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TOPIC - "The Final Consumption"

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What better way to talk about Final Consumption than to attempt it?
What better way to attempt it than to trip on exotic mushrooms?
This is an account of that night.




I think about Final Consumption and the path it's on
So I pick up a quarter of shrooms straight out the Amazon
I'm recording this journey, so I make sure the cam is on
Grab my last meal, and pig out like the ham is gone
Like a hammer song, my mind says "cant touch this"
This much is, no good, like a cripple with crutches
So I cop an eighth, of crippy, and a case of Heineken
So If I'm feelin trippy, I can always feel fine again
Then I head to the beach, and get a hotel room of my own
I unplug the TV, and turn off the phone to get in the zone
All alone, I twist a blunt so it's already ready
When I'm tripping and my arms go limp like spaghetti
Then I cut up the shrooms, and take 'em right to the face
I wash it down with a beer, trying to drown out the taste
Then I lay back, hidden in the sheets like a relic
Thinkin' of the this track then I feel psychadelic
That's when my body awakens like I drank a pot of coffee
The room gets lighter and brighter and I see Omar Kadafi
Staring back at me, from the popcorn in the ceiling
The fan blows hurricane winds and I get the feeling
I'm not alone in the room, but that's the mushrooms talkin out
So I throw on my hoodie, grab a beer and start walkin out
Like UNK, I'm drunk and these South American shrooms are the funk
I'm drunk, and the trip is creeping up my spine like a stripe on a skunk
I'm fine, I could do this for days in a daze
When all of a sudden I gaze, stars shooting their rays
My way, I think they're nuclear waves
I feel like a bat in the day out of it's caves!
I run back inside, avoiding any burns
Shut the door with a slam, when my stomach turns
It's time to vomit, and throw up my stash and my guts
So I puke in the trash with the ash and the cigarette butts
Then I throw up my spleen, and searched til I found it
Look up from under the bed to find myself completely surrounded
Things are looking bad now, I need myself an upper
Now I know how Jesus felt at the Last Supper
But I'm surrounded by strangers, not disciples
No holy title, and when I die they won't write me a Bible
So this is my testament, drug testin' it
Seems stupid now especially eating from cow excrement
I'm loopy enough to stick a belt through
The shrooms say to my brain "I'ma melt you"
This trip, I try to beg and then kill it
I don't want my brain to fry like an egg on a skillet
Then my vision changes from perfect to a pity
Things turn black & white like I'm trapped in Sin City
I lay on the bed stressing, talking to God & confessing
When my body begins to drip off the bed like salad dressing
It's all fact, not real lies, you need to realize
You don't trip on shrooms, you see with your real eyes
I did this for inspiration, but that was the wrong assumption
I never really expected this to be my Final ...

sorry thought the shit was due on the 22nd.....
but i'll post tonight...guess i gotta be minus 1 vote now?
or can i get a slight extension so it can be even since alot of people arent showing up on time for this?


anyway i will post later

If RoganReid wants to, he can accept your late post. But he can also take the win if he wants. The decision is up to him.

If he DOES accept your verse, you will be docked one vote regardless.

fine by me that you post, and whatever else. it's all the same to me.

legends mind, brains an atlas, centered on lines
entermspines, recieve messages of many kinds
arise at dawn taste the sunshine then yawn
castle of a mind, but to the body i'm a pawn(chorus)
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6:45am.....the alarm rings
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roll over like cingular minutes, empty house i'm singular in it
brush hair thats seemingly thining, i pause mingle then finish
penchant to converse w/ myself without utterin a sentence
in the mirror, face 2 face, eyes of a man recieving a pension
....."MAN YOU AINT OLD"...... someone said with a vengance
"no i'm not", i said,didnt think to question the vioce that lent it
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6:50am....
early bird gets worm, i wake soon after they erase the moon
today i'm running late must've unknowingly pressed the snooze
inhale freshness, the scent of flowers as i hop in the shower
irish spring smells the room as i wash until the 7 o'clock hour
grab the towel, pat dry, lotion up then head to the living room
towel on waist i sit an grab the remote, expecting a visit soon
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7:00 am
i'm feeling fresher than usual as i roll out of my slumber
i sit on the side of the bed, just letting my mind wonder
get up, leisurely stroll in the living room, and the tv's on
my guest is late,i should call but i do not see the phone
eyes girate left 2 right, vision catches the cordless' sight
i dial the number 425-430-673* not sure but i hope its right
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legends mind, brains an atlas, centered on lines
entermspines, recieve messages of many kinds
arise at dawn taste the sunshine then yawn
castle of a mind, but to the body i'm a pawn(chorus)
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ring .....ring......ring......
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a voice on the other end says....HELLO?....
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how you doing this is micheal, you remeber me from last night
how you doing this is marcus, i met you on the chicago flight
this laurence, probably wondering what took so long to call right
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the voice on the phone replies
why are guys playing on the line
y u calling so early, u know the time?
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click........ehh ehhh ehhhh ehhhhhhhhhh
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thoughts run thru my mind, my vision is quadrupled
"hahahaha" rings out,i respond "does that amuse you"
i fuse thru cells as they break of to be remade again
my essenence is sliced, an with the blade its trimmed
multiple conversation in my head i'm content with deading
all i need is one vioce, his words are power that i'm dreading
i run about 20 paces, to the mirror, i see 1 of many faces
the creed nor intention afflicted are near the same places
could or would, i'm indepth with the "should have plot"
knowledge is food for thought,then i should have fought
this isnt an act, but its so SKIT-so in many scenes
i'm a midst anger an confusing, not wanting anything
i'm searching for cinergy, i'm hungry to rid myself of this
emersed in energy, i plunge for my 3rd story window........
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legends mind, brains an atlas, centered on lines
enter spines, recieve messages of many kinds
arise at DEATH taste the sunshine then yawn
castle of a SOUL, but to the corpse i'm a pawn (chorus)

