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Old 11-04-2007, 06:29 PM   #1
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..Yeah..


He's so tipsy, fightin' his own misery,
Ridin' thru the times where his Highs became Lows quickly
Where his mind was inclined to deny the exposed sympathy,
Or kindness; obliging; blind by his own enmity
He's dyin' to get righteous,
Gave 'em some James Redfield, Nietzsche, and Ted Sider,
He read 'em to get wiser...
He always favored his son,
Took the pain with the fun,
But he lost him to a bullet on the day he was One
Caught a stray in the lung on the night of his birthday,
He sorta' took it heavy, changed his life in the worst way
Felt the force of the street,
He's a boss not a chief,
Bought some guns and some powder in the course of a week
He was torchin' the trees, gettin' high on the constant,
Found time for our conference in the Flo-rida Breeze...
..I taught him Existentialism over Heinekens,
..He took the lesson and expressed it via time within
But as it turns, he got advice from Jeanette,
Lost his mind at that time; in his eyes he's possessed
Showed a whole other side, ***** rides to the death,
Since the death of his child, he survived as a wreck
But his wife lost another to abortion papers,
In New Orleans; in the same Grove ward that Wayne loves
..Planned to get a next ***** if her benedict hit her
It happened to her mother, so she reckoned she'd disa-
-ppeared, but the hood's much smaller than she recognized,
And not everything that happens in there is televised
She's now a nervous wreck 'n hid in her friend's place,
Her husband caught a wind of it, now *****'s a head-case
..He brandished a shotgun,
Made his way and busted through the window like a bandit, maybe Maverick from Top Gun
He's so tipsy, fightin' his own misery,
Ridin' thru the times where his Highs became Lows quickly
Got his wife like a hostage, his mind's in pain,
I tried to talk him to his senses from his blindin' rage
But still, it's only so far Verizon logs ya' messages,
He's got her cryin' for her life, all he offers negligence
Called again and it startle him, drops his weapon quick,
She sees her opportunity, that shit was highly evident
It's now or never, is she's lookin' at Fed time(?),
Will her Last Resort put her picture in the headlines(?)
Her husband pulls a pistol from his ankle, not waist-line
I made it to the house and heard two shots the same time--


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Troy





What is love? Love is ignorance in it's purest essence
new confessions, no progression and heart broken adolescence
Here's the question, Is it still Bros over hoes when life's nicer
or does shit change, when you meet a dime piece and wife her?
.
.
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Started out, my boy Troy, and a bitch named Alexis, she from Texas
we well respected, but little did we know she'd teach us both a lesson
they met at a club one night, she approached him like she need the dick
four hours later, Troy power playin, tellin me about all of the freekshit
speedy shit, could he be falling for her? It seemed like an every-day fling
it's sheer evident, she's irrelevant, "tricks" like Halloween is an everyday thing!
thought it was a one night stand, duke's hype man told me the sex was murda
some shit I never heard of, who woulda thought they'd escalate further?
.
.
.
You buyin her jewels and new tents? yo T, what's sup wit you and this chick?
who Alexis? man She's the best bitch, she can wreck shit
no need to stess it, but she need to meet the exit
Dog you actin fake, and I know ya'll feelin straight
yo P what's wrong wit you? You know the sex is really....
Great. Yeah I know that, but you need to pull this hoe back
Ya'll having picture perfect moments together & this aint no fuckin Kodak
look I know that, this may hurt you, but I'm not tryna shut the hoe down, just slow down/
Word
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.
.
.
I go to talk to Lexis at her crib her Brest are things that'll blind
I almost faint in my mind, when we talk she has other things on her mind
Yo, I wanna talk to you about Troy. "Who? Troy, oh your silly boy
we talk alot, I got him whipped, buyin me all kinds of new jewery toys"
Well that why I'm here I think you should leave my boys heart alone
she walks by and touches my face, delicate skin is soft to the bone
undressing, while I'm talking, my opinion is no not void and lost
she's trying to fuck, while I'm tryna get my point across
damn, she's so acrobatic with the moves, but I'm too horny to be shook
minutes later, I'm deep stroking her moist pussy, wait has it gotten me hooked?
Needless to say I left satisfied with some shit on my mind/
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.
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A year later, such a fast change of the setting
wait? I'm looking in the mirror at a best man for a wedding?!!
what the fuck, I shouldn't have took her distraction
I knew I should took action, and a year later this wouldn't happened



fast foward, Troy and the bitch get married and Troy beats her ass, she kills him and now me and her fuck around. Now I'm in her apartment and weird shit happens. It turns out Troy gets all mad and shit haunts us. My last resort was to kill that bitch.


The End.
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speedy shit, could he be falling for her? It seemed like an every-day fling
it's sheer evident, she's irrelevant, "tricks" like Halloween is an everyday thing!

I really loved this line right here.


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Dog you actin fake, and I know ya'll feelin straight
yo P what's wrong wit you? You know the sex is really....
Great. Yeah I know that, but you need to pull this hoe back


Great dialogue right there, while still rhyming.



