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TOPIC - "Subtle Entrapment"

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The Goat The Goat He's In!!!!!!!!

When facing a mass of past a society can cringe
The entirety can unhinge until madness demands a binge

As..

Dawn follows dusk, rain preludes rust
Trust hollows lust, and the brain broods thus…

To provoke the obscene he broke routine
No joke to be seen, no hope he could glean
From his waking dream, a mistaken theme
That making cream could ease his acing being..

Under the stairs ready to leave life’s locomotion
Thought train’s derailed to entice loco motion
A slow promotion has occurred now he’s got to deliver
If he gives her, he deserves to turn from eroded rock to the river
From the leaf to the cyclone, the surfer to the wave
So under stairs he remains, A precursor to the grave…

Seedlings of murder sow impunity that’ll bloom
As evil deeds bring suburbia into a lunacy catacomb
Societies tattered womb, with a rouge cell every block
There’s no telling in hell there’s more deadly a flock
under stairs and in wardrobes, they form in some more droves
Torn free as the dawn crows, no longer pawns to the dice throws…
..and so he chose, to be the wall up which the wicked vine grows.

Feeling himself push on the inside of his eyelids
He waits for the time to deny how he might live
For how he will, an existence both new and beautiful
A future minus the scruples as he mines through his pupils
His mind’s a finger, no cuticles: dead cells to the edge
His head swells in birth as red fell by the wedge
Eyes sockets stretched with a screech and a crack
Head opened flat, his cheeks now meet at the back
A featureless map of disfigurement, these joints shall encompass
Except blood, gristle and ligaments are now points of the compass..

..now they walk amongst us, or rather we amongst they
affray and carnage thrust, on the defunct they prey
away from the race of the rat, they defaced the subtly trapped
and replaced the shackles of society with the utterly wracked..

Mankind opened its eyelids to see compliance
and unlocked the freedom inside us…..

……the key was violence

NYCSPITZ has until tonight to post with a docked vote, or he is disqualified.

^^ fam don't close it, I explained in predictions thread, twin agreed to let me post a liiiiittle late

Alright

Immaculate schemes, of putting crack in a fiend
Hood rat politics so black's stackin his green
Hubris filled, yet humility was trapped in between
Just one life, just one more casualty....

....

And so it was.

At a young age his soul shaped, engraved with thug lust
He was enraged that his mother conceded to drug rush
Slugs bust, livin' in hell forced to brag with chicks
Of mags n' clips used up just to back his strip
He dragged with cliques but thought "damn enough is enough"
He'd leave with mom after selling a last bag of his stuff...

But drawing the ire of fate...

He decided to leave the place where strife had crept
Cuz ghetto life begets parity to life and death...
And while the thought of it all didn't entice his set
He adopted serenity and lay the knife to rest...
Sleep! He yearned for peace in his soliloquy of nightly rest
Weary from walking near demons who spite the blessed
Ahhh, but death's mistress devised a test!
Drug sales weren't his doom; the vice was sex

[I]You're so fucking heartless...

Slowly strolling towards his peeps, he'd deal with the drop off
Cancel the swap even if it meant having his top sawed
Approached his crew, they saw him and the leader's glock paused
"I'm out fam, keep the bag I ain't bout to be caught robbed"
His dude Rock: "Ya spot's soft, you'll never get locked dawg
My dude Mike'll lead you - he's never been chopped off
You don't have to get chalked off, just get ya cock sloshed
Them hot broads'll jump on ya dick like hop scotch
Feel the hood a last time before you just walk off"
And as they left; the leader spat "you ain't squat, fraud"

A song of lament...

So Mike, what's good?

"Same ol' duke, just tryna flip stacks of chips
Live in sin, so they call me the devil's advocate
Here's the place, stay calm cuz we're on a thin-string
I'mma take a block straight to the boss, the kingpin"
So he lingered on the stoop spittin game to a thick ho
With slick flow, bout to take the chick in for a lick/blow
But bingo! Mike came with bulletproof chasing a woman nimble
Seeing him, she screamed - the plan was simple
Mike yelled "CLEAR!" Confused, he saw his mom shot
And caught a glimpse of the snipers before he got dropped


*An undercover sting operation was completed successfully earlier today when a drug lord and her son were shot dead in broad daylight. Police are confident that the killings were crucial in stemming an increased flow of drugs into East Harlem. No pedestrians were killed or injured during the Shooting....*

ON TOPIC: NYC, T was really random at most parts
DEPTH T gave him this cat I guess he got a little deeper it threw him off his flow though
IMAGERY NYC He told a story pretty vividly and I could really see it going down
ORIGINALITY tie
FLOW NYC ... his first verse
Slugs bust, livin' in hell forced to brag with chicks
Of mags n' clips used up just to back his strip

that killed it.

MULTIS NYC ez cat to call
VOCAB T, came with more advanced vocab


VOTE NYC, told the story and had a solid verse, most of T's verse
was seeming like he was just thinking of stuff to rhyme, where as nyc
told his story but yet rhymed the words to go along with the thoughts
he was expressing without getting caught up in making things, rhyme
just for the sake of rhymeing.

ON TOPIC - NYC. He stayed in the lines of his take a little better than Twin did.
DEPTH - Twin. NYC picked his concept, and kept to very few ideas. Twin brought up quite a few ideas.
IMAGERY - NYC. His was more based on a straightforward and evident imagery. Twin tried to incorporate a lot more hazy subliminal shit that didn't always work.
ORIGINALITY - Tie. both came with a somewhat unique take on the topic.
FLOW - NYC. His piece just flowed a little smoother throughout.
MULTIS - NYC. Mainly same reason as flow.
VOCAB - Tie. Twin had some dope vocab, but NYC's wordchoice for his concept was dope as well.

Rationale: Both could've done a bit to make their pieces a little more enjoyable. NYC didn't do bad at all really, and Twin at times didn't cover himself with his multis/flow. Both concepts could've gone a bit deeper, but they both did a good job of keeping their pieces on solid ground.

Vote: Tie. Neither did ENOUGH for the win, but neither did too bad.

On Topic - NYC...
Depth - Twin...
Imagery - NYC...
Flow - Tie...
Multies - NYC...
Originality - Tie...
Vocabulary - Twin...

Thoughts To Both...

Twin - The Concept You Chose Was Alright, But There Wasn't Enough Detail That Coincided With The Main Idea To Draw Attention. It's Not That It Was Bad Or Anything, Just Could've Used More Effort. There Were A Few Lines That I Took A Liking To...

For how he will, an existence both new and beautiful
A future minus the scruples as he mines through his pupils
His mind’s a finger, no cuticles: dead cells to the edge
His head swells in birth as red fell by the wedge

NYC - Not Really Much To Say, A Decent Verse. Could've Been Approached A Bit Differently, Possibly Somewhat Of Dialogue To Entice The Reader Into Your Thought Process Or Whatnot...

Vote - Tie.. As Sly Said, Both Were Fairly Good...

2-2 . . .

^ 3-3*....

2-2, Sly Stilla and Flat Line each voted a tie. Acibiades voted for NYCSPITS, but that vote is docked due to the late verse.

We need votes to move to the next round.

On topic- NYC edged this, because Twin was good, but his verse had moments...
Depth-Twin... I feel he got more descriptive and expanded a little bit more...
Imagery-NYC the reason as it's been stated his is more straight forward, imagery is better visualized off of basics with a few metaphorical twists.
Originality- I was gonna say twin, but I feel this was a tie, because NYC had unique spots in his as well...
Flow-NYCs flow was more on point
Multis-NYC
Vocab- Twin edged this

Overall- Not a bad battle. The topics this round were kinda ehhh if you ask me. I feel like they were both equal, but I don't think it was a tie at the same time. I feel flow and imagery, and NYC had both. Had Twin concentrated a little bit more on his imagery. It would have resulted in either a tie or him winning.

3-2 Nycspitz.

ON TOPIC: NYC got this in my opinion, Twin seemed to fall off topic a bit at times.
DEPTH: NYC again took this, had more ideas I think which made his verse more imaginary.
IMAGERY: NYC created this topic well.
ORIGINALITY: Tie I think, both had different views on the topic and did good at them.
FLOW: NYC, his flow was more consistant and I feel it was generally better than Twin's off marks at some points where the flow fell off for him.
MULTIS: Tie, I feel they both used nice multies in this which worked for both of them.
VOCAB: Tie, both took it.

Overall vote: NYCSpitz

I feel his drop was more prepared and hard hitting, his flow was amazing and he kept to the topic well with nice depth and imagery. Twin had a nice verse no doubt but I just feel he kind of creeped off topic at some points and his flow was kind of slowing down for him in my opinion. But he did a good job to. Good battle.

ON TOPIC: Tie, both were equally on topic.
DEPTH: NYC, provided us with an insight into his story.
IMAGERY: Twin, his were much more vivid.
ORIGINALITY: Tie, both were evenly original.
FLOW: NYC, much better throughout his drop..
MULTIS: Tie, Both had multies that didnt seem forced.
VOCAB: Twin, much better wording in places.

Overall vote: Tie.


i thought that the battle was pretty even with neither having the outstandingly better verse, NYCs depth and flow countered Twins imagery and multies.. and they tied in the other cats so i have no choice but to vote a tie, even though i hate to do so.

5-3, good battle

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