http://www.rapworlds.com/forums/showthread.php?t=93239

theres my link i dont have another one because none of these other battles have 2 people posting in them

ON TOPIC- Tie. Both kind'a veered off at moments, but wound up sticking to the point. I felt that with Rogan's approach, a lot more could've been done, but they both did well for the most part.
DEPTH- Rogan. He really put just a little more into forming his ideas and concepts with his take on the piece. The opener set me up for a little more trippy of a write, but he didn't captivate too much. Aroura had some moments where he began to go further, but surfaced too quickly.
IMAGERY- Tie. For what was available to these two with their takes, they both should've done a lot more as far as creating a solid picture. The veering off that I mentioned relates to this as well.
ORIGINALITY- Tie. Rogan's concept was more original, but he didn't attack it too well to claim this category.
FLOW- Aurora. Neither was bad, but Aurora had a more structured and easier flow.
MULTIS- Tie. Neither's multis were outstanding.
VOCAB- Tie. Both used vocabulary that was fitting of their topics, but neither displayed anything too brilliant.


Rationale: As I said, Rogan set me up for a very odd ride, but never seemed to lock the doors. His piece barely broke the speed limit, and stayed in the lines, which isn't really a bad thing. I was just kinda letdown by him not displaying a solid piece.

Aurora didn't have too many mistakes, but he didn't really open his piece up to the risk of that. He left everything closed in, neat and tidy.

Vote: Rogan, for displaying a little more with his take on the concept.

Nice drop Aurora! And here's my link!

http://www.rapworlds.com/forums/showthread.php?t=93239&page=2

1-0 at the moment. If a vote comes in for Auroura, it will still remain 1-0 because he will be docked a vote.

ON TOPIC=rogan felt like he kept it consistent to the end
DEPTH=Aurora, he seemed to describe it in more detail imo
IMAGERY=aurora, could actually picture the phone rings and the story etc
ORIGINALITY=tie
FLOW=rogans flowed better,
MULTIS=aurora. his two word syllable multies werent consistent but were good
VOCAB=hmm too close to call, would say rogan tho.
Overall=Close Battle, But Aurora clinched the most important categories imo

on topic - tied... neither were consistently enough on topic and both had their sidebar lines... Rogan couldve gone way further with this... felt Auroura came semi predictable...
depth - Rogan... more lines that develed into something deeper... Auroura had a few but he didnt really expand too much... was more of a straightforward piece, imo... a little thoughts but not enough...
imagery - tied... was off and of for both... Rogan didnt really describe much visually but he kept up emotional imagery and such which helped him stick with Auroura... Auroura's storylike piece gave him more room for dope imagery but he didnt impress... still, his more frequent imagery equaled Rogan's less frequent, more developed imagery...
originality - Rogan... slightly unexpected take on it, because (reading the topic) i expected something dealing with food... Auroura came a little more expected... i can honestly say ive seen similar topical battles where people have dropped very similar verses... just wasnt a big enough risk, imo... still, Rogan barely won this and if he'd have gone further with his ideas, he'd have easily take this cat...
flow - Auroura... way more consistent, formed better... showed some experience here...
multies - tied... neither came impressive enough to take this...
vocab - Rogan... better word choice and development... felt there were a few places where Auroura had a bad word placed... close cat...


overall - Rogan... was more consistent, took a risk, got my interest more... used better word choice to get across some emotional imagery and depth that saved him here... Auroura wasnt particularly bad but, when taking a more expected approach, he needed to flip it hella tight... didnt do so here... close battle...

2-0, votes please.

Closed. RoganReid wins 2-0.