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TOPIC - Against Impossible Odds

Chin Check, Good luck Brother

* starts digging EZ's grave *

G/L

CZECH LIKE JAROMIR JAGR

Keystyle, Also take in account the aussie accent for pronunciation ect..pz and goodluck spits you 2 and a half day late bastard


“Unmasking Truths”
…

…Because life is not always as it seems…

…

My eyes slowly open…

Heavily bruised and in pain...wrists and ankles both bound within chains
The room as dark as the night sky, I feel a rope tied round my ribcage
I hear the sounds of dismay, screaming, shortly followed by silence
*The light turns on*
A dark figure in a porcelain mask, its like death borrowed his eyelids
A soulless gaze, hollow and to follow his stare was a serrated knife
Like the blade his wife an every horror flick made to narrate his life
Brave his eyes, mask of no reflection, fear stricken, I force a breath
He points across the room, adjacent to me, another corpse at rest
Like a pawn of chess, I prepare for his next move, certain it be doom
A voice more evil then hell itself, repeats ‘curtains for you soon’

* It was in this moment that Brett Johansson. A 32yr old man who lived a normal life. Who had only gone to sleep the night before…wakes in a rotting old cellar and dropped in the middle of a serial killers sick and twisted game. Brett realizing he was not the only person partaking observes the surroundings in front of him*

The light left on, he moves to the next room, it’s now I take my time
Look round the cellar; learn the other body’s rope shaped to mine
Chills colder then the arctic breeze seemingly brace my spine
Both ropes intertwined, I hear a moan of agony leave his mouth
A severed tongue and a missing limb is why his bleeding mounts
The mask returns to the door, bellows ‘you may be leaving now’
Throws us both keys, walks away, daring us to a planned grief
His presence though, I had felt before, so familiar it scared me
The traits uncanny, my mind draws blank, to this fear unknown
I reach for the key; unlock the chains the mask had clearly shown
The other man follows suit, unable to speak but could stand to his feet
We make our way past the old door, weary and prepared for deceit
Enter a shrinking corridor, anticipating demise in a blank face
The front door open, freedom, but before I could thank grace
My other half ran frantically, it was then that I screamed ‘wait’
Only a foot out the door before the mask revealed a thick blade
The edge carving his neck veins, knees give way to deaths hands
Horrified I watch as he cuts the rope to give me my best chance
Throws over the blade, steps away from the door, issues me out
Again something sparks; I know this man but couldn’t figure it out
Running directly at him, launch, sending us toppling down the stairs
Identity concealed, dazed with machete in hand and sound impaired
I drive the blade to his back, falling face first, the porcelain cracks
Facing away from me, he chuckles, not bothered to form an attack
*He slowly turns to face Brett*
I drop the blade, collapse to my knees, not believing what I see
The dusty smile and evil smirk was all but a reflection of me


Brett Johansson had been a patient at the Queensland psychiatric ward since the age of 14…Battling with a major case of Schizophrenia and severe depression that was said to be triggered by the murder of his mother when he was 9… on the strictest of medication and under permanent surveillance, Brett went on to spend a further 18 years in the state facility…At age 32 Brett was finally released from the hospital and said to have overcome his illness and was deemed fit for society…against impossible odds

…Face value is but a reflection of something deeper…

The odds mount on our hero as war throttles the very womb of mother earth herself....

The ancient magi have awoken spells unbeknownst even to the Gods, and their unbalance has destroyed Lord Zeus himself. Fearing Armaggedon, Gaia cries onto her children, - such torrents of rain had never been felt on her soil before, and never will again....

Only redemption can bring harmony back to our planet....

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So they descend from Mount Olympus in fury...

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Ahhh soft mortal flesh, equipped meagerly wit' swords as weaps!
Ancients clash with Gods 'n hordes of chosen sets....
The immortals give death as a reward to those inept!
Yet a flaw-filled man was their golden threat...

The warriors soaked, our hero admist cold and chaos
Hera noticed his virtue, and bestowed him kleos
Bodies clashed - in his rage all the chattering dulled
Sword making an arc, producing melody of shattering skulls!
A hesitation - Warriors paused standing tattered and mulled
When light flashed! A look yonder revealing where the battle was null...
Horror lulled- the spell cast was long since unspoken in oath
Transparent barriers formed; only to be broken by hope

And war ceased as Ancients discovered their graces
Standing still, smiles cover their colorless faces!
Grimacing, our hero wonders - is my squad at fault?
But then, he bears witness to the God's assault!!

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And high atop a peak, earth's ground looked to be in gallows!
Spears rained from Apollo; only swallowed by enemy shadows...
Dieties cursing in fury, the Gods rose to clamor, -
Standing alert, wondering whether their hope had dampered
When Thor rushed the wall and broke his Hammer! ,
Killed death; then stole his cloak and dagger!!!
Men and God stood alike, the both enamoured
Thor staggered; his knees bent, provoking slander!
Hades runs forward in rage - his sin great in its lust
Trident thrust, but his spear disintegrated to dust!!!

What foul creatures are these, designed to shun?!
Ares touches our hero's shoulder - His time has come....
Eyes fixed upon adversaries gravely stationed
The God of war chose a man to save creation...
There they stood: God and wizard in a perilous truce
When a lone mortal ran forth!
Swiftly dodging all the arrows they shoot!
What blasphemies! He ran foward, their faces rabid
The humility in his soul breaking through their ancient magic...

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The mortal sacrifice of our hero saves earth from destruction. The storm clears, and a phoenix rises from the ashes of the death; The re-birth of Zeus! Peace and Harmony are both restored to earth, as man proves to poseess qualities harbored by niether creature nor God...

0- -1 to EZ. Let's get some votes.

ON TOPIC - NYC... more original when it comes to "against impossible odds"... felt more true to the topic at hand...
DEPTH - EZ... slightly deeper and less surface, developed his more...
IMAGERY - NYC... vivid, descriptive, and potent imagery while EZ just didnt stay consistent with his...
ORIGINALITY - tied... really, both werent too original... insane pieces have been done and need a tight flip to really get passed the grade and Mythology pieces need to be interwoven with dope characters and strong metaphors to be considered original... neither did so, in my eyes...
FLOW - EZ... NYC had an uneven syllable count at times and his lines went from short to long in the period of a few lines...
MULTIS - NYC... consistency, once again... i'll quote at the end a few places where EZ's multies didnt match up (accent not withstanding)...
VOCAB - tied... neither blew me away or had any shocking word choices... a few clever lines in both pieces but neither had an overwhelming edge in this...


first off, the quotables i thought were dope:

NYC...
Hades runs forward in rage - his sin great in its lust
Trident thrust, but his spear disintegrated to dust!!!

Standing alert, wondering whether their hope had dampered
When Thor rushed the wall and broke his Hammer! ,
Killed death; then stole his cloak and dagger!!!
Men and God stood alike, the both enamoured
EZ...
A soulless gaze, hollow and to follow his stare was a serrated knife
Like the blade his wife an every horror flick made to narrate his life
The traits uncanny, my mind draws blank, to this fear unknown
I reach for the key; unlock the chains the mask had clearly shown
in bold are my favorite lines...

OVERALL - NYC... was close but it came down to NYC being more consistent in what he did, from multies to imagery... EZ had him in flow due to a flaw in NYC's style and structure and, if EZ had remained consistent in his multi pattern and layout, he'd of taken this... but, i felt EZ wasnt consistent in that one aspect in particular and it cost him the battle... examples of EZ's awkward multies:

Throws us both keys, walks away, daring us to a planned grief
His presence though, I had felt before, so familiar it scared me
"scared" and "planned" possess different sounds in my accent as well as "me" and "grief" being somewhat of a stretch to find a rhyme...
My other half ran frantically, it was then that I screamed ‘wait’
Only a foot out the door before the mask revealed a thick blade
I drop the blade, collapse to my knees, not believing what I see
The dusty smile and evil smirk was all but a reflection of me
that couplet has no multi at all, merely a rhyme of "see" and "me"...

like i said, it was EZ's glaring flaw in his verse that shot down his chances of winning...

0-0


chea.

On Topic- Edged By NYC (EZ's was on topic, but I feel NYC's portrayed the topic far more. It just seemed like a story that was more against impossible odds.)
Depth-EZ(He took this by a landslide in my opinion describing the room and the feelings in the beginning came dope.)
Imagery-Tie(I could see both in my head, while EZ painted a gritty picture with his, NYC also did a good job painting a picture of a battle/war)
Originality-Tie (Reason being is because EZ used pretty much a plot from saw, where NYC used a 300 type plot... Though they both had twists, neither concept was fresh)
Flow-EZ (As bladed said... NYC was off at times, EZ's audio talent came into play in this)
Multis- NYC (EZ had a tremendous ammount of inners, but at certain parts lacked multis)
Vocab- Tie (nothing too spectacular)

This was a tough one to call, both could have included more. I feel in my eyes, as EZ did a good job in depth, but the imagery NYC brought forth was a tad bit better. If EZ would have been able to keep his depth and still been able to make me use imagery a tad bit more, the win would have been his. However from using his inners it actually helped NYC edge this.

NYCSPITS

if NYC imagery was a "tad bit better" why is the category listed as "tied"...?

seems a disconnect in your logic...

because it was a tad bit better... no enough to slightly pull through as him taking the category...

i sense you riding my dick again :)

<3

^no, just inquiring...

lol, anytime somebody asks a question, its not dick riding... you are mistaken...

1-0 me

:)

ON TOPIC
Both stayed on topic consistently. Tie.


DEPTH

Another tie, both did a great job of delving into the topic.

IMAGERY

This was close, but EZ edged NYC in this category. EZ's piece centered more around imagery.


ORIGINALITY

It's hard to choose this one, but I gotta go with NYC. EZ's piece was tight as fuck, don't get me wrong, but it reminded me a lot of that movie Identity. NYC was similar to someone's drop in the last round, but he had a great "turn of events" at the end.


FLOW

EZ's flowed a bit better than NYC.


MULTIS

For the same reasons mentioned above. If EZ stuck with the multi schemes he had at certain times, he'd have taken it, but NYC was a lot more consistent.


VOCAB

NYC used a lot of "nerdy" wording in his piece, things you normally wouldn't encounter in a rap...but he pulled it off.

This was a close battle... but I gotta give it up to NYCSpitz. Good battle guys, peace.

2-0..

chea. uppin for KO fams

ON TOPIC: NYC
DEPTH: EZ
IMAGERY: Tie
ORIGINALITY: EZ
FLOW: NYC
MULTIS: NYC
VOCAB: Tie

I can't lie, this battle just did not impress me much. I blame it on the keystyles, so hopefully next time the victor of this battle can get over that. NYC was definitely more on topic than EZ was. I understand EZ's twist, but he didn't describe the struggle against Schizophrenia in the drop, he just mentioned it in the final dialogue. So to me it was more about a tale of how the man was crazy instead of how he actually OVERCAME his craziness. Get me? NYC had a good story, but after already hearing another drop about Gods from A.J. last round, it didn't impress me as much. I also didn't get why you included Thor in the verse, since he was part of Norse mythology, not Greek, and you were apparently trying to take the Greek route. But NYC did have a better flow, better multis, and a slightly more on topic story, so I'll have to give the battle to him. Close battle tho.

3-0 KO to NYCSPITZ.