Theres alot of good talent on this site that I think I can learn from and I dont care if you have one post or nine thousand. All I ask is that you take this thread seriously because I wouldnt be asking for help if I wasnt serious. I just cant seem to get past the level that I'm at right now ..it's like a slump or somethin. Heres a Few bars...


Caucasian an not waitin which is why they criticize
Hit wit lines to spit is why I'll continue done been through
Tha worst to tha point that it hurts in my voice
I'll step be ill an neva cure but Penicillins at tha door


..hmm heres a drop I recently did:

It dont matta who spit as long as you through it its music
Be it new shit or lose it I'll leave Em Lyrically clueless
Like inhale I'm depressed An kinda knew that I blew it
Time wastes as mind states turn irate to become Fluent
In bars like alcoholics spit raw to melt tha tonic
That cured an obscured these Feelins that daily dealings
Tend ta bend my mentality till realitys Fake
An brakes whats at stake whats at stake is it Fake
Is it Fad or ambition close ta choke For my sake
Flows is waitin no debatin motivations mind state

I like to spit real ..I mean i think i got potential an shit but i needa get past this level an get better and its not happening. I appreciate you taking this serious and leaving any Tips or Feed.

1st drop hardly even rhymes.
2nd one is decent.

thanks man ..uppin

First one don't rhyme.... the second one is tight though