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Old 11-23-2007, 10:10 PM   #1
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Semi Final: Peter Griffin vs Eskinemo (3-0 KO)

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Topic: After a massive world war there are only 3 people left where you live, you are one of them. The other 2 are infected with a disease that makes them psychotic and are trying to kill you. What do you do and what is the outcome?

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Old 11-24-2007, 03:01 AM   #2
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Re: Semi Final: Peter Griffin vs Eskinemo

the topic is good luck..alrighty then













jk, it would of been dope to have the topic right now cause i am fucked up...good fucked up tho.

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Re: Semi Final: Peter Griffin vs Eskinemo

Damn its cloudy tonight
canít really see whatís above cause the sky is out of the sight
Iím trippin yo
I can hear the vibrant whistles of virus missiles shot off like silenced pistols
so listen close

I can see 2 wicked ghost with the scope
in the distance though, for an instance soÖBANG! FLASH! BOOM!.
DE-JA-VU, and the fuckin clouds are back
but the city has changed, its under many grounds of ash

I see the king of darkness with the most heavy crown to have
Iím not going to sleep in this so imma get a pound of crack
and smoke many rounds of that
so I wont hit the ground, collapse, or be found in trash.
drowned and around the rats.

yo the ghost are back, and all their clothes are black
and oh shit they holdin gats
enough of runnin I aint getting snuffed for nothing
but fuck the bluffin because their blood is gushing
and drippin out their open backs

Iím running down the streets with buildings falling down on me
I have to make it past these two contaminated and aggravated, assassinated
cancer patients that were up for cancellation.

these psychoís want flesh, its their cycle of death
fucking beast with teeth that aim right fo ya head
my flesh is burning as a thick fog surrounds the premises
ash and decay form all over the place and around the crevices

the first one lunges at me and I think Iím facing fuckin defeat
I duck and he jumps over with me barely duckin his feet
through its eyes I look like just something to eat
The other one approaches now IĎm truly stuck in the streets

man it sucks to be me but I got a tech tucked under the jeans
now I canít say I have nothing to squeeze when hunting for fiends
Iím reloadin the clip and dumpin it clean with hundreds of Bís
Iím watching these bullets tear through flesh and Iím loving the scene

finaly something to see, but I got one more to kill
I got a gun and the mother fucker has a forman grill
he chucked it and damn Iím fucked kid cause my forhead spill
shit welcome to this new morbid real




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Re: Semi Final: Peter Griffin vs Eskinemo

ok, keyed this with some writers block...
not my typical shit but i think u will enjoy it

This is a story about what the fuck can happen when your fucked out of your mind and you let your brain wonderÖ.

What the fuck, how did this happen, how did the US get bombed by a Canadian-Afghan
These Arabians laugh man thinkin itís a joke cause we got hit with a radiant blast, damn
Now Iím half an alien half man, tentacles stickin to shit where my arms used to be
I used to beat, but these suction cups isnít something thatís used to me
Amused to see this issue, biological warfare is a bitch, I wish I could correct it
But if you was rippin skin off ya dick donít ya think itíd be a bit hard to erect it?
I inspect shit, nothins what it once was, my blood runs cold
My guns unfold to ooze except I have no biceps or triceps, I look at these nuns unrobed
Letís get to my story before my funs untold, I high step by my steps while my grunge unfolds


The storyÖ.

It was a normal day except there were impaled animals n splattered bodies
This loss for grammars got me; entailed radicals stalk me to leave me shattered n cloddy
Battered n gaudy actions leave me no choice but to act fast
I blast past these motionless corpses so remorseless with tact *laughs*
As motion caught my attention not to mention the fucked noise that followed
Poised I swallowed down the lump in my throat then I heard a voice that hollowed
My soul, wallow in wonder or face the fear that hit my quickly?
Swiftly kicking my legs into a churning motion, this burning notion crept so slickly
Sickly was the feeling I felt when I was hit with something prickly
Made my motions a bit restrictive lungs a bit constrictive
Inflictive damage from 2 characters approaching with hazy eyes that were addictive
Vindictive advancement, soon my enhancement became well endowed
A gradual transformation like a belly holding a swelling child
My dwelling milds as my heart paces I must face this lace this
Meeting with a twist of my own, a firm grip on my throne this is where my base is
The basis of my next action will be so undermining all the graces
In world cant stop my actions, their skin droops down like what a sharpaiís is
The chase is on, movement returns n with my tentacle whipping and gripping their skin
The ripping begins, flesh is thrown next is bone from chipping their chin
Nipping n clipping I win chipping their drippings I pin
Them into a trailer, ones a male the other a female I nail her
N tailor my blows, like Santa Claus Iím the wailer of Hoís n a bear like Baylor
Not scared to play her my tentacle sticks a nipple n rips it off
My dick gets off while my absurd suction cups leave rounds to skin like a Kolitchnikoff
These tits is off, as expected nothing but silicone, hope she has her bill at home
Ro-till a phone n get her money back, cause this hunnies rack is still a lone
Set of tits left in this city, pretty shitty I ripped them off after my dick gets off
This bitch gets caught tryin to cough this black liquid, its sick shit, lets get some chalk
To outline this body, cause I just snapped her spinal chord the guy let out a mild mourn
She must have been pregnant cause out popped a blood sack, a child born
Well what was formed of it any ways, it didnít have any legs but it did have a finger
This stench lingers, gagging off the blood looked like a bitch ragging I felt a stinger
He bit my tentacle and ripped off a suction cup, now this munchkins fucked
How can a fetus be alive, weary eyes I see spots lookin for stability in this drunken clutch
I come to, and stomp this baby, now it turned into a Carmen SanDiego gumshoe
Iím done dude, its time to end this madness, theres no chance to run too
The guy thatís left starts to cry his best typical zombie moan
Now I prep this bitch for failure like wearing Abercrombie clothes
Its time to end this story no more monster or plague I must stop it
Like a rocket it my tentacle I shot it straight into his eye socket
Rip out the eyes as he cries in demise soon heíll be left laid tattered
In a brave manner I rip out his brain matter and feast on it as my main platter



