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Dominate vs Burden. [EXPERIENCED VOTES ONLY].
4 Bars, due Tuesday.
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Re: Dominate vs Burden.
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Re: Dominate vs Burden.
http://www.rapworlds.com/forums/show...8&postcount=13
http://www.rapworlds.com/forums/show...0&postcount=10 Do you wanna make it a bit longer, actually? Maybe like 8 bars? We could up the deadline if you need... Or if not we'll stick with 4 on tues... |
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Just… Listen, your every sentence is forced.. Wack bastard, you’re no effort to torch Cuz you’re “Not Over Me, even when I Half Asset” – … like Regrettin’ Divorce! Get expressin’ remorse, you’re beneath dope, & the ego is tainting w/ YOUR look So please, just “Add Mitt to your Position” like Romney Campaigning to George Bush You still an ’04 rook, if Practice makes perfect? Gotta doubt THAT’S the truth - Cuz with past reviewed, ANYWAY I look at it I’m not seeing that Maxim Proved (Mac’s improved) Sig shows he can’t stand to lose, but this magnitude? He’ll concede trodden w/ lines So If you see Burden “Put Up n A-ward From This” … it’s cuz he been Hospitalized! You awkward in rhymes, got nobodies gassin you when they feed your damn drops But the pretense ain’t fooling vets - ya Country’s Emblem only thing that Sham rocks Fam stop, you’re NOT a vet – skills been the same from foundations to currently So if “You-rose, to Become Something Else?” It’s cuz I’m Exchanging a Currency Maiming him hurriedly, Hades bout to get hit with mass abrasions, lacerations Beat him already - so with H, 2-0 Coming Up Now... You could call it Evaporation! You don’t stand adjacent.. But I’ll let the scandel just propagate, til ya pen is empty Cuz you’d NEVER “Hold a Candle to Dominate”, w/o Hot Wax Torture in SnM Scenes ... It's the end B. |
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Dom Aka Shane, . . Both w/ the force behind us? Ha ! You beating me was one of many short surprises. You've done ''A Lottery Peat In - Amongst Others'' w/o ''Bogs, being raffled off as prizes''... Shoo, mate. but it's too late to alter your bolstered crude fate 'cause dude, WAIT! If it's a ''Tyrese Cycling, won't save you'' - w/o ''Gibson, failing to lose weight''... [Tie Recycling] Ending it all? I'll manage and damage the twerp, he's a FAG! it was average at first, But ''SueAside - He STILL Likes To Add Komen'' - Ha, It's not because he's a fan of her work! ... Get bashed/hurled stuck. In the past, twirled & asked about losing - does it hurt much? You'll ''Dicot, In your OWN words'' - so I ''won't take a Leaf, out of YOUR book''... You fell off, fuckin' wimp it's vile, you CAN'T beat me with that simple style, You ''Peaked, way back in the day - it was nothin! '' similar to ''Porn addicts, STILL in denial''... Twist this shit slow ; MY verse? it's got a slick flow & bashes his wits, soo.. Now ''Shane, MAC beat you'' - but dude, this battles definitely NOT a Big Show... W/ POTENTIAL like a tentative lever PUSH IT, it's a sensitive treasure, Now you ''Willow Pen, The FloodGates'' w/o - ''Orchards, ..taking preventative measures''... Ha, get folded might is lacking as I'm flowing tight, Aussies are NOT the boldest type. To smack you to the ''Eyre, would fit nicely'' - as ''Birthing you..was your countries LOWEST point''. . . ` Vacate the throne. -Burd.
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.... and feeding is kind of a no-no.... dont do it in future.... Last edited by Dominate; 03-13-2008 at 06:36 PM. |
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Re: Dominate vs Burden. [EXPERIENCED VOTES ONLY].
ill give a fair, unbiased vote if ud like. im just as experienced as both of u
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Re: Dominate vs Burden. [EXPERIENCED VOTES ONLY].
Shit yea. Got you and him mixed up. Cool if I edit those quotes out??
And meh, if the bar fits - use it. Wouldn't call it feeding - just pointing out you part recycled. lol, don't go all Philly on me.
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Re: Dominate vs Burden. [EXPERIENCED VOTES ONLY].
G'head and edit..
LoL @ Philly... Anything you use that you couldn't have if you'd gone first IS feeding... I'm not tripping... just saying... if we battle again sometime in the future, don't do it again... or you can go first even... Iron you're probably cool, but I think Burd & I are both looking for opinions from people we know... |
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Re: Dominate vs Burden. [EXPERIENCED VOTES ONLY].
Dominate
Listen, your every sentence is forced.. Wack bastard, you’re no effort to torch Cuz you’re “Not Over Me, even when I Half Asset” – … like Regrettin’ Divorce! Good wordplay/personal opener. Get expressin’ remorse, you’re beneath dope, & the ego is tainting w/ YOUR look So please, just “Add Mitt to your Position” like Romney Campaigning to George Bush Good wordplay follow-up. You still an ’04 rook, if Practice makes perfect? Gotta doubt THAT’S the truth - Cuz with past reviewed, ANYWAY I look at it I’m not seeing that Maxim Proved Good nameplay, but he's not from '04 I don't think. Sig shows he can’t stand to lose, but this magnitude? He’ll concede trodden w/ lines So If you see Burden “Put Up n A-ward From This” … it’s cuz he been Hospitalized! Not the most original of wordplay, but a solid flip. You awkward in rhymes, got nobodies gassin you when they feed your damn drops But the pretense ain’t fooling vets - ya Country’s Emblem only thing that Sham rocks Used similar wordplay before, but the personal makes it relevant. Fam stop, you’re NOT a vet – skills been the same from foundations to currently So if “You-rose, to Become Something Else?” It’s cuz I’m Exchanging a Currency The Eu/you wordplay is a little forced to me, but otherwise it's solid. Maiming him hurriedly, Hades bout to get hit with mass abrasions, lacerations Beat him already - so with H, 2-0 Coming Up Now... You could call it Evaporation! Good nameplay/personal, pretty creative. You don’t stand adjacent.. But I’ll let the scandel just propagate, til ya pen is empty Cuz you’d NEVER “Hold a Candle to Dominate”, w/o Hot Wax Torture in SnM Scenes You used self-nameplay similarly before, but this was a solid flip. Burden Both w/ the force behind us? Ha ! You beating me was one of many short surprises. You've done ''A Lottery Peat In - Amongst Others'' w/o ''Bogs, being raffled off as prizes''... The lottery wordplay has been done many times, by Dominate even against me, but the flip is solid. The fact that it's feeding though brings it down a bit. Shoo, mate. but it's too late to alter your bolstered crude fate 'cause dude, WAIT! If it's a ''Tyrese Cycling, won't save you'' - w/o ''Gibson, failing to lose weight''... I used a Tyrese/recycling wordplay against NyVillan on IHH, but this was a solid flip. The personal doesn't hit though because that was Ayp. Ending it all? I'll manage and damage the twerp, he's a FAG! it was average at first, But ''SueAside - He STILL Likes To Add Komen'' - Ha, It's not because he's a fan of her work! ... Used the Sue Aside wordplay in my second battle with Graven Image on IHH, but this was a solid flip. Get bashed/hurled stuck. In the past, twirled & asked about losing - does it hurt much? You'll ''Dicot, In your OWN words'' - so I ''won't take a Leaf, out of YOUR book''... Good wordplay and punchline, pretty original. You fell off, fuckin' wimp it's vile, you CAN'T beat me with that simple style, You ''Peaked, way back in the day - it was nothin! '' similar to ''Porn addicts, STILL in denial''... This is was pretty solid. Twist this shit slow ; MY verse? it's got a slick flow & bashes his wits, soo.. Now ''Shane, MAC beat you'' - but dude, this battles definitely NOT a Big Show... You used a Big Show play on RB in the punchline league not too long ago, kind've hypocritical. Also, it's Shane O-Mac, not Shane Mac. This is too bad because the concept was really good. W/ POTENTIAL like a tentative lever PUSH IT, it's a sensitive treasure, Now you ''Willow Pen, The FloodGates'' w/o - ''Orchards, ..taking preventative measures''... I take it you mean that the orchards wouldn't be the ones taking the preventative measures considering that wouldn't make much sense. Pretty good wordpaly. Ha, get folded might is lacking as I'm flowing tight, Aussies are NOT the boldest type. To smack you to the ''Eyre, would fit nicely'' - as ''Birthing you..was your countries LOWEST point''. Pretty good personal closer, original wordplay. Overall: This was a pretty close battle, but in the end, I felt that Dominate came a little more consistent. Both had concepts I've seen before and flipped them well enough, but that Big Show bar really ruined Burden's chances of winning. Add that to the feeding and the false recycling personal and Dom manages to edge this one out. Good battle, fellas. Vote: Dominate
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