Hey! How is everyone doing? I wrote this on everyone's behalf. I know there is a time in everyone's life there is always someone you miss.

Did you ever think you walked alone in your shoes

shoes so worn from travel-and beaten through.

Did you think you’d ever know the deepest parts of you

somehow knowing what you were meant to do.



‘Cause I can hear the beat sounding in my head

and I can see it all come before my eyes.

I do remember all the things that were said

but I can’t seem to remember why.



Chorus:

Is it time to separate myself

separate from this world that betrayed me.

I’m calling for someone to help

calling for help to be what I’m to be.



Did you hear the clock as it ticked away

and did you notice the change of time every day.

And when the sky grows cloudy and gray

I’ll remember you-with my thoughts I’ll pray.



*chorus*



And will I remember you in the very end

‘cause already I forget so much.

Missing out on you-I must now pretend

filling the absence left without your touch.



*chorus*



I’ve always dreamed for my chance at greatness

always afraid of being so much less.

But I’ll never get to prove my worthiness

at least not to the one that I’ll always miss.



And one more question to ease my beaten mind

one more question with know answer to be found.

Did you ever feel the world left you behind

‘cause I feel,

‘cause I feel there’s no one around.




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Man, I am not trying to be mean or shatter your dreams, because like you I also need room to improve. I gripped your concept for this piece, but it could have been more complex or boost with imagery. I feel like thios poem could have been better if it was spoken rather than wrotten. But for the good, I like the first line, in the first stanza, that said something like

Did you ever think you walked alone in your shoes?

I hope your improve and add onto your skills!

MANN iWANt Y0Uh T0h READ MUh P0EM&&SPEAk dHA TRUdH B0Ut EVEN iF dHA TRUTH HURt`Sz. HERE`Sz dHA liNK:

http://rapworlds.com/forums/showthread.php?t=96669

props, keeep up the good work