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Topic: Death In The Family

Check In By: Tuesday May 30th
Verses Due: Friday June 2nd

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To AJ and Con: You probably shouldn't show

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To AJ and Con: You probably shouldn't show

^.. i considered that .. but we'll give it a shot ..

Topic: Death In The Family

^.. :D .. couldn't have been more melancholy ..

Locked and Loaded.

yo, multi just replied to the SB crew thread saying Con pmd him telling him he aint gonna be able to make the tourny, we got half of our verse dun, but then multi told me that, so iuno wtf is going on guy...im pm'ing Con right now....

my internet was down .. sorry .. im back .. and i will make the deadline ..

Son
Leader of Mobsters
Father
Son Talking To Father


I woke up again to grown ups, screaming and shouting
You know I'm feeling like pouting cuz my sleep's always grounded
Can't get an hour in, I deserve a good night's rest
Anger's surfacing tho I know that I should fight this
Cope with the circumstances, til I hear the curtains crash
To the floor in the living room, where the jerks are smashed
At this point I get up, cuz of the thirst I have
Hit the kitchen to fill my glass, wishing for the thrill of class
I can tell from the smell they be toking on da weed
Plus tobacco smoke got the jackos choking constantly
Probably another group of dad's poker cons and g's
Hearing them all...but not him...So it dawns on me
That I should go observe the situation taking place
Bottles clanging all around throwing paper in they faces
Guess these ignorant fucks having a hell of a time
Dad ain't answering my calls so I yell in my mind...

DAD WHERE THE FUCK ARE YOU?!?!

The knot in my stomach's tight as I begin to understand the situation
"He had to go, avoided payment, didn't give heed to our indication
Why we killed him should be no concern of yours, forget it ever happened
If you don't want to suffer the same fate and have your head flattened"
I look down at the corpse for the first time, at the blood-stained floor
The body's mutilated and dissected, the head smashed to the core
I dash for the door before anybody could move, while vomitting profusely
I run as fast as i can but seemingly they don't intend to seduce me
And listen to my hearbeat thudding as the realization of what has occured
Hits me like a wall of bricks and I suddenly sit down to let my thoughts unfurl
Cuz I can't understand what my father meant to me, never a fatality
He made me wild, and has finally tied my hands to the seeds of brutality...

The emotions must have gotten to me, must have passed out, cuz next thing I know, the following happened...

I woke up to find myself still lying on the sidewalk, must've fallen asleep
Only sounds are of the birds chirping, I wonder what I'm doing on the street
And it all comes back to me - the noise, the blood, and the brains on the floor
Head frayed to the core, mashed, with skull fragments laying near the door
I feel sick, can't take this anymore, I wish the pain would stop and fade away
Not that it's physical though I've never been this hurt in ages and a day
My mind's frayed, the emotional stress and pain becoming fast intolerable
I'm past being normal, mom died five years ago of cancer that was horrible
And now this, my father brutally murdered in one massive act of treason
It's killing season as my world falls away without a formidable reason
My mind clouds involuntarily, I see my father standing in front of me
I can't believe what I'm seeing as he opens his mouth to confront me...

You've undone me, didn't avenge my death to make me rest in peace
I'm sorry Dad, had i done so no doubt they would have also killed me
I'm just a plastic man now, wish i could be the one you would be proud of
I'm losing heart again, wish i could show you what you think I'm made of
But here I lay, fucked up from the force of the whip lash
After seeing how them cons sliced your throat...wrists slashed
Lips gashed and your eyes pulled out with a quik grasp
Led me to sitting in puke, out here on this grit grass
And you want me to take vengenace? You put me through this shit!!
I knew this whole time yo ass was as crooked as a twig
You never came home looking like you hit the lottery
Ain't do laundry, you never helped mom with her pottery
You bought for me once, this chain, said it had a meaning
Now I see that it was all in my head or I was dreaming
Noticed how our income was swirling down daily
Heard the whispers that you were the laugh of the town lately
So now maybe I should be taking up a stand
"Boy, come with us, we're making you a man!!"

i understand its now past the deadline ..?

12-24 Hours = 2 Docked Votes.

Alck was at a party last night...I went upstate...