No more plague or monsters, just me and my tentacle dick jackin selfÖ
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Re: Semi Final: Peter Griffin vs Eskinemo (0-0) Verses In!!

Got damn this shit was tight.

Both had amazing verses, two totally different takes on the same topic, makes for a good collab.

First of let me break this down

imagery-tied, both painted a picture in my head, i was into it the whole time, had a 28 weeks later feel to it. Both we're very descriptive in different ways.

Flow-Eskinemo, He had a nice structure, it was more complex than your typical multis, it was an off beat rhyme scheme that blended well with the topical.

Complexity-tied, like i said, both took different takes on the topic, both were complex in the story telling.

Creativity-Gen, i enjoyed the vivid imagery and fucked up detail he portrayed in his verse, it was a fucked up abstract outlook on the topic, but it was creative as hell, i dont think anyone can argue that.

Storyline-Tied, both kept me interested

Ending-Gen, felt eskinemo kind of just ended his, it was just getting into the action than it kind of just stopped.

Vote-Gen

Amazing topical bought, repped both.
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Re: Semi Final: Peter Griffin vs Eskinemo (0-0) Verses In!!

never voted on topicals before...so count it if you want

On Topic-gen
Depth-gen - felt he went more into the story
Imagery - close, but gen
Originality - gen, that was a fucked up crazy story
Flow - eskimo, if gens 2nd part was like his first he woulda took it
Multis - tie
Vocab - gen
Enjoyment - i liked yours eskimo but gens story was easier to follow = more enjoyment
Hook/dialogue- gen

vote-gen

good battle fellas

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On Topic - I believe you stayed on topic; I saw no deviation here - [ 5/5 ]
Depth - I read the verse twice (once not knowing the topic then again after I did); the length didnít allow you to expound much which hurt you in the end - [ 3.5/5 ]
Imagery - The imagery was definitely on point; the story was well received - [ 4/5 ]
Originality - I somewhat expected this post apocalyptical scenario, similar to I AM LEGEND maybe - [ 3.5/5 ]
Flow - Definitely great; an ease to read and catch the cadence - [ 5/5 ]
Multis - None seemed too forced; scattered liberally; easy to pick up on but sorta simplistic - [ 4.5/5 ]
Vocab - You didnít really stretch yaí verbiage at all, man; I think you had the majority of your vocab in one or two bars, actually - [ 2.5/5 ]
Enjoyment - Personally, I enjoyed the verse; there were times where I found some redundancy and minor cases of malapropism, but it was damn entertaining nonetheless - [ 4/5 ]
Hook/dialogue (if Applicable To Both) - N/A

TOTAL: 32/40 - 80%

Vokals:
On Topic - Never waivered from the topic at all - [ 5/5 ]
Depth - Anyone who read this should see the depth you had; everything was explained in its entirety - [ 4.5/5 ]
Imagery - Strong imagery; zombie rape = nasty, but then it sorta felt right - [ 5/5 ]
Originality - Anyone who read even half of the verse could tell its originality - [ 5/5 ]
Flow - Honestly, the lines were consistent to the point that I could catch the cadence instantly - [ 4.5/5 ]
Multis - The multis were everywhere; the line length made it easy for you to utilize them consistently - [ 4/5 ]
Vocab - On point and found throughout the verse - [ 4.5/5 ]
Enjoyment - I wasnít sure if I was supposed to laugh while reading yaí verse, but I sure it; but it was still damn good - [ 5/5 ]
Hook/dialogue (if Applicable To Both) - N/A

TOTAL: 37.5/40 ~ 94%

..Both verses were nice. Even though you didnít really put too much time into yours, Esk, I still found it a nice read. Easy to read and entertaining. Vok, thatís one hell of a key, man. Sorta like the days of old..

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Re: Semi Final: Peter Griffin vs Eskinemo (0-0) Verses In!!

1-0, 2-0, 3-0?
i let nemo say if the 1st 2 count
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Re: Semi Final: Peter Griffin vs Eskinemo (0-0) Verses In!!

I'll vote later just in case.
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