .........

ok, without wasting too much time, im gonna rate each line out of : wack, not so wack, good, excellent. whoever gets the best score wins, i'm going to do each line by each and not go back and edit it so it's fair.

You're rhymes're a mystery, put the pieces together, it's worth the trouble
Burst the bubble, n wackness isn't a part of your life, it's the whole puzzle !!

not so wack - set-up line was wack as hell but second line was good so balanced.

Stare into the muzzle, I'll be dancin on ya neck, I ain't the type to fool ya
sCilenCe can't be Havana good time cuz there ain't no stayin quiet in Cuba !!

not so wack - again, wtf is with ur set-up's. your second lines are dope but then ya set up is wack, 'stare into the muzzle' ?

Shut ya mouth hoodlum, can't even finish a sentence when ya talkin smack
Scared to talk, and you Studdard so hard I thought you were fat and black !!

good

Lose back to back, soft and stunted from abuse, Sci's a poor gay creature
Nay, fear ya ? Only thing hard n long on you was the fourth grade teacher !!

wack. felt like you were trying to fill a line - nay, fear ya. ok punch though.

RW don't need ya, I crush frames so ya best believe that this whore is mine
And I'll break your back BoneApart-e loud enough to snap Napolean's spine !!

excellent.

thanks einstein for pointing me his verse



im 'CON.TRODICTING YA SIGG', cuz you 'NOT JAY-Z'...
'CON. JIMMY & SPITZ' dick rydin, should be 'CALLED THE GAY-3'//*

good


CON.trary to belifes, Con's not black at all, but 'ARABIC IN FACT'...
that dot headed fag could be the main cause of 'TERRORIST ATTACKS'//**

good


its not a CON.spiracy how my 'PUNCHEZ CON.NECT'...
while you blurt out stupid nonsense, like you a fuckin 'FUCK! WIT TERRETTS'//***

wack


come 'FUCK WIT THA TECH' leave Con. bleedin out tha 'FRONT OF HIS CHEST'...
damn ryght im 'ONE OF THA BEST' my lyrics leave Con. str8 'HUNG FROM HIS NECK'//****

first was punch, second was biggin ya self up - wack it was played

'ONE OF THA DEAD' Con. been realized as 'PATHETIC AT BEST'...
ya lyrics need help, so CON.sider this a pronoun & 'PREDICATE TEST'...
like a kid wit bad grades...Con. just got 'SENT TO HIS BED'//*****

ehhh you messsed it up, set-up had potential but nah...


vote - con.

Honestly, if scilence's last line was better it would have gone to him. Both came poor.

Pro - Con - complex punches
attempt at multi's

Con - Con - way too over complexed at some parts
filler material regularly
lack of personals

pro - scil - clear wording
clear flow

con - scil - too simple
too played
lack of personals

Yo Dav Heres Sci's Verse..

im 'CON.TRODICTING YA SIGG', cuz you 'NOT JAY-Z'...
'CON. JIMMY & SPITZ' dick rydin, should be 'CALLED THE GAY-3'//*


CON.trary to belifes, Con's not black at all, but 'ARABIC IN FACT'...
that dot headed fag could be the main cause of 'TERRORIST ATTACKS'//**


its not a CON.spiracy how my 'PUNCHEZ CON.NECT'...
while you blurt out stupid nonsense, like you a fuckin 'FUCK! WIT TERRETTS'//***


come 'FUCK WIT THA TECH' leave Con. bleedin out tha 'FRONT OF HIS CHEST'...
damn ryght im 'ONE OF THA BEST' my lyrics leave Con. str8 'HUNG FROM HIS NECK'//****


'ONE OF THA DEAD' Con. been realized as 'PATHETIC AT BEST'...
ya lyrics need help, so CON.sider this a pronoun & 'PREDICATE TEST'...
like a kid wit bad grades...Con. just got 'SENT TO HIS BED'//*****

thanks for the breakdown you Tory .. 2-0 ..

good vote @ david....

i apprecate the advice on how to elevate, also funny that if i woulda pre-read my verse and made my last bar a lil better i woulda took that vote.....

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