Still gonna murk you clowns with 2 docked votes..:(

Hired killer = NYC
Anonymous Employer = Alck
Narrator = both

Been shot at many times, but bullets never missed the vest
I've wrecked homes since seventeen plus I've twisted necks
Murdering everywhere from alleyways to misted decks
But strangling people to death is what I'd list as best
What's next? Might be supplied with a shotty or tech
My boss'll call me soon with another body to wreck...

* riiing...riiing *
*who is speaking*
*I have your next job*

Do this new job quick since I'm not for patience
Cuz this bitch'll probably snitch on our operations
It's blatant; this kid'll need to see the rope
Choke him before he exposes our deals of dope
But yo, steady ya hand with the gats you tote
Cuz I believe dude may be a cat you know...

*The past is behind me, I feel remorse for none*
*nobody...?*
*pause*
*absolutely*
*good...execute as soon as possible...
the target's walking on lexington towards 60th...
intercept him at an alleyway*

- Line goes dead -

He tried a good life...it was family he drank away
They estranged, so it was known he'd be back to hate
Killing a son he barely knows, but he's far from lost
It's too late to look back at how the stars have crossed...

I take out the rope, stock away this lonely gun
Then take out and kiss a picture of my only son
I don't know whether to murder or to fall and drop
He keeps me going...don't know him but he's all I got
Feelings of hot love rush but they're stocked away
Leave my frustations out on dude who's a block away...
I'm like "Hey, don't look around or the glock'll spray
Turn into this alleyway or you'll be shot today"
Dude prayed, his face lost with his hopes and dreams
A quick glance back, then his neck broke with ease...

*Is about to leave without once looking at his victims face...*

It felt wrong, a note for his mom for wreckin the bloke
...His face up...
The dead mask on a picture I saw a second ago...
What's this? It's phony...oh my God, no please!!!!
I fell to the earth, realizing I killed my own seed...

*Newspaper headlines run a front page story on the death of
a feared mafia leader...There are no suspects in the homocide. In a
smaller article near a back of the paper, a short clip is dedicated
to the death of a young man found in an alleyway in midtown*

Since he was young it was always a knife or job
So after that day, he dedicated his life to God
He killed his boss cuz dude woulda likely booked
To respect the dead soul of the life he took
Shook, he looked towards a way to end his fate
Cuz nothing good ever spawns from endless hate...
He picked up a bible thinking it was fairly true
It introduced a whole world that he barely knew...

*flashback to 20 years later ... after a long day at church, a pastor walks into his house and lies in bed, looking at the dresser opposite his bed*

A broken neck, a thud and a listless groan...
Staring at the picture of a son he wished he'd known

On Topic: both
Depth:A.J and Con
Imagery:A.J and Con
Originality:both
Flow:NYC and Alck
Multis: both
Enjoyment: NYC and Alck
Vocab: both

Overall: NYC and Alck

Nice battle, I liked both songs, A.J and Con had a great verse, but flow was really off and it kinda ruined the enjoyment , they painted a great picture, had a nice vocab and a nice story
NYC and alck also had a great verse, I really liked your story , although it was a little short, I felt more emotion in your story than in A.J's and Con's, but the thing that got this battle for you is the flow , it flowed really nice, also the outro was really good, pretty nice verse

On Topic: A.J + Con
Depth:A.J and Con
Imagery: A.J and Con
Originality: NYC + Alck
Flow: NYC and Alck
Multis: Not voting on this because I'm not great with multis.
Enjoyment: NYC and Alck
Vocab: Neither outshined the other

Vote: NYC + Alck

Reason: NYC + Alck's flow on this was great, rarely had problems with it. Their imagery wasn't as intense as A.J + Con's, but it was still there. As Vocab said before, A,J + Con's flow was just a bit messed up. I voted for NYC + Alck because the very second I started to read, I wanted to finish it. With the other one, it felt like it was a bit streched. Both were a bit predictable. In the end though, NYC + Alck take this one.
Nice battle.

On Topic:TIE
Depth:AJ & Con
Imagery:AJ & Con
Originality:NYC & Alckatraz
Flow:NYC & Alckatraz
Multis:NYC & Alckatraz
Enjoyment:NYC & Alckatraz
Vocab:TIE

Overall:NYC & Alckatraz....had a better flow together, and was an easier and more enjoyable verse to read in the end, both verses tho were on point and well wrote but NYC & Alck were just better in my perspective...nice topical