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I go to talk to Lexis at her crib her Brest are things that'll blind
I almost faint in my mind, when we talk she has other things on her mind
Yo, I wanna talk to you about Troy. "Who? Troy, oh your silly boy
we talk alot, I got him whipped, buyin me all kinds of new jewery toys"
Well that why I'm here I think you should leave my boys heart alone
she walks by and touches my face, delicate skin is soft to the bone
undressing, while I'm talking, my opinion is no not void and lost
she's trying to fuck, while I'm tryna get my point across
damn, she's so acrobatic with the moves, but I'm too horny to be shook
minutes later, I'm deep stroking her moist pussy, wait has it gotten me hooked?
Needless to say I left satisfied with some shit on my mind

I didn't really like this verse. It was descriptive though, and got the point across, and setup the piece properly for the ending.



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fast foward, Troy and the bitch get married and Troy beats her ass, she kills him and now me and her fuck around. Now I'm in her apartment and weird shit happens. It turns out Troy gets all mad and shit haunts us. My last resort was to kill that bitch.

Lol, that's funny...but it would have been better if you'd written that as part of your rhyme. I guess you were tired and rushed this. You write another verse for this, just for the hell of it and fix that ending, because besides a mediocre sex scene, this drop was damn good. Maybe you could drop this as a written if you fix it up a bit?




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He's dyin' to get righteous,
Gave 'em some James Redfield, Nietzsche, and Ted Sider
Lol. Good line.


Quote:
But he lost him to a bullet on the day he was One
Caught a stray in the lung on the night of his birthday,
He sorta' took it heavy, changed his life in the worst way
I liked that. Good rhyming pattern there.


Quote:
He was torchin' the trees, gettin' high on the constant,
Found time for our conference in the Flo-rida Breeze...
Lol, very clever man. Good wordplay there


Quote:
..I taught him Existentialism over Heinekens,
..He took the lesson and expressed it via time within
Another great bar. The way you set it up with the previous bar made me know exactly what you mean. Maybe other people won't catch this, but you can pretty much chill outside in Florida all year round. Getting high, drunk and talking life, that's good shit.


Quote:
He brandished a shotgun,
Made his way and busted through the window like a bandit, maybe Maverick from Top Gun
Good line.


Quote:
Her husband pulls a pistol from his ankle, not waist-line
I made it to the house and heard two shots the same time--

I'm guessing they killed each other. Solid ending.


On Topic - Damien. Both of you had similar endings, but Damien had more foreshadowing in his drop. He had a feeling of dread throughout most of his piece. Pressa, I wasn't sure what you were going to do.
Depth - Tie. Pressa would have won this had he finished with a proper ending IMO. Damien had a beginning, a middle and an end. Pressa had a great beginning, a middle, and...
Imagery - Tie. Neither outshined the other on this one.
Originality - Tie. You both had a similar approach to the subject, with different means to an end.
Flow - Pressa. It was close, but Pressa edged Damien slightly.
Multis - Tie. Pressa had a few, Damien had a few...
Vocab - Damien.
Enjoyment - Damien. It would have been a tie until Pressa'sending.
Hook/dialogue (if Applicable To Both) Pressa had that cypher style of dialogue. It was damn good.


Overall Vote : I might have voted for Pressa, or at least a tie...if Pressa hadn't rushed the ending. I'll probably lose my battle for the same reason. So much for waiting til the last minute, lol. This was a close battle, but Damien takes it.
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On Topic - Damien: he actually discussed the action within the work vs muthafuckin p who really didn't address the topic at all in the verse he just wrote it out at the end so we knew what happened.

Depth - Damien: he went into more detail which led up to the end and i understood how it got to that point. it was just a better developed story.

Imagery - Tie: damien did a good job painting a visual scene with a couple of witty phrases while muthafuckin pressa did just as well when he described certain scenes such as sex scene.

Originality - Tie: i really wasn't expecting either of the approaches yall took. they were so similar to each other that i really can't say one was better.

Flow - Muthafuckin p: his was set up in a way that it was easier to read so it seemed like all the lines just flowed together

Multis - Damien: i felt that p was rhyming some of the same words in his multies where as damien didnt. other than that it would have been a tie in this cat

Vocab - damien: just used some bigger words i felt

Enjoyment - muthafuckin p: i actually chuckelled outloud when i finished reading yours probably cuz i wasn't expecting it to end then nor was i expecting it to end that way. take that as a good or bad thing.

vote: damien - his was just a complete verse which told a decently developed story and was edged with some original concepts
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On Topic - Tie... Like Normal...
Depth - Damien... Took The Concept More Seriously...
Imagery - Tie.. Each Had Their Own Settings In Various Portions...
Originality - Damien...
Flow - P...
Multies - Damien...
Vocabulary - Damien, His Diction And Placement Got This...
Enjoyment - P... Had A More Fun Verse...

Thoughts...

Damien - Seemed Fairly Short, Didn't Count.. To Me There Was A Lot More That Could Have Been Painted Into Your Story, Not Exactly 'Key Portions' But Events That Could've Drawn Me Into Your Story More..

P. - I Liked Your Drop But It Didn't Really Take The Topic Into A Good Direction.. The Story You Chose Wasn't Bad, Just Wasn't Executed Very Well... Some Parts Were Just Too Bland With Nothing To Highlight Your Thoughts... Though There Was One Line I Enjoyed Quite A Bit For Some Reason, So Respect On That..

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she's trying to fuck, while I'm tryna get my point